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Life stories in only six words!

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Comment from Max Edon
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This had only six words in it, but the message came through loud and clear. This was a very shocking read. Nicely written. I enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    It was supposed to be funny. I always write about serious matters, and wanted to change and lighten up. I'm so sorry.
reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    It was supposed to be funny. I always write about serious matters, and wanted to change and lighten up. I'm so sorry.
Comment from Artasylum
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ouch...that hurts...the husband probably never knew what his him at least i hope he didn't...this was an interesting entry to the contest...good luck. yours, diana

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    Thank you diana. great review and comments. Just trying to lighten up my serious writing. Based on my very friend boyfriend, so many years ago.
Comment from mildredmolanki
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Hi there. I think the 6 words you use in this piece give a very clear account of the story here, and it's a tragic one. I think you have met the challenge well. Kind regards.

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    Thank you, mldredolanski for the great review.
Comment from Thomas Raine
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Wow, that would be a most gruesome ending to a romance indeed. Hopefully some therapy or something might have helped avoided that. Question: accident? lol

Thanks for sharing!

- TR

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    Thank you TR for the great review.
Comment from ravenshadowwinds
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This is interesting. It leaves so much to the imagination. Were they parting for a day at work? Breaking up? What? Sometimes not being told everything is a great concept. Those who are creative can put themselves there.

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    Thank you ravenshadowwinds. I was trying to lighten up, as a joke. It's based on my first romance, and he wasnt the wife, just another girlfriend; Those latin lo lovers!!
Comment from Bryana
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He must've made her angry. Maybe he was caught doing something wrong.
I'm with her, I think she had a reason to cross the street really fast.
Your six word contest entry is excellent. I wish you luck.

Estoy mirando cuando empiezan a votar. Abrazos, Ana

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    Bryana. Todos me preguntan si esto es verdad. Entre esto como un chiste, Pero paso mucho tiempo, mi primer novio, y la senora era su otra novia. Ahora me puedo reir. Those latin lovers!!
Comment from shelley kaye
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leaves so much to the imagination
is she walking away?
why?
why fast?
etcetcetclol
good one

thanx for sharing


p.s. you don't want it in the book? just cuirious ;-)


 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    Hi shelly kay. I posted this one very late last night. I wanted in the book, of course. Can't i fix later on? I am leaving for Seattle in a couple of minutes, will be back to night. Thanks for the review and support.
reply by shelley kaye on 04-May-2008
    just PM tom and he'll put it in for ya

    after it's in the book, it will prob be thrown in as prologue (0)
    all ya gotta do is change the chapter number to .... 29 (i think there's 28 chaps - but you may wanna check to be sure lol)

Comment from Jonez08
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Amada, this is leaves quite a bit to the readers discretion. And so far I've came up with five scenarios LOL, I would love to hear yours. Very creative. I wish you well in the contest

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    That's great, Jonez08. Let's keep the imagination going, and write about it. i so appreciate your suport.
Comment from ~Marianna~
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This was good. ^_^ Why was she crossing the street fast? I like it. I don't know if the competition passed yet but if it didn't then good luck. ^_^

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    Thank you Marianna, for the great review and good wishers.
Comment from Judian James
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Well now, how does one review a piece that's shorter than the editor expects for the review? This was a complete story, although it leaves much to the reader's imagination!!

 Comment Written 04-May-2008

reply by the author on 04-May-2008
    That's a great dilemma. I truly appreciate your support to my work.