My Father's Voice Made Poetry Mine
A remembrance of my dad and poetry.113 total reviews
Comment from Chris Edwards
Hi Pearl, As promised I have taken a look at 'my father's Voice Made Poetry Mine' and yes this is another beautiful poem and very well crafted, and I am sure that your father would be extremely proud to have influenced you on your poetic path.You are a really talented writer.Absolutely no offence intended here,but my favourite of the two is 'My Mothers Voice' as this poem really did stun me last night.I read it three times before leaving my comment as it is simply sublime.
My very best wishes,
Chris.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hi Pearl, As promised I have taken a look at 'my father's Voice Made Poetry Mine' and yes this is another beautiful poem and very well crafted, and I am sure that your father would be extremely proud to have influenced you on your poetic path.You are a really talented writer.Absolutely no offence intended here,but my favourite of the two is 'My Mothers Voice' as this poem really did stun me last night.I read it three times before leaving my comment as it is simply sublime.
My very best wishes,
Chris.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hey, we all have favorites - my children have favorites, and they wouldn't offend me for all the tea in China LOL Thanks for a lovely review and for taking the time to look up post no longer being promoted and paying the big bucks LOL
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You are most very welcome, I will look out for more of your work Pearl as I really like your writing style.
Best wishes,
Chris.
Comment from lafaerychik
What a wonderful poem. This poem really resonated with me on a personal level because my father, too, would recite poetry to me as a child. There was a miniature golf course we would go to. One of the holes had a big Tiger over it. The second we would get to that hole a boisterous voice would start shouting "Tiger Tiger burning bright!! In the forest of the night! What immortal hand or eye dare frame thy fearful symmetry" From William Blake's 'Tiger.' Like you, I had no idea what this meant, but I loved it. Your poem makes me feel like I was there.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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What a wonderful poem. This poem really resonated with me on a personal level because my father, too, would recite poetry to me as a child. There was a miniature golf course we would go to. One of the holes had a big Tiger over it. The second we would get to that hole a boisterous voice would start shouting "Tiger Tiger burning bright!! In the forest of the night! What immortal hand or eye dare frame thy fearful symmetry" From William Blake's 'Tiger.' Like you, I had no idea what this meant, but I loved it. Your poem makes me feel like I was there.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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Now you've gone and made your mother cry :-) I love you so much, and that's not normally what I tell my reviewers :-)
Comment from sngldad4gd
Funny, my dad used to do those quip lil poems, most were humorous that he heard while he was working as a professional painter, when there was such a thing as professional painters. He was 65 when I was born, and almost 100 when he died. He went on cattle drives and such, being born in 1887. They did have a lot of great wisdom for those who listened didn't they. Another great memory maker. Ray :>)
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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Funny, my dad used to do those quip lil poems, most were humorous that he heard while he was working as a professional painter, when there was such a thing as professional painters. He was 65 when I was born, and almost 100 when he died. He went on cattle drives and such, being born in 1887. They did have a lot of great wisdom for those who listened didn't they. Another great memory maker. Ray :>)
Comment Written 11-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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My Grandpa Nelsen was a painter and wallpaperer. I thought my dad was old, being 42 when I was born! I love to hear other people's memories and to know they revisited them because of something I triggered. Thank you!
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Yep my dad would clean his paint gun every night when he used to paint. He worked in Northern california but we moved to Deming new Mexico for his health. Doc said if you stay in Cali he would live one more year, we moved and he lived 30 more. tough ol birds,lol. Ray :>)
Comment from luna
What a lovely poem in tribute to your father and his poetry. Thank you for sharing your talent with us here on the site, you obviously gained a love for poetry from listening to your father. I appreciate the author's notes, they really added a flavor to the poem (which would have stood well on it's own). Keep up the good work.
Yours,
Luna *smile*
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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What a lovely poem in tribute to your father and his poetry. Thank you for sharing your talent with us here on the site, you obviously gained a love for poetry from listening to your father. I appreciate the author's notes, they really added a flavor to the poem (which would have stood well on it's own). Keep up the good work.
