Ridding Yourself of Demons
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Such Sweet Sorrow"A man summons a demon but gets more than he wanted
5 total reviews
Comment from mmichelle97219
Oh this is going to be good. you had a nice lull and character development but we are back to the action. I cannot wait to see what happens next. I wonder how Ess and Scarth will handle it.
Michelle
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2008
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Oh this is going to be good. you had a nice lull and character development but we are back to the action. I cannot wait to see what happens next. I wonder how Ess and Scarth will handle it.
Michelle
Comment Written 13-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2008
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I'll have a chapter dedicated to their reaction, though I think the next one will have to be Paul's
Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review
Comment from Artasylum
very creative and amusing....i love the inner thoughts they make me laugh...great job on this and thanks for the good read and looking forward....yours, diana
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2008
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very creative and amusing....i love the inner thoughts they make me laugh...great job on this and thanks for the good read and looking forward....yours, diana
Comment Written 12-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2008
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No, thanks for the great review. Glad you liked it
Comment from gweyant
Characters are very good. I loved the idea of a demon that is only good at eating.
the story kept your attention during the entire chapter.
very good.
gweyant
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2008
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Characters are very good. I loved the idea of a demon that is only good at eating.
the story kept your attention during the entire chapter.
very good.
gweyant
Comment Written 12-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2008
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Thank you, I'm glad you like the premise
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Your welcome.gweyant
Comment from sheilamarie
This reads really well. Sounds like a good story. I love how you developed Oz's character. I also love how the chapter ends.
This part confused me:
Michael nodded a farewell to Ess and Paul and left the room.
Who is Michael? Maybe you've mentioned him in the last chapter, but this part about his leaving confused me because I wasn't sure who he was. Maybe you could put something in your introductory summary?
sheilamarie
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2008
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This reads really well. Sounds like a good story. I love how you developed Oz's character. I also love how the chapter ends.
This part confused me:
Michael nodded a farewell to Ess and Paul and left the room.
Who is Michael? Maybe you've mentioned him in the last chapter, but this part about his leaving confused me because I wasn't sure who he was. Maybe you could put something in your introductory summary?
sheilamarie
Comment Written 12-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2008
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Yes, he was introduced in the last chapter.
Glad you liked it
Comment from Juana
Well written, with an intriguing plot line. I did enjoy following the conversation through this piece. I am also impressed with the chapter ending, it is a real page turner.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2008
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Well written, with an intriguing plot line. I did enjoy following the conversation through this piece. I am also impressed with the chapter ending, it is a real page turner.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2008
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it
