Manic Depression
this is a haikuru haiku/senyru combo47 total reviews
Comment from sherrymccall
Hi Monte, this is a very interesting haiku. I think the artwork you chose went perfect with the message of your writing on manic depression or bipolar. I think the picture is the perfect contrast illustrating the difference between black and white, and sanity and insanity. Sometimes It seems as if there is a thin line between the two of them. In this picture it is obvious that the darkness is overpowering the light because it is the one more noticable. You did a great job on delivering such a powerful message in such few lines. It would have taken me a lot of writing to describe what you did it 10 words. My heart goes out to anyone who is suffering from this disease and my prayers are with them. Sherry
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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Hi Monte, this is a very interesting haiku. I think the artwork you chose went perfect with the message of your writing on manic depression or bipolar. I think the picture is the perfect contrast illustrating the difference between black and white, and sanity and insanity. Sometimes It seems as if there is a thin line between the two of them. In this picture it is obvious that the darkness is overpowering the light because it is the one more noticable. You did a great job on delivering such a powerful message in such few lines. It would have taken me a lot of writing to describe what you did it 10 words. My heart goes out to anyone who is suffering from this disease and my prayers are with them. Sherry
Comment Written 28-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2008
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thanks a lot my friend
Comment from Just a Girl...
This is the perfect picture with the perfect lines. Most of the time I feel like two completely different people! Thank you so much for sharing!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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This is the perfect picture with the perfect lines. Most of the time I feel like two completely different people! Thank you so much for sharing!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
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thanks my friend
Comment from guyowen
Succinct...
Descriptive to a "t"
You captured the malaise with delicate yet forceful words
The manic description as flying is perfect...
The falling into the depressive side... the dark side... is such a rapid descent...
my initial review was easily twice the length of your poem but they asked for more!!
Great job... you've inspired to post another tonight
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2008
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Succinct...
Descriptive to a "t"
You captured the malaise with delicate yet forceful words
The manic description as flying is perfect...
The falling into the depressive side... the dark side... is such a rapid descent...
my initial review was easily twice the length of your poem but they asked for more!!
Great job... you've inspired to post another tonight
Comment Written 11-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2008
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thanks my friend
Comment from earthlybeing
Well written and the picture goes well with the poem. I have a brother who is bipolar. This poem is true of how he once was. It is much more controlled now. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2008
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Well written and the picture goes well with the poem. I have a brother who is bipolar. This poem is true of how he once was. It is much more controlled now. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 11-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2008
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thanks my friend
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Very good Haiku poem, Monte. It is certainly paints with words a stark but realistic picture. I admire the great job you have done with this one.
Whizpurr ^-^
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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Very good Haiku poem, Monte. It is certainly paints with words a stark but realistic picture. I admire the great job you have done with this one.
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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thank you
Comment from elainec4
Earthwriter,
I haven't much understanding of manic depression--just a sense of how powerful its destructive grip has on its victims. You seem to have captured this in your words and in the image you chose to reflect it. elaine
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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Earthwriter,
I haven't much understanding of manic depression--just a sense of how powerful its destructive grip has on its victims. You seem to have captured this in your words and in the image you chose to reflect it. elaine
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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thank you
Comment from eraserlynch
This is a great poem which says so much through great word choices and an excellent picture choice too. Look forward to reading more of your work soon.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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This is a great poem which says so much through great word choices and an excellent picture choice too. Look forward to reading more of your work soon.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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thank you
Comment from grassroots08
Your message is very clear and you have captured the form well. It is an interesting picture to say the least. It has a disturbed look which is what you are after, anyway. grassroots08
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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Your message is very clear and you have captured the form well. It is an interesting picture to say the least. It has a disturbed look which is what you are after, anyway. grassroots08
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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thanks a lot
Comment from davidray
For almost anyone - if not everyone - diagnosed with depression, darkness does loom in the horizon, doesn't it? Such few words that paint it so clearly. Well done and good luck. :)
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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For almost anyone - if not everyone - diagnosed with depression, darkness does loom in the horizon, doesn't it? Such few words that paint it so clearly. Well done and good luck. :)
D
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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thank you
Comment from Oatmeal
Monte,
I am sure that you know this but haiku has no capital letters. At least, that is what they have told me here.
The theme was good. It is one that I can relate to. The words were carefully chosen. The formatting is nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2008
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Monte,
I am sure that you know this but haiku has no capital letters. At least, that is what they have told me here.
The theme was good. It is one that I can relate to. The words were carefully chosen. The formatting is nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2008
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just an oversight thank you
