A Momentous Encounter
some people make us feel better about life63 total reviews
Comment from Willosa
A heartwarming story. It's always nice to have someone make your day, thanks for sharing your experience and the feelings it gave you.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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A heartwarming story. It's always nice to have someone make your day, thanks for sharing your experience and the feelings it gave you.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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Thank you so much. But why 4 stars? What is missing for a professional rating. Tell me, I would like to know - this is the workshop aspect of this site, and I enjoy it very much. Give me your feedback.
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Nothing missing, it is really well written and I enjoyed the story, I guess it was more of a personal taste thing and I can only say that I am new and learning not only with my own writing but with my reviewing as well so I appreciate you questioning my rating as all feedback and dialogue is a positive thing for me to take on board from all both sides of the coin, writer & reviewer.
Comment from RazberryBullet
It is amazing that a little act, such as exchanging the beer, can affect us so deeply. This happens a lot in the US, but rarely overseas.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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It is amazing that a little act, such as exchanging the beer, can affect us so deeply. This happens a lot in the US, but rarely overseas.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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Thank you very much. This was much more than exchanging the beer, but your concept made me smile.
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Thank you very much. This was much more than exchanging the beer, but your concept made me smile.
Comment from earthlybeing
Great story. Sometimes when we need it most a message of hope comes our way and inspires. She was your messenger that day and I am so happy you met her. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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Great story. Sometimes when we need it most a message of hope comes our way and inspires. She was your messenger that day and I am so happy you met her. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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Thank you. What a deep review. Yes, sometimes all it takes is a random act of kindness to see the world in a different light. Blessings, Yelena
Comment from jcollettesmith
Nice, uplifting story! Only a few grammatical errors noted:
"half and hour" - should be "half AN hour"
"so much more," - should end sentence here after "more"
"in her hands," - should end sentence here after "hands"
"from New York," - no comma needed
"Sierra Nevada ale" - capitalize "Ale"
"my both parents" - BOTH isn't needed
Good job painting a picture with your story. You took us down the aisles with you!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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Nice, uplifting story! Only a few grammatical errors noted:
"half and hour" - should be "half AN hour"
"so much more," - should end sentence here after "more"
"in her hands," - should end sentence here after "hands"
"from New York," - no comma needed
"Sierra Nevada ale" - capitalize "Ale"
"my both parents" - BOTH isn't needed
Good job painting a picture with your story. You took us down the aisles with you!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
Comment from POLLYANNE
A very nice story. I am sure you will find that most people are kind, given the chance, especially in smaller communities.
The first paragraph was a bit wordy, and repetitive There are quite a few punctuation problems others have mentioned that should be corrected. Try going through the proofreader on your computer, it will point out punctuation problems, and will suggest things like using 'suddenly' instead of 'all of a sudden'
Pollyanne
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A very nice story. I am sure you will find that most people are kind, given the chance, especially in smaller communities.
The first paragraph was a bit wordy, and repetitive There are quite a few punctuation problems others have mentioned that should be corrected. Try going through the proofreader on your computer, it will point out punctuation problems, and will suggest things like using 'suddenly' instead of 'all of a sudden'
Pollyanne
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
Comment from redrider6612
A very sweet, inspiring tale you've penned here. I enjoyed it very much. Isn't interesting how a simple act of kindness can brighten someone's day? Thank you for reminding us how our actions can affect those around us.
I only saw a couple issues you might want to correct:
You could avoid the repetition and tighten up the first line by eliminating "in Albertsons supermarket". Also, consider replacing "the supermarket" at the end with "the grocery aisles"
end of a supermarket[,] to get a package
with the loss of [my] both [of my] parents
Overall, a great piece. Thank you for sharing a little bit of hope with the rest of us. It's so nice to hear a positive story.
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A very sweet, inspiring tale you've penned here. I enjoyed it very much. Isn't interesting how a simple act of kindness can brighten someone's day? Thank you for reminding us how our actions can affect those around us.
I only saw a couple issues you might want to correct:
You could avoid the repetition and tighten up the first line by eliminating "in Albertsons supermarket". Also, consider replacing "the supermarket" at the end with "the grocery aisles"
end of a supermarket[,] to get a package
with the loss of [my] both [of my] parents
Overall, a great piece. Thank you for sharing a little bit of hope with the rest of us. It's so nice to hear a positive story.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
Comment from ravenshadowwinds
At first I was expecting something just a little more miraculous, then, by the end I was comfortable and happy. Happy that something small, but kind, made such a difference. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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At first I was expecting something just a little more miraculous, then, by the end I was comfortable and happy. Happy that something small, but kind, made such a difference. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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Yes, it was a miracle, but the "undercover" one - smiles. Yes, it took place in a simple supermarket, but I've encountered the diamond of the first water. I doubt I would have met her in Waldorf Astoria.
Comment from elainec4
yeltel,
Enjoyed the description of your encounter with kindness. I guess we all can benefit from your story. When a kindness is done for us, we really need to stop and appreciate the gesture--and then pass it on! Thanks for sharing.
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yeltel,
Enjoyed the description of your encounter with kindness. I guess we all can benefit from your story. When a kindness is done for us, we really need to stop and appreciate the gesture--and then pass it on! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
Comment from wonderMAC
Good story, with an awesome message. All you hear about these days (myself included) is the hardships people are facing. It's nice to know there are still people out there that care.
On a side note: how'd you like the beer? I am originally from Chico, CA which is where it's brewed!!
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Good story, with an awesome message. All you hear about these days (myself included) is the hardships people are facing. It's nice to know there are still people out there that care.
On a side note: how'd you like the beer? I am originally from Chico, CA which is where it's brewed!!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
Comment from Dru Koyote
yeltel,
I enjoyed your piece and have no suggestions for revisions.
I believe your story is a good reminder that we get back what we put out. If are putting out an expectation of being mistreated then someone will meet that expectation: if we put out an expectation that people are kind then someone will meet that expectation.
Dru Koyote
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yeltel,
I enjoyed your piece and have no suggestions for revisions.
I believe your story is a good reminder that we get back what we put out. If are putting out an expectation of being mistreated then someone will meet that expectation: if we put out an expectation that people are kind then someone will meet that expectation.
Dru Koyote
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
