I Heard America Call My Name
Contest Entry: Dialogue Poem: America - WWII91 total reviews
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Hi Mrs KT
Oh to give you a six for this, but the intention and thought will have to do for now. This was a heart-wrenching write and one that brought tears to my eyes, and a feeling of frustration at the different attitudes towards both young soldiers. What is true loyalty anyway? Being born in a country and being patriotic to it, or becoming a citizen of a country other than that of your birth and remaining loyal to it. Begs the question.
Very thought provoking, sensitive and written with a beautiful sense of fairness and justice for all.
Tremendous job and best of luck with the contest! xoxoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hi Mrs KT
Oh to give you a six for this, but the intention and thought will have to do for now. This was a heart-wrenching write and one that brought tears to my eyes, and a feeling of frustration at the different attitudes towards both young soldiers. What is true loyalty anyway? Being born in a country and being patriotic to it, or becoming a citizen of a country other than that of your birth and remaining loyal to it. Begs the question.
Very thought provoking, sensitive and written with a beautiful sense of fairness and justice for all.
Tremendous job and best of luck with the contest! xoxoxoxoxo
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hello! Thank you for your thoughtful and thorough review. Most assuredly, one of the saddest times in our country..diabe
Comment from Scarlettdreams
This is amazingly well done. If I had a sixer to award you I certainly would without hesitation. Although lengthy, it was most profound and I found myself riveted till the end. Awesome done. Bravo Bravo
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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This is amazingly well done. If I had a sixer to award you I certainly would without hesitation. Although lengthy, it was most profound and I found myself riveted till the end. Awesome done. Bravo Bravo
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed your visit! Thank you! diane
Comment from nitad
Wow.
Diane, that was amazing! I've never seen a poem written that way before, and of course, you nailed it!
I'm sorry I don't have a six left to give you.
What a stunning, disconcerting, heartbreaking and thought provoking read that was. thank you for sharing it with us and for reminding us of those who suffered during that most difficult time in our history.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Nita
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Wow.
Diane, that was amazing! I've never seen a poem written that way before, and of course, you nailed it!
I'm sorry I don't have a six left to give you.
What a stunning, disconcerting, heartbreaking and thought provoking read that was. thank you for sharing it with us and for reminding us of those who suffered during that most difficult time in our history.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Nita
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hello Nita! I had never written an offering like this, but the words lended themselves so well, and it is a story I have wanted to share for a long time. Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review diane
Comment from AlvinTEthington
This is a good dialogue poem, and illustrates well the commonality of and differences between Japanese and American cultures. Since I often taught the European Holocaust when I taught college, I would always explain that America had concentration camps; the Nazis had death camps. You capture well that surrendering in Japanese culture is disdained more than suicide. You give a face to bare historical facts and show the human side of inhuman circumstances. I do believe, at least I know in California, that recently the Japanese-Americans who were at the concentration camps were granted and received monetary reparations from the federal government.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2008
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This is a good dialogue poem, and illustrates well the commonality of and differences between Japanese and American cultures. Since I often taught the European Holocaust when I taught college, I would always explain that America had concentration camps; the Nazis had death camps. You capture well that surrendering in Japanese culture is disdained more than suicide. You give a face to bare historical facts and show the human side of inhuman circumstances. I do believe, at least I know in California, that recently the Japanese-Americans who were at the concentration camps were granted and received monetary reparations from the federal government.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2008
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Hello Al! So pleased you stopped by. Thank you for your thoughtful review Yes, forty years after the end of WW!! Congress made reparations of $20,000.00 to Japanese- American survivors of the war relocation camps and their descendents. The American soldier in this offering is loosely based upon my uncle, Sargeant William Kenel, who survived the Bataan Death March, was imprisoned in Cabanatuan, and was killed - by the guns of an American submarine - the USS Snook. The commander of the Snook could not discern that the ship that carried my uncle and 1700 other soldiers was a POW ship; it wasn't marked properly. Thus, my uncle and the men aboard drowned in the China Sea.
Have you ever written a dialogue poem? I really enjoyed penning this...Take Care...diane
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I haven't written a dialogue poem; when I try, it usually turns into a script.
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
An exellcent free verse poem that meets the criteria for the contest. It is also a fuklly intact narrative, historical at that, which paints a cery vivid and stark picture with simple but powerful words. No spags to be found and the last line that returns to the subject planting flowers is somehoe sow appropo.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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An exellcent free verse poem that meets the criteria for the contest. It is also a fuklly intact narrative, historical at that, which paints a cery vivid and stark picture with simple but powerful words. No spags to be found and the last line that returns to the subject planting flowers is somehoe sow appropo.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hello Steven! So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed your visit! Thank you! diane
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Comment from heyjude
Mrs. KT,
Very interesting to think of how two men might look at the war.
War is sad. Many people's lives are changed. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Mrs. KT,
Very interesting to think of how two men might look at the war.
War is sad. Many people's lives are changed. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hello Friend! So pleased you enjoyed my offering and thank you! diane
Comment from wirenut
Mrs. KT,
making people see the light is a dangerous thing. you ahve done an excellent job with this powerful poem proving once again that words and you are not strangers but well acquainted.
I am glad I picked on this for my afternoon reading
well done!
rick
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Mrs. KT,
making people see the light is a dangerous thing. you ahve done an excellent job with this powerful poem proving once again that words and you are not strangers but well acquainted.
I am glad I picked on this for my afternoon reading
well done!
rick
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hello Rick! Your rendering that "words and you are not stranges but well acquainted" surely made me smile. How thoughtful of you to write so...Thank you! diane
Comment from wierdgrace
wow this is so emotional, I understand where each and every word is telling us. The structure did flow well for a story, I am writing a diary of wwii for my in laws who was in Germany. I wrote a short letter about Vietnam because of my uncle. Thank you again for reminded us of the war and its casualities.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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wow this is so emotional, I understand where each and every word is telling us. The structure did flow well for a story, I am writing a diary of wwii for my in laws who was in Germany. I wrote a short letter about Vietnam because of my uncle. Thank you again for reminded us of the war and its casualities.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hello! So pleased you enjoyed your visit and my offering. What a sad time for America...diane
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
A Classic! In my humble but confident opinion, I feel this should be reprinted and made availabe on Amazon.com for download. Very, very eye-opening and moving!
Dave
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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A Classic! In my humble but confident opinion, I feel this should be reprinted and made availabe on Amazon.com for download. Very, very eye-opening and moving!
Dave
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hello! How pleased I am that you found my offering exceptional. Thank you so much! diane
Comment from malachi1206
I believe this is the first true dialogue poem I have seen on fanstory for a while it was done excellently and I know the heartbreak that started this process excellent piece malachi1206
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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I believe this is the first true dialogue poem I have seen on fanstory for a while it was done excellently and I know the heartbreak that started this process excellent piece malachi1206
Comment Written 04-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Hello! Thank you so much for your kind review! Am so pleased you stopped by...diane
