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A poem about a lasting memory of my mother.101 total reviews
Comment from eveeator
thankyou for sharing this lovely memory of your mother with us/me, you have from the title, to the artwork of the dogwood blossoms through to the colour scheme presented this in a strong and clean looking presentation which works so well with your memory of your mother and the shine and sparkle of the floor, excellently thought and written and a great tribute, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2008
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thankyou for sharing this lovely memory of your mother with us/me, you have from the title, to the artwork of the dogwood blossoms through to the colour scheme presented this in a strong and clean looking presentation which works so well with your memory of your mother and the shine and sparkle of the floor, excellently thought and written and a great tribute, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 27-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2008
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thank you so much - here you are being exceedingly kind once more today :-) Brooke
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Ah, honey, this one is a tear-jerker, truly! So well written with such emotional appeal and honesty....I loved it and your explanation of the picture you presented is amazing. Great work. Good luck in the contest...you got my vote! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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Ah, honey, this one is a tear-jerker, truly! So well written with such emotional appeal and honesty....I loved it and your explanation of the picture you presented is amazing. Great work. Good luck in the contest...you got my vote! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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It is one of my favorite of my own poems - it made my daughter Miranda cry, so that is all the praise it ever needs - no need to win contests after that. I'm so gratified it made you feel what I was trying to convey. Peace, Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
i think the dogwood blossoms are very appropriate. if i recall correctly, the dogwood tree is pretty hardy. often stands the test of time like your love for your mother.
easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. stanzas are well written. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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brooke,
i think the dogwood blossoms are very appropriate. if i recall correctly, the dogwood tree is pretty hardy. often stands the test of time like your love for your mother.
easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. stanzas are well written. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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What lovely things to say - thank you for a warm and most welcome review :-) Brooke
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brooke,
you are very welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from Minglement
This was touching and an interesting memory to focus on. It paints a vivid picture for us, one you see in your mind's eye. Love that you brought it back to the central thought at the end. Nice entry.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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This was touching and an interesting memory to focus on. It paints a vivid picture for us, one you see in your mind's eye. Love that you brought it back to the central thought at the end. Nice entry.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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I'm so glad you liked this one, a poem dear to my heart. Peace, Brooke :-)
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Dear to your heart - it shows! Good luck.
Comment from Twomoon
adewpearl, this was a beautiful poem, touching and even with memories so few, you were still able to grab onto memories that touched you, and these allowed you to see the shine... a beautiful thought. goodluck, much love twomoon
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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adewpearl, this was a beautiful poem, touching and even with memories so few, you were still able to grab onto memories that touched you, and these allowed you to see the shine... a beautiful thought. goodluck, much love twomoon
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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I am so glad this poem connected with you emotionally :-) thank you! Brooke :-)
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
lovely, gentle presentation; I remember those dang kneeling pads lol.
Oh this is touching; how hard for a child whose mother transitions early on; One of my best friends left a 6 yr old girl; it was heartbreaking;
well written; touching; no corrections at all; best wishes in the voting booth :-)
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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lovely, gentle presentation; I remember those dang kneeling pads lol.
Oh this is touching; how hard for a child whose mother transitions early on; One of my best friends left a 6 yr old girl; it was heartbreaking;
well written; touching; no corrections at all; best wishes in the voting booth :-)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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thanks so much - you are a warm person and kind reviewer :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome Dear Brook :-) I continue to be impressed by your creative writing skill :-) Blessings on your day, Tricia
Comment from bard owl
What a sadly brief time you had with your mother. You paint a vivid picture with your words of her scrubbing the floor for those she loved. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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What a sadly brief time you had with your mother. You paint a vivid picture with your words of her scrubbing the floor for those she loved. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Linda, thank you for such gracious comments. This is one of my favorite poems I've ever written and it made my daughter Miranda cry, so I don't much care if it wins a contest or not. :-) You are most kind, Brooke :-)
Comment from EllieKaye
I love when you write about your Mom. I remember you writing about her before, and also that you lost her when very young. This is such a simple memory, but I can understand its importance, because it is one of so few. Your poem is gentle and personal and in its lines is deep emotion and like always, beauty.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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I love when you write about your Mom. I remember you writing about her before, and also that you lost her when very young. This is such a simple memory, but I can understand its importance, because it is one of so few. Your poem is gentle and personal and in its lines is deep emotion and like always, beauty.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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thanks so much - I'm so happy this struck a chord with you.
Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from Donovan
Thank you for sharing this story of your mother. I am always amazed at what we remember about our loved ones that pass, what we remember, it is almost always the simple things of life. I am sure your mother is very proud of you.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Thank you for sharing this story of your mother. I am always amazed at what we remember about our loved ones that pass, what we remember, it is almost always the simple things of life. I am sure your mother is very proud of you.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Donovan, I wrote a poem that took the joking out of you! I'm touched, but I wouldn't have minded the joking anyway :-) You're most kind. Peace, Brooke
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You wrote a very beautiful poem about your mother. I would always want to be respectful of that. She is proud of you....and also knows what a rascal you can be.
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thank you, my respectful jokester :-) Brooke
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Brooke, I've read this before, but not sure why I didn't get to leave a review. I thought I did.
I love the picture. Always love things in the shade of green and white. So pleasing to the eyes. Now your poem would still do well without the picture. I have the same image of my mother too, and I remember doing it too. We enjoyed playing with water while scrubbing the floor.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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Hi Brooke, I've read this before, but not sure why I didn't get to leave a review. I thought I did.
I love the picture. Always love things in the shade of green and white. So pleasing to the eyes. Now your poem would still do well without the picture. I have the same image of my mother too, and I remember doing it too. We enjoyed playing with water while scrubbing the floor.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2008
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thank you - I found that when I didn't have pictures, some people would go on and on about why I should, so now I do it all the time. I'm glad my memories brought up memories of your own mom. Peace, Brooke :-)
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my mother is still around, just that we stay quite far apart, about 7-8 hours drive. I try to see her more often nowadays.
