I Heard America Call My Name
Contest Entry: Dialogue Poem: America - WWII91 total reviews
Comment from Ian Ayris
Quite simply one of the best pieces of work I have read on this site. Courageous and original, simply stated and consistent throughout. You brought a lump to my throat at the end through the repetition of those last two lines, reminding us once again that we are all one.
Thank you for a true experience.
Warmest regards,
Ian
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008
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Quite simply one of the best pieces of work I have read on this site. Courageous and original, simply stated and consistent throughout. You brought a lump to my throat at the end through the repetition of those last two lines, reminding us once again that we are all one.
Thank you for a true experience.
Warmest regards,
Ian
Comment Written 06-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008
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Hello Ian! I am so pleased that you enjoyed my offering, and I am deeply honored and humbled by your kind and thoughtful words. Please do stop by again! diane
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Oh! Spectacular work! So moving - it made me cry! I was astonished by the talent displayed - and was completely rivited from the first word to the last. I am so sorry I am out of the six stars - no a MILLION stars - this work so finely deserves. BRAVA! Sara
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Oh! Spectacular work! So moving - it made me cry! I was astonished by the talent displayed - and was completely rivited from the first word to the last. I am so sorry I am out of the six stars - no a MILLION stars - this work so finely deserves. BRAVA! Sara
Comment Written 06-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hello Friend! No tears, but to remember...Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review..diane
Comment from davidray
Very well written, diane. An excellent piece that will be sure to stir up some patriotic hormones in your fellow Americans. An excellent piece of homework as well. Enjoyed reading this.
Always,
David
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Very well written, diane. An excellent piece that will be sure to stir up some patriotic hormones in your fellow Americans. An excellent piece of homework as well. Enjoyed reading this.
Always,
David
Comment Written 06-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hello David! So pleased you enjoyed. Have always wanted to write an offering like this. Thank you! diane
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Diane,
Everything about this poem grabs the reader, from the art to the entire poem. The lines in under the bold print seem to echo the harsh effects of all who were involved in this war. A unique write and a history lesson as well. You have a great creative vision and surely deserving of the 6 stars. An amazing write and thank you for sharing this. Good luck with the contest and God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008
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Hi Diane,
Everything about this poem grabs the reader, from the art to the entire poem. The lines in under the bold print seem to echo the harsh effects of all who were involved in this war. A unique write and a history lesson as well. You have a great creative vision and surely deserving of the 6 stars. An amazing write and thank you for sharing this. Good luck with the contest and God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 05-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008
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Hello! Thank you so much for your beautiful review; I truly enjoyed penning this offering. Best Regards...diane
Comment from sharon fallis
This is a very compelling story! I remember that war, and I feel the ache for those who died fighting for a free America. I also feel the 'Shame' of knowing that I am an american and allowed our country to perform such atrocities to those poor Japanese descendants that didn't deserve to be treated that way because of fear. I hope someday they will be able to truly "forgive us our atrocities". No SPAG. Very well done!
Sharon
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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This is a very compelling story! I remember that war, and I feel the ache for those who died fighting for a free America. I also feel the 'Shame' of knowing that I am an american and allowed our country to perform such atrocities to those poor Japanese descendants that didn't deserve to be treated that way because of fear. I hope someday they will be able to truly "forgive us our atrocities". No SPAG. Very well done!
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Dear Sharon: Thank you so much for your thoughtful review; I am deeply honored and humbled by your kind words...diane
Comment from JudithPorter
Wow!! This is a beautiful, awsome piece of writing-- I love the contrast of characters and the storytelling / historical aspect of this piece.. I would certainly submit it to some historical archive place for publication-- not enough is written about this time in American history--you have delivered it all with thoughful insight in a piece that makes it easy to understand-- great work!!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Wow!! This is a beautiful, awsome piece of writing-- I love the contrast of characters and the storytelling / historical aspect of this piece.. I would certainly submit it to some historical archive place for publication-- not enough is written about this time in American history--you have delivered it all with thoughful insight in a piece that makes it easy to understand-- great work!!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hello! I am extremely honored and humbled that you would find my offering exceptional. I have always wanted to write a dialogue poem. Regards, diane
Comment from LegendD
This is first time I am awarding a 'six star' to anyone.
You have done wonderfully, mind-blowingly great with this one.
Wow wow wow...I am well, speechless. Oh but I'm in a public library. They would call security should I scream out my applause.
Brava!!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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This is first time I am awarding a 'six star' to anyone.
You have done wonderfully, mind-blowingly great with this one.
Wow wow wow...I am well, speechless. Oh but I'm in a public library. They would call security should I scream out my applause.
Brava!!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hello! I am honored and humbled by your review, and I am extremely pleased to know that it moved you. Regards, diane
Comment from wiggles
My mistake, and what an incredible world you helped bring me in to. I'm upgrading my rating of this due to the mistake I made. Thank you for your impassioned, correct response. I'm humbled.
Wiggles
I am only responding to this poem because of a factual error. A US serviceman would not have been able to enlist and then go to the Philipines to be captured at the time you're talking about. The US soldiers PRESENT in the Phillipines at the outbreak of war were those who were captured.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2008
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My mistake, and what an incredible world you helped bring me in to. I'm upgrading my rating of this due to the mistake I made. Thank you for your impassioned, correct response. I'm humbled.
Wiggles
I am only responding to this poem because of a factual error. A US serviceman would not have been able to enlist and then go to the Philipines to be captured at the time you're talking about. The US soldiers PRESENT in the Phillipines at the outbreak of war were those who were captured.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2008
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Hello: Thank you for stopping by and reviewng. I am afraid that you have misread/misinterpreted my offering My presentation is factual. My uncle, Sargent William Kenel enlisted in the ArmyAir Force on following the attack on Pearl Harbor. After receiving training, he set sail to the Philippines aboard the USA Transport "Etolin." Upon arrival, he was stationed on the Island of Corregidor and was there when the Philippine Islands were captured by the Japanese. He survived the atrocities of both the Bataan Death March and survived Cabanatuan Prison.
I am not really sure where your confusion rests. In the poem, I write that the young American enlisted, went to the Philippines, and while there was captured by the Japanese! He was present at the time that the Philippines fell to the Japanese. He was captured by the Japanese. Thus he was one of thousands who were present in the Philippines. Again, my representation is accurate. Thank you. diane
Comment from writerjen
I really liked this poem. What a creative idea to mirror the two lives. Very powerful script of both, amazing comparisons. Well done. No suggestions for change.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2008
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I really liked this poem. What a creative idea to mirror the two lives. Very powerful script of both, amazing comparisons. Well done. No suggestions for change.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2008
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So pleased you enjoyed, Friend! Thank you! diane
Comment from NightWriter
"I Heard America Call My Name" is quite the poem! Like two for one, each similar and also contrasting. Poem is very creative and well written.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2008
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"I Heard America Call My Name" is quite the poem! Like two for one, each similar and also contrasting. Poem is very creative and well written.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2008
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Hello Friend! I am very pleased you enjoyed my offering! Thank you! diane
