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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "End of Romance"Life stories in only six words!
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
amada, does that mean the wife wants the husband to get hit by the traffic? or does she want to pick out his anniversary present before he gets to the store? or is she trying to get to the lover's getaway car? this is an intriguing story you've written in 6 words. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-May-2008
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amada, does that mean the wife wants the husband to get hit by the traffic? or does she want to pick out his anniversary present before he gets to the store? or is she trying to get to the lover's getaway car? this is an intriguing story you've written in 6 words. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-May-2008
reply by the author on 27-May-2008
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Thank you Rdfrdmom2 for the review. It was just a silly story with an open-ended solution. I truly appreciate your support to my work
Comment from Focused True North
There's a romantic charm to your entry. There's no picture provided so I instantly imagined two elderly people, married for nearly fifty years, still in love and spending the day together. Enjoyed reading this very much and I wish you the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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There's a romantic charm to your entry. There's no picture provided so I instantly imagined two elderly people, married for nearly fifty years, still in love and spending the day together. Enjoyed reading this very much and I wish you the best for the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2008
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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Thank you for the review and the lovely interpretation. Those elderly couples left me wonder in their secret for staying together all those years.
Comment from Adam Smith
This may be the closest thing to a complete story that was entered. You cetainly grasp the idea of brevity. It does read like a poem, however, and we'll see if that hurst or not. Adam
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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This may be the closest thing to a complete story that was entered. You cetainly grasp the idea of brevity. It does read like a poem, however, and we'll see if that hurst or not. Adam
Comment Written 25-May-2008
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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Thank you for the great review to my six words story. Compressed to the maximum, another exercise in writing.
Comment from Twomoon
very nicely stated..I think it has a message of we are always our self first, or at least trying to find ourself..smile. On the run, nice..a lot of message in this small song, much love twomoon
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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very nicely stated..I think it has a message of we are always our self first, or at least trying to find ourself..smile. On the run, nice..a lot of message in this small song, much love twomoon
Comment Written 23-May-2008
reply by the author on 23-May-2008
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I truly appreciate your comments and your support to this piece.
Comment from littleoleme
How many times have we seen this scenero in real life and didn't know why she was rushing across the street. This brings to mind an OLD OLD movie The Way We Were. So sad!
reply by the author on 22-May-2008
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How many times have we seen this scenero in real life and didn't know why she was rushing across the street. This brings to mind an OLD OLD movie The Way We Were. So sad!
Comment Written 22-May-2008
reply by the author on 22-May-2008
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How true, that association is amazing with that part of the movie. That's one of my fav movies, and I didn't see the connection. Bravo.
Comment from EllieKaye
These are fun to read. Your six words paint a definite picture. Fanstory makes me come back to this because I don't write enough words to describe your words. Funny eh?
Wishing you the best-
EllieKaye
reply by the author on 22-May-2008
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These are fun to read. Your six words paint a definite picture. Fanstory makes me come back to this because I don't write enough words to describe your words. Funny eh?
Wishing you the best-
EllieKaye
Comment Written 22-May-2008
reply by the author on 22-May-2008
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Thank you EllieKaye, your comments reached my heart. Best wishes to you also.
Comment from skye
I wonder why, and who, and what will happen next. Good poem.
Six word stories are difficult. You have found a way to make it interesting.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 22-May-2008
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I wonder why, and who, and what will happen next. Good poem.
Six word stories are difficult. You have found a way to make it interesting.
Very well done.
Comment Written 21-May-2008
reply by the author on 22-May-2008
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Thank you skye for commenting in this short short story.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello amada,
I've read this one several times and the final word, "fast" leaves me pondering. Fast to get away, to go toward, to go backwards. Fast ....... hmmmmmmmm - the puzzling
last word.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 20-May-2008
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Hello amada,
I've read this one several times and the final word, "fast" leaves me pondering. Fast to get away, to go toward, to go backwards. Fast ....... hmmmmmmmm - the puzzling
last word.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 20-May-2008
reply by the author on 20-May-2008
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Thank you LateBllomer for the comments. Everyone has an interpretation; I think that's the beauty of it. We all are different, and unique. I was thinking she was walking fast toward the husband, ready to kill him. Hehehehe.
Comment from medisec
Yes, this would be a life-changing event--sounds like a break up of a relationship. Hard to describe in this unusual contest with only 6 words, but I did get the picture. Good luck in the contest.
Medisec
reply by the author on 20-May-2008
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Yes, this would be a life-changing event--sounds like a break up of a relationship. Hard to describe in this unusual contest with only 6 words, but I did get the picture. Good luck in the contest.
Medisec
Comment Written 19-May-2008
reply by the author on 20-May-2008
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Thank you, Medisec, for your great comments.
Comment from Annmuma
These six words bring to mind a number of possible scenarios -- including several that make me smile. Good luck in the contest. ann
reply by the author on 19-May-2008
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These six words bring to mind a number of possible scenarios -- including several that make me smile. Good luck in the contest. ann
Comment Written 19-May-2008
reply by the author on 19-May-2008
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Thank you, Ann, for the review and the good wishes.
