Alvin Thomas Ethington, Sr.
An English Sonnet15 total reviews
Comment from Moira's Amethyst
I am confused with this one Alvin. You say it is a Spenserian sonnet yet lines 4 and 5 do not link in chain. I was wondering, was this an error? Although the topic expresses truly and delivers a emotional effect I believe you may need to correct that. I make no claim to be an expert in this matter and I do mean well. It is an excellent portrayal of your father. Please, take care.
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2008
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I am confused with this one Alvin. You say it is a Spenserian sonnet yet lines 4 and 5 do not link in chain. I was wondering, was this an error? Although the topic expresses truly and delivers a emotional effect I believe you may need to correct that. I make no claim to be an expert in this matter and I do mean well. It is an excellent portrayal of your father. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2008
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Thanks; I see what I did. I wrote abab acac cdcd ee; I'll take the designation "Spenserian" off. Thanks for catching that. I truly appreciate it.
Comment from mamre07
You seem to have loved your father very much. He was a kind and gentle soul who lived the Christian faith. I am sure he was not one to spout scripture but showed it through his actions. I thank God for his life.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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You seem to have loved your father very much. He was a kind and gentle soul who lived the Christian faith. I am sure he was not one to spout scripture but showed it through his actions. I thank God for his life.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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Yes, he lived his faith. He was a wonderful example of what it means to be Christian. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from honeytree
My father was a kind and wondrous man
Such glorious amazing stories told
Of this humane good man, part of a clan;
His hair was white; his heart was solid gold.
One could not find a finer gentleman--
He lived the Christian life in word and deed.
He helped the poor and needy his life span;
My father taught to love; he did succeed.
Food given those who did not have to plead;
The money loaned in charity to those
Poor abject souls who had yet to succeed;
My father's Southern grace, donating clothes.
He integrated black and brown and white
For in his heart he always saw God's Light.
"Yes to have a father like this is just great.
Lots can be learned from a father like this.
Love and kindness given will be always be
remembered by God."
Wonderful words written
I would suggest you could print these words on a card
to show people. They are beautiful words and written very well."
Honeytree..
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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My father was a kind and wondrous man
Such glorious amazing stories told
Of this humane good man, part of a clan;
His hair was white; his heart was solid gold.
One could not find a finer gentleman--
He lived the Christian life in word and deed.
He helped the poor and needy his life span;
My father taught to love; he did succeed.
Food given those who did not have to plead;
The money loaned in charity to those
Poor abject souls who had yet to succeed;
My father's Southern grace, donating clothes.
He integrated black and brown and white
For in his heart he always saw God's Light.
"Yes to have a father like this is just great.
Lots can be learned from a father like this.
Love and kindness given will be always be
remembered by God."
Wonderful words written
I would suggest you could print these words on a card
to show people. They are beautiful words and written very well."
Honeytree..
Comment Written 11-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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Thanks for a good review; I am not sure how all these words would fit on a card. I greatly appreciate the six stars.
Comment from Judian James
This is lovely Alvin. Your father sounds like a wonderful man of peace and love. A Christian man who truly believed it was better to give than to receive. You wrote a lovely tribute.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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This is lovely Alvin. Your father sounds like a wonderful man of peace and love. A Christian man who truly believed it was better to give than to receive. You wrote a lovely tribute.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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Thanks. He was well deserving of it. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from rama devi
A lovely and well written tribute to a father whom you obviously held in high esteem. You are highly fortunate to have been blessed with a great and noble soul as your father!
I love the closing couplet.
I find nothing to fix.
Bravo.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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A lovely and well written tribute to a father whom you obviously held in high esteem. You are highly fortunate to have been blessed with a great and noble soul as your father!
I love the closing couplet.
I find nothing to fix.
Bravo.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 11-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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Thanks; I know when I receive a good review from you, I have done well.
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem of the author paying tribute to his father. It has a good cadance that leads to a smooth read. It has good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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A very well written poem of the author paying tribute to his father. It has a good cadance that leads to a smooth read. It has good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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Thanks for a great review; I especially appreciate the comment about cadence. That is one of the hardest elements of poetry for me.
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You're welcome. I haven't had a chance to correct my work, but I have your suggestions in my error file. Charlie
Comment from babylonia
this is definitely a wonderful tribute to your father. very beautiful. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. stanzas are well written. made me smile. he must have been a very good man. smooth rhyme and meter. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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this is definitely a wonderful tribute to your father. very beautiful. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. stanzas are well written. made me smile. he must have been a very good man. smooth rhyme and meter. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 10-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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Thanks for a great review; I especially appreciate the comment about meter, since that is the element I have to work on the most.
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meter is definitely not easy. i have to concentrate on it. LOL i guess that is the point. but it is worth it. always gives it an easier flow. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
Comment from vertigo50
This was an excellent tribute to your father. He was the kind of man we all wish we had known, and you captured it all in your wonderful lines.
Food given those who did not have to plead;
The money loaned in charity to those
Poor abject souls who had yet to succeed;
My father's Southern grace, donating clothes.
He integrated black and brown and white
For in his heart he always saw God's Light
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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This was an excellent tribute to your father. He was the kind of man we all wish we had known, and you captured it all in your wonderful lines.
Food given those who did not have to plead;
The money loaned in charity to those
Poor abject souls who had yet to succeed;
My father's Southern grace, donating clothes.
He integrated black and brown and white
For in his heart he always saw God's Light
Comment Written 10-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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Thanks; I was worried exactly about the part you quoted--I wasn't sure it flowed well. You and your six stars have reassured me. Thank you so much.
Comment from tony bronk
You are very fortunate to have had such a wonderful father. Mine left me on the day that I was born. A wonderful poetic tribute, Alvin. tony
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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You are very fortunate to have had such a wonderful father. Mine left me on the day that I was born. A wonderful poetic tribute, Alvin. tony
Comment Written 10-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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I am sorry for you, tony. My father was a wonderful example of how to help one's fellow human being. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Alvin, your father sounded like a wonderful man.
It reminds me of my mom she had the kindness heart I ever knew.
Again you have written a poem with a wonderful form ( I always loved a Spenserian sonnet )
thank you for sharing your poetic voice.
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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Alvin, your father sounded like a wonderful man.
It reminds me of my mom she had the kindness heart I ever knew.
Again you have written a poem with a wonderful form ( I always loved a Spenserian sonnet )
thank you for sharing your poetic voice.
Gert
Comment Written 10-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2008
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You are so kind, Gert. Thanks for a good review.
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Alvin You deserved the 6 bright ******'s
Gert
