Ridding Yourself of Demons
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The battle lines are drawn"A man summons a demon but gets more than he wanted
5 total reviews
Comment from mmichelle97219
And the plan falls apart before their eyes. I am off to the next chapter. You have me hooked. and i just can't wait.
Michelle
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2008
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And the plan falls apart before their eyes. I am off to the next chapter. You have me hooked. and i just can't wait.
Michelle
Comment Written 30-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2008
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LOL or does it? Thanks for your review
Comment from MissCellanea
Great job humanizing the demon. I never pictured a demon sulking!
I'm so sad I missed the first 29 chapters. The dialog between characters is well written, and their banter, enjoyable.
One note: no hypen needed on lecture-hall and pissed-off.
Lawyers in hell! haha
Nice read. Interesting subject matter.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2008
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Great job humanizing the demon. I never pictured a demon sulking!
I'm so sad I missed the first 29 chapters. The dialog between characters is well written, and their banter, enjoyable.
One note: no hypen needed on lecture-hall and pissed-off.
Lawyers in hell! haha
Nice read. Interesting subject matter.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2008
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Well, the other 29 are still there 8^)
Glad you liked it. Thank you
Comment from Janilou
Clever writing! It is always difficult to come into a story so late in the game, although I am certain I have reviewed at least some of the previous chapters!
I didn't see a single nit, leaving me nothing to say except that I enjoyed reading your chapter, and I hope I never meet any demons like these!
Jan
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2008
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Clever writing! It is always difficult to come into a story so late in the game, although I am certain I have reviewed at least some of the previous chapters!
I didn't see a single nit, leaving me nothing to say except that I enjoyed reading your chapter, and I hope I never meet any demons like these!
Jan
Comment Written 27-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2008
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In that case, may all the demons you meet be nice ones. Thanks for the comments. I'm glad you enjoyed it
Comment from guerillapoet
This was genuinely funny. The characters were interesting and the story's pace was perfect. The best part about this chapter (or story, rather, since I haven't read the previous chapters and so I'm not comparing it to those) was the dialogue. I wish I could write dialogue like this. It worked really well and gave the characters more depth than any long paragraph describing them could have.
There were only a few things I read that I thought could be improved upon. One is that you repeat the word "matches" three times in three lines. I'm not completely sure it wasn't humor, though, but I didn't read it as such and, therefore, it felt redundant. Another minor problem was the misspelling of some words, but I think it's ridiculous to point that crap out in a review and so I won't give you some boring, line-by-line account of each one I found. No critic should try and double as a spell check when all an author really wants is a review of his content.
Overall, this story was quick, interesting and fun and its dialogue did a lot to bring it to life and accentuate those previously mentioned things. Thanks for the read.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2008
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This was genuinely funny. The characters were interesting and the story's pace was perfect. The best part about this chapter (or story, rather, since I haven't read the previous chapters and so I'm not comparing it to those) was the dialogue. I wish I could write dialogue like this. It worked really well and gave the characters more depth than any long paragraph describing them could have.
There were only a few things I read that I thought could be improved upon. One is that you repeat the word "matches" three times in three lines. I'm not completely sure it wasn't humor, though, but I didn't read it as such and, therefore, it felt redundant. Another minor problem was the misspelling of some words, but I think it's ridiculous to point that crap out in a review and so I won't give you some boring, line-by-line account of each one I found. No critic should try and double as a spell check when all an author really wants is a review of his content.
Overall, this story was quick, interesting and fun and its dialogue did a lot to bring it to life and accentuate those previously mentioned things. Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2008
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I think the misspellings may be yours, as I write in the Queen's English, not American 8^)
I'll revisit the matches. Thank you for your detailed review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from ladybird
A great chapter , kept me reading till the end. Ah, poor little Scarth, aren't you just getting to love him? I bet you can't kill him off when the time comes, lol. Very good, a great read, and with touches of humour.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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A great chapter , kept me reading till the end. Ah, poor little Scarth, aren't you just getting to love him? I bet you can't kill him off when the time comes, lol. Very good, a great read, and with touches of humour.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Thanks. I think Scarth is probably only lovable on the page, but you'll have to wait for is ultimate fate.
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You're welcome.
