Driving the Distance
Contest Entry: Free Verse - Some Rhyme -76 total reviews
Comment from Dan Berdick
Your poem goes deeper than the average prose. I like the way you took the trip in the car to another level about leaving time behind. Wish you luck in the contest, dan
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Your poem goes deeper than the average prose. I like the way you took the trip in the car to another level about leaving time behind. Wish you luck in the contest, dan
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from ledford
Great job:-)
These lines realyl brought it home for me:
"To seal the distance from
Arrogance
Bigotry
Anger
Greed"
Good luck in the contest!
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Great job:-)
These lines realyl brought it home for me:
"To seal the distance from
Arrogance
Bigotry
Anger
Greed"
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from wiggles
This is a poem that reallty touched me. It reflects so much of the way I feel that even now, after reading it, I am taken back to times when the past calls to me.
wiggles
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This is a poem that reallty touched me. It reflects so much of the way I feel that even now, after reading it, I am taken back to times when the past calls to me.
wiggles
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from serenityjs
maybe the past is not to be run from, but learned from, this seems to be the message you are portreying as if you are trying to convince yourself that you will never make the same mistake twice, and yet, dont we all?
I loved it,
Jennifer
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maybe the past is not to be run from, but learned from, this seems to be the message you are portreying as if you are trying to convince yourself that you will never make the same mistake twice, and yet, dont we all?
I loved it,
Jennifer
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from RossJM
I didn't read it aloud but still enjoyed it.
Good creation, Mrs. KT.
Thanks for sharing it with us.
Cheers,
Ross
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I didn't read it aloud but still enjoyed it.
Good creation, Mrs. KT.
Thanks for sharing it with us.
Cheers,
Ross
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from Lynar
I enjoyed the irregular cadence. It had a preconceived form. You determined where the line breaks and making stanzas would be and how to end the poem. (freedom of free verse). Your title, line and stanzas combined to make a stronger poem. It had great form, with emotional resonance. I could see why you were putting distance between, arrogrance, bigotry, anger greed,driving away to a new future. The bad times now, memories lingered in my mind. Pleasing artwork. I would recommend to my friends, Driving The Distance. No adverse remarks.
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I enjoyed the irregular cadence. It had a preconceived form. You determined where the line breaks and making stanzas would be and how to end the poem. (freedom of free verse). Your title, line and stanzas combined to make a stronger poem. It had great form, with emotional resonance. I could see why you were putting distance between, arrogrance, bigotry, anger greed,driving away to a new future. The bad times now, memories lingered in my mind. Pleasing artwork. I would recommend to my friends, Driving The Distance. No adverse remarks.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from Nanny 6
Your story was truly original in this contest entry. I enjoyed your driving away from time. I like the way you reiterated it at the end as well. Good luck in the contest, this one's a winner in my book. Judy
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Your story was truly original in this contest entry. I enjoyed your driving away from time. I like the way you reiterated it at the end as well. Good luck in the contest, this one's a winner in my book. Judy
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from S.Yocom
This poem is nicely written, Mrs. K.T. I liked your repetition of the first stanza, to make a nice ending to the poem. Your occasional rhymes were welcome. Very nice.
Sally
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This poem is nicely written, Mrs. K.T. I liked your repetition of the first stanza, to make a nice ending to the poem. Your occasional rhymes were welcome. Very nice.
Sally
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from Paradox Tremors
"But hanging onto the past Is like trying to capture
A mirror's reflection..." ------ I love this line as it perfectly tells the impossibility of the situation. Well, well written my friend. You went the extra mile the others haven't yet obtained (or tried).
Enjoyed this very much! Good luck with the contest.
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"But hanging onto the past Is like trying to capture
A mirror's reflection..." ------ I love this line as it perfectly tells the impossibility of the situation. Well, well written my friend. You went the extra mile the others haven't yet obtained (or tried).
Enjoyed this very much! Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
Comment from Rajasir
At every curve
At every bend
The lines of truth
Merge and intersect
With no discernible end
Driving away from time!
The lines given above become the reality of every individual's life and that is why your poem has a universal appeal, though it is written in a personal style.
The diction is very precise and the emotion is very emphatic.
The message is conveyed very clearly.
Bless you
Rajasir
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At every curve
At every bend
The lines of truth
Merge and intersect
With no discernible end
Driving away from time!
The lines given above become the reality of every individual's life and that is why your poem has a universal appeal, though it is written in a personal style.
The diction is very precise and the emotion is very emphatic.
The message is conveyed very clearly.
Bless you
Rajasir
Comment Written 24-Jul-2008
