Disconnected Connectedness
Free Verse: Spoken silence30 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I put my favorite lines below. I could totally relate to this and your words were so powerful. You did a wonderful job writing this poem and I wouldn't change a thing.
The pain - unfathomable
The situation - incomprehensible
The result - irreversible
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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I put my favorite lines below. I could totally relate to this and your words were so powerful. You did a wonderful job writing this poem and I wouldn't change a thing.
The pain - unfathomable
The situation - incomprehensible
The result - irreversible
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Thank your for stopping by and your kind review! diane
Comment from EllenV
I have read this poem twice, wondering what circumstances placed the writer in such a quandary. I know that often it is best for me just to keep quiet especially when dealing with family (children, grandchildren). But it seems that this wasn't something just irritable ... but something very traumatic.
My heart goes out to all involved.
A well written, but disturbing piece.
ellen
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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I have read this poem twice, wondering what circumstances placed the writer in such a quandary. I know that often it is best for me just to keep quiet especially when dealing with family (children, grandchildren). But it seems that this wasn't something just irritable ... but something very traumatic.
My heart goes out to all involved.
A well written, but disturbing piece.
ellen
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hello Ellen....I was hoping to leave an impression and to allow the reader to wonder. . .thank you for your kind review...diane
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Mrs KT, how I wish I had a sixer for you. Not only have I been there but I have watched my daughter struggle through this, too. The pain - unfathomable
The situation - incomprehensible
The result - irreversible
And yet, the connection -- unbreakable
but, unfortunately, neither side is able to let the other know. I'm sorry for your pain.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Mrs KT, how I wish I had a sixer for you. Not only have I been there but I have watched my daughter struggle through this, too. The pain - unfathomable
The situation - incomprehensible
The result - irreversible
And yet, the connection -- unbreakable
but, unfortunately, neither side is able to let the other know. I'm sorry for your pain.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Thank you! I am pleased you were able to connect with my offfering....diane
Comment from S.Yocom
You pose an interesting question here, Diane. Should we try to help those who have wronged us, or should we ignore the situation? Of course, the moral thing to do would be to help. That might even turn an enemy into a friend. I like your poem.
Sally
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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You pose an interesting question here, Diane. Should we try to help those who have wronged us, or should we ignore the situation? Of course, the moral thing to do would be to help. That might even turn an enemy into a friend. I like your poem.
Sally
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hello Sally! Much appreciationn for your kind review! diane
Comment from Norzah
The disconnected connectedness seemed to be forced through most reluctantly because of pride, anger and a pressing need for self-preservation. Though the sorrow, grief and despair experienced by the disconnected party is fully appreciated, the party that chooses to disconnect prefers to remain silent and not respond, due to the unfathomable pain from past experience. The three seemingly broken lines of the 1st and last stanza aptly illustrate the disconnection. Love the poem.
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The disconnected connectedness seemed to be forced through most reluctantly because of pride, anger and a pressing need for self-preservation. Though the sorrow, grief and despair experienced by the disconnected party is fully appreciated, the party that chooses to disconnect prefers to remain silent and not respond, due to the unfathomable pain from past experience. The three seemingly broken lines of the 1st and last stanza aptly illustrate the disconnection. Love the poem.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
Comment from D. Longo
Hello, Diane . . . a question for the ages. This poem is powerfully written, universally poignant, and poses a query fit for Solomon. This common man's response might be: The door need be open to love.
Not much of a review for you, my Friend - for that I apologize.
Dante
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
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Hello, Diane . . . a question for the ages. This poem is powerfully written, universally poignant, and poses a query fit for Solomon. This common man's response might be: The door need be open to love.
Not much of a review for you, my Friend - for that I apologize.
Dante
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2008
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Even if the door keeps being slammed in one's face? Ah! Dante! Just pondering questions for which I have no answers to a situation for which there is no explanation...or if there is, I have yet to discover it! Be Well!!! It is amazingly beautiful here today! diane
Comment from davidray
Hi diane,
Yes, we should all be connected to help and support one another and take advantage of all the resources we have been provided, like this wonderful creation ... the internet. So many tragedies on a constant basis around the world. We all need to appreciate what we have.
As usual, wonderfully crafted.Always a pleasure to read.
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Hi diane,
Yes, we should all be connected to help and support one another and take advantage of all the resources we have been provided, like this wonderful creation ... the internet. So many tragedies on a constant basis around the world. We all need to appreciate what we have.
As usual, wonderfully crafted.Always a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
Comment from Robbin
Knowing the pain and suffering of another yet only able to reach out with prayer. Not reaching out when you want to by choice is a big price for pride. Sad poem. We have all done it. Thanks for sharing. Robbin
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Knowing the pain and suffering of another yet only able to reach out with prayer. Not reaching out when you want to by choice is a big price for pride. Sad poem. We have all done it. Thanks for sharing. Robbin
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
Comment from RapturedHeart
Wow! This poem is excellent. How well you've described a horrendous tragedy the rest of us will never know about. My only reservation? That I don't know what happened!
Very well done.
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Wow! This poem is excellent. How well you've described a horrendous tragedy the rest of us will never know about. My only reservation? That I don't know what happened!
Very well done.
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Ms. KT,
Ooooohhh - nicely done!
Yes, sometimes it's best to just "sit with" someone / something that is so seemingly insurmountable. (I call it "processing time.")
The middle section hit me as sort of a take-off on Eliot's "J. Alfred Proofrock" - but in a bit of a different context.
Nicely done!
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
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Hi Ms. KT,
Ooooohhh - nicely done!
Yes, sometimes it's best to just "sit with" someone / something that is so seemingly insurmountable. (I call it "processing time.")
The middle section hit me as sort of a take-off on Eliot's "J. Alfred Proofrock" - but in a bit of a different context.
Nicely done!
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
