The Many Me
Just pure flattery.8 total reviews
Comment from Bryana
Hi Mike, this is so true. Since we
always want to please the people
we love, we want to be the people
they like. Sometimes it's difficult
but we try.
I found this very interesting ....
Your many you, may generate
from those who know you
a bit of ire.
Thank you for sharing. Ana
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2008
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Hi Mike, this is so true. Since we
always want to please the people
we love, we want to be the people
they like. Sometimes it's difficult
but we try.
I found this very interesting ....
Your many you, may generate
from those who know you
a bit of ire.
Thank you for sharing. Ana
Comment Written 30-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2008
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The line that generated interest was just an observation of the effect of a fairly complex woman. More of a thought from them that I detected, as what caught my attention was the total lack of acknowledgement of their surroundings. This poem stemmed from a beautiful experience. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. -Mike
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Interesting. You are always welcome. Ana
Comment from PoesyPoet
You know, Mike this is so original and true! When you're in and/or out of love, it can feel like you're more than one person as you sort out those many mixed feelings. That's what I got from this well written work.
Nicely done!
Celeste
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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You know, Mike this is so original and true! When you're in and/or out of love, it can feel like you're more than one person as you sort out those many mixed feelings. That's what I got from this well written work.
Nicely done!
Celeste
Comment Written 29-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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Thank you for the compliments and this review. This is more about the nature of love that goes into figuring out that love.
Comment from Judian James
This is very true on so many levels. We do want to be all things to all people, but most especially to one we love. There are many me's within each one of us! I especially loved the final verse. Very nice way to end a solid piece about love.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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This is very true on so many levels. We do want to be all things to all people, but most especially to one we love. There are many me's within each one of us! I especially loved the final verse. Very nice way to end a solid piece about love.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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Thank you verya much for the compliments and this review. I am also glad that you enjoyed this one to.
Comment from KatFrog
A good poem that presents an accurate but unusual view on relationships. I agree with the concept, that one person may break someone else apart.
I did find a few mistakes:
Another Me his holding the
door your about to leave though
I think the word 'his' is supposed to be 'is'. And the word 'your' is supposed to be "you're".
Also, sometimes the word 'me' is capitalized and sometimes it's not. I think that it needs to be capitalized everywhere (or nowhere, but the caps do add to the poem).
The same comment applies to the word 'you' in the line:
Your many you, may generate
Also, why did you include a comma after 'you'? I'm not a comma Nazi, but this one pauses the reading in a strange place.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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A good poem that presents an accurate but unusual view on relationships. I agree with the concept, that one person may break someone else apart.
I did find a few mistakes:
Another Me his holding the
door your about to leave though
I think the word 'his' is supposed to be 'is'. And the word 'your' is supposed to be "you're".
Also, sometimes the word 'me' is capitalized and sometimes it's not. I think that it needs to be capitalized everywhere (or nowhere, but the caps do add to the poem).
The same comment applies to the word 'you' in the line:
Your many you, may generate
Also, why did you include a comma after 'you'? I'm not a comma Nazi, but this one pauses the reading in a strange place.
Kathryn
Comment Written 29-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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Thank you for reviewing this, I did capitalize a couple more me's. Also befor you read this I changed You're, sometimes they don't seem to take with some people. Also based on this review I fixed is.
