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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "End of Romance"Life stories in only six words!
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Comment from Rainbow Writer
Well, I wasn't quite sure what to make of this at first, I guess I have missed the rest of it. However, within VERY few words, you've managed to paint a picture which begs a thousand questions, so I guess it is pretty clever!
Emma
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Well, I wasn't quite sure what to make of this at first, I guess I have missed the rest of it. However, within VERY few words, you've managed to paint a picture which begs a thousand questions, so I guess it is pretty clever!
Emma
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you Emma. I appreciate the review and the compliment.
Comment from ledford
Good job:-)
Story told in so few words. I bet that husband really regretted his last words!
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Good job:-)
Story told in so few words. I bet that husband really regretted his last words!
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you ledfort for the witty and great review.
Comment from RaymondJohn
The words tell the tale. The reader can put them in whatever context he/she wants to. Unholding hands is really a very telling image. Nice work. Good luck in the competition. Ray.
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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The words tell the tale. The reader can put them in whatever context he/she wants to. Unholding hands is really a very telling image. Nice work. Good luck in the competition. Ray.
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you Ray. I very much appreciate your reviews to my works.
Comment from bkrighter
Amada, very clever.
I especially like the "unholding hands"
That's where it begins, with the little things "we used to do."
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Amada, very clever.
I especially like the "unholding hands"
That's where it begins, with the little things "we used to do."
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you, Steve. I like the lightness and sense of humor of your review.
Comment from phild
I'm not sure where you were going with this. You've left a lot up to the reader to interpret and I like that. A hundred people could read this and come up with a hundred different scenarios. Very interesting.
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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I'm not sure where you were going with this. You've left a lot up to the reader to interpret and I like that. A hundred people could read this and come up with a hundred different scenarios. Very interesting.
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you phild for the great interpretation to my work. Indeed, there are several ways to look at it. I appreciate your time.
Comment from dorothy'stalker
This is good, very good and I hope and pray you won't finish it ever. Could lead to roads of disaster and we wouldn't want that. You captured the essence of the contest.
Dorothy'stalker
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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This is good, very good and I hope and pray you won't finish it ever. Could lead to roads of disaster and we wouldn't want that. You captured the essence of the contest.
Dorothy'stalker
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you Dorothy'stalker for the great support to my work. and savvy comments.
Comment from jsturgeon
Very nice. It made me stop and think for a moment. Was the wife going back to work? Was she meeting a friend? Was she leaving her lover for good? Very nice job. Jeff Sturgeon
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Very nice. It made me stop and think for a moment. Was the wife going back to work? Was she meeting a friend? Was she leaving her lover for good? Very nice job. Jeff Sturgeon
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you, Jeff. Part of the fun is that everyone can have a differnet interpreation.
Comment from GerryMacNeil
An impressive use of six words to convey emotion, and to raise suspense. A great job, and I congratulate you. I love the mystery of the final word, "Fast"! Does that refer to the reaction of those holding hands or to the motion of the wife as she crosses the street? Good! GerryMacNeil
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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An impressive use of six words to convey emotion, and to raise suspense. A great job, and I congratulate you. I love the mystery of the final word, "Fast"! Does that refer to the reaction of those holding hands or to the motion of the wife as she crosses the street? Good! GerryMacNeil
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you for the review, and the enthusiasm, dear fellow writer Gerry MacNeil.
Comment from babylonia
wow~ i'm sorry i didn't look at this one sooner. sounds like me. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. made me smile. keep up the good work~
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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wow~ i'm sorry i didn't look at this one sooner. sounds like me. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. made me smile. keep up the good work~
Comment Written 06-May-2008
reply by the author on 06-May-2008
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Thank you babylonia for the great review, and witty comments.
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you are very welcome. take care.
barbara
Comment from iamwrite
Oh, this is so clever! Talk about capturing a lengthy scenario in six words! Great job. The FS gremilin has just informed me I must say more, even though I argued that I was using sixteen words to review six words. There, this should do it. LOL
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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Oh, this is so clever! Talk about capturing a lengthy scenario in six words! Great job. The FS gremilin has just informed me I must say more, even though I argued that I was using sixteen words to review six words. There, this should do it. LOL
Comment Written 05-May-2008
reply by the author on 05-May-2008
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LOL, that's so clever of you. i have the same problem. Thank you, iamwrite for reviewing it, anyway.
