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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "End of Romance"Life stories in only six words!
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Comment from AbigailDavid
Hello, you really meet the criteria for this competition, and what an original one. I think your 6 words are well chosen, and i have no suggestion for imrovement. It made me think of a transient marriage that didn't last for long.
Bye for now, and best of luck with this entry, Abby
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Hello, you really meet the criteria for this competition, and what an original one. I think your 6 words are well chosen, and i have no suggestion for imrovement. It made me think of a transient marriage that didn't last for long.
Bye for now, and best of luck with this entry, Abby
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you, AbigailDavid for the great review. All in good fun fiction.
Comment from nitad
Well, it certainly sounds as if someone is about to become road kill. I'm guessing, since she is the one moving fast, that it won't be her. Smart woman!
Excellent entry - good luck in the contest.
Nitad
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Well, it certainly sounds as if someone is about to become road kill. I'm guessing, since she is the one moving fast, that it won't be her. Smart woman!
Excellent entry - good luck in the contest.
Nitad
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you, nitad, for the great and fun review.
Comment from mshugh
That is hysterical - the images you project in six words are priceless - especially that punch line - fast.
Now why couldn't it have been the other way?
Very well done
Michael
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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That is hysterical - the images you project in six words are priceless - especially that punch line - fast.
Now why couldn't it have been the other way?
Very well done
Michael
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you Michael. I had several versions of this one. This one seemed funny.
Comment from Soloneili
Why do I expect a car horn to sound here? At first I thought the story was missing and then I spotted what was going on.
I'm new to all this, but I'm fascinated now.
Great minimilistic writing Amada. What a challenge to make it all count.
You did, so well done.
Good luck too in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Why do I expect a car horn to sound here? At first I thought the story was missing and then I spotted what was going on.
I'm new to all this, but I'm fascinated now.
Great minimilistic writing Amada. What a challenge to make it all count.
You did, so well done.
Good luck too in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you Soloneili for taking the time to understand it. It was a challenge to tell a story in six words; trying to keep these old brain stretching.
Comment from raw form
Thats it in a nutshell, these contests are really interesting your six words to me sounds like it's somewhere you've been before to capture what you wrote so well, really good stuff.
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thats it in a nutshell, these contests are really interesting your six words to me sounds like it's somewhere you've been before to capture what you wrote so well, really good stuff.
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you for the review and the perception. i was the naive young girl holding his hand. Rude awakening.
Comment from catydid52
Well it tells a story for sure. Out of six words, amazing how a story can be constructed.
The beginning, middle and ending, it says it all.
Good job,
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Well it tells a story for sure. Out of six words, amazing how a story can be constructed.
The beginning, middle and ending, it says it all.
Good job,
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you Catydid52 for the great and concise acceptance to this work.
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your welcome.
Comment from Robert Fejeran
Much to the point. Well described in a few words as possible. Without the title, the words are still valid in defining a relationship gone bad. Excellent use of words.
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Much to the point. Well described in a few words as possible. Without the title, the words are still valid in defining a relationship gone bad. Excellent use of words.
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you Rafael for the great review to these six words. Gracias.
Comment from grassroots08
That had to be a difficult task - which six words will tell my story best. Well you succeeded - bravo. It reminds me of the fellow who was asked by Peter at heavens gate what brought him to heaven. He replied that the sign at the road crossing said "Don't walk", so he ran. Enjoy your day.
LOL grassroots08
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That had to be a difficult task - which six words will tell my story best. Well you succeeded - bravo. It reminds me of the fellow who was asked by Peter at heavens gate what brought him to heaven. He replied that the sign at the road crossing said "Don't walk", so he ran. Enjoy your day.
LOL grassroots08
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you for commenting and laughing, grassroots08,
Comment from typrince002
Uhm, what just happened? I'm sorry but I just have no clue as to how that is a story. It did get me thinking however. If you could please comment me back explaining what this is a part of. I see that it is recognized so, as a writer, I must be missing something that is key for it's success.
Best wishes,
Ty
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reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Uhm, what just happened? I'm sorry but I just have no clue as to how that is a story. It did get me thinking however. If you could please comment me back explaining what this is a part of. I see that it is recognized so, as a writer, I must be missing something that is key for it's success.
Best wishes,
Ty
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Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you, typrince002. Just trying to make up a story in only six words and having fun at the same time. The story of why the romance ended.
Comment from ritter1116
Well your story held my attention from the start! LOL thought you did a pretty good job on this contest entry. The title is what hooked me. Good luck in the contest!
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Well your story held my attention from the start! LOL thought you did a pretty good job on this contest entry. The title is what hooked me. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Thank you for laughing and understanding it. And for letting me know you liked it.