Comment from Twomoon
Mike, dear sweet friend, this was lovely and sincere and full of love... ah, you must just write it and tell her... for surly your climb with stick has led you too far away from her door! smile... you captured your emotions in this lovely poem that felt almost like your climb was always in the fantasy world... now, my friend, take it to the real world..this touched me because you have a way to make one want to help your gentle self achieve success..loved the sticks, and these are some of my favorites...:
You delighted my spirit,
fractured my being
Another me is working on the perfect
one, that will catch you off guard
and make you profusely blush...Loving the another me's..very nice, Mike..much love for a perfect day!! Twomoon
and filled my mind with you
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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Mike, dear sweet friend, this was lovely and sincere and full of love... ah, you must just write it and tell her... for surly your climb with stick has led you too far away from her door! smile... you captured your emotions in this lovely poem that felt almost like your climb was always in the fantasy world... now, my friend, take it to the real world..this touched me because you have a way to make one want to help your gentle self achieve success..loved the sticks, and these are some of my favorites...:
You delighted my spirit,
fractured my being
Another me is working on the perfect
one, that will catch you off guard
and make you profusely blush...Loving the another me's..very nice, Mike..much love for a perfect day!! Twomoon
and filled my mind with you
Comment Written 29-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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lol on this review. If I am headed into the deepest woods, that is because she sent me in that direction and is laughing her butt off. In the real world I am only interested in the truth as it shows the perfect direction one must go. I just thought this was interesing, funny and cute. In that mood. Two much love for this day! Mike
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smile, are you saying I am two much love for this day..or your poem is two much love for this day?? hehe..I think she would not laugh if you are floundering in the woods, dear friend, otherwise that would surely be beast not woman!!! hugs twomoon
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No, there is never Two much of anything! Lol Is a werewolf a beast? Sorry, I say humor in that. When I flounder in the woods, no one seems to be around, so I can resurect that into an adventurous poem.
Thanks and hugs Two, Mike K-two
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haha..never enough two or MikeKtwo..haha..very funny, indeed!! Werewolf yikes being a woman I thought maybe more vampireessss..lol..well, sir, if no one sees you floundering how did I notice!!!!! smile............hugs two....moons.....smiling at two....K's....
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lol- Not floundering, just being a happy guppy. Well fed with words. My opthomologist figured out that his dye is a percription and got scared about giving it to me. I am trying to find out how bad yellow food dye will be. Vampireessss are about the same, some monsters aren't gender specific. What some people reffer to as hopelessly, is actually a miracle in my book. G-day my lady, Mike.
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lol- Not floundering, just being a happy guppy. Well fed with words. My opthomologist figured out that his dye is a percription and got scared about giving it to me. I am trying to find out how bad yellow food dye will be. Vampireessss are about the same, some monsters aren't gender specific. What some people reffer to as hopelessly, is actually a miracle in my book. G-day my lady, Mike.
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clapping for your happy guppy self, my friend!! smiling...good day to you sir! hugs twomoon
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Oops! I sort of set myself up with that one, I forgot my pict of, "My Poetyry!" I know when it boils down to sir, I am found out. Hugs, Mike
Comment from Alexander E Poet
love or even a friendly relationship, we want to be everybody to that person. I found this to be s stunningly beautiful piece of work. wonderful thoughts, written well, The voice within is strong.. There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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love or even a friendly relationship, we want to be everybody to that person. I found this to be s stunningly beautiful piece of work. wonderful thoughts, written well, The voice within is strong.. There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write
Comment Written 29-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from nora arjuna
door [your] about to leave though - you're
What a complication different parts of us are giving their own perceptions, confusing our lives lol. I swear I've never read something presented this way before, but yes, it happens.
Another me is working on the perfect
one, that will catch you off guard
and make you profusely blush.
Love those lines, among others. You interlaced the sensitive and humoruos part well.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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door [your] about to leave though - you're
What a complication different parts of us are giving their own perceptions, confusing our lives lol. I swear I've never read something presented this way before, but yes, it happens.
Another me is working on the perfect
one, that will catch you off guard
and make you profusely blush.
Love those lines, among others. You interlaced the sensitive and humoruos part well.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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I thought I got all of them this time. Thank you very much for sharing with me your favorites, the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Ginny
Some very interesting thoughts in this poem, and I like the idea, even ideal of each one trying to be everybody to the other. Some verses are a great deal more poetic and rhythmic than the others. I believe that some of the longer lines could be shortened for more poetic flow. The last verse is a very fitting ending.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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Some very interesting thoughts in this poem, and I like the idea, even ideal of each one trying to be everybody to the other. Some verses are a great deal more poetic and rhythmic than the others. I believe that some of the longer lines could be shortened for more poetic flow. The last verse is a very fitting ending.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poetry and letting me know that the ending is nice.