Yours,
Luna *smile*
Comment Written 11-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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Thank you for appreciating both the poem and the author's notes. So many people don't even read the notes, which is why they continue to tell me Orphant is spelled wrong!! LOL One lady even docked a star for it even though I explain why it should be that way. :-D Peace, Brooke
Comment from onslaught of thought
i love this just because i wish my relationship with my father was so memorable. my father is super intelligent and very successful, but he only graced my family and i with money to support us. there was nothing he gave me as i grew save it be that i swore to myself i would be close to my own children. wonderful work. thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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i love this just because i wish my relationship with my father was so memorable. my father is super intelligent and very successful, but he only graced my family and i with money to support us. there was nothing he gave me as i grew save it be that i swore to myself i would be close to my own children. wonderful work. thanks for sharing
Comment Written 11-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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My dad was an imperfect man in many ways, but he raised me after my mother died when I had just turned 8, and as a dad of a small child, he was tops. We spent hours and hours together every day.
Even when I was a teen and he and I had turbulent political arguments in the 60's, we still shared hours together over the more personal and less divisive things. I am lucky indeed. Thank you for a lovely review. :-)
Comment from dawn4365
I could tell you loved your dad very much and it shows in your poem. It is a nice tribute to him. Your rhyming is on beat. THis adds to the wonderment you show as yourself as a child listening to you father recite the poems.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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I could tell you loved your dad very much and it shows in your poem. It is a nice tribute to him. Your rhyming is on beat. THis adds to the wonderment you show as yourself as a child listening to you father recite the poems.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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I am in your debt for such kind words. :-)
Comment from Mike K2
I was made to recite poetry and hated it. It takes a special teacher to convey what poetry is all about. I discover this on my own. You did a very fine job at chronicling your father and his love for poetry.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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I was made to recite poetry and hated it. It takes a special teacher to convey what poetry is all about. I discover this on my own. You did a very fine job at chronicling your father and his love for poetry.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2008
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I love Shakespeare. I even loved him in high school. But, yes, I'm like you - I did not like having to memorize passages from him in high school. Thank you for your wonderful review. :-)a
Comment from Jarlsbane
This is my first six star rating I have given ever!! I am standing at ovation! Obviously I like this poem alot... lol this work is well constructed with intelligent word choices, mature rhymes and powerful emotional content... Great Job! My only hitch (and you knew I would find one) lol In stanza 6 you rhyme "last and transfixed" --- please, please, please fix that! lol -Jarls
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2008
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This is my first six star rating I have given ever!! I am standing at ovation! Obviously I like this poem alot... lol this work is well constructed with intelligent word choices, mature rhymes and powerful emotional content... Great Job! My only hitch (and you knew I would find one) lol In stanza 6 you rhyme "last and transfixed" --- please, please, please fix that! lol -Jarls
Comment Written 10-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2008
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I at first had next and transfixed, still not a perfect rhyme, and then an earlier reviewer pointed out that this did not make the sense I wished it to, with each new word getting better, not worse. If you have an idea of how to fix it and make it rhyme better, which I know it doesn't, I would welcome suggestions! :-D Thank you for your most generous review -I am honored it is your first 6. :-) Peace, Brooke
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When I didn't know meanings, I felt the sound,
each syllable lovelier than the last.
By the beauty of words I sat spellbound -
by the power of his voice i was held fast.
This is just a suggestion to get you thinking.. take it and make it your own... Jarls (mike)
Comment from LegendaryAngel
Very nice rhyming and writing technique. You draw readers into what you write becuase of good use of descriptive wording, so I can relate just by reading. I think you did a very good job with this.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2008
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Very nice rhyming and writing technique. You draw readers into what you write becuase of good use of descriptive wording, so I can relate just by reading. I think you did a very good job with this.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much for a thoughtful review :-)
Comment from HalfHoff
Being more than just a bit of a daddy's girl myself, this tribute to your father brought tears to my eyes. Do you know how proud he is of you?! My father's voice is my favorite sound, too. Outstanding doll! XO Lea Ann
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2008
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Being more than just a bit of a daddy's girl myself, this tribute to your father brought tears to my eyes. Do you know how proud he is of you?! My father's voice is my favorite sound, too. Outstanding doll! XO Lea Ann
Comment Written 10-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2008
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What a kind and thoughtful review - thank you :-)
