I, As the Organ Grinder
A limerick? For cheer!9 total reviews
Comment from Twomoon
Mike, you seem to have cheered up someone..I hope! Well, this was certainly poetic and to the point..if someone did this and you went back, then yes, it would be slapping yourself in the face..well, I enjoyed your organ grinder..much love twomoon
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Mike, you seem to have cheered up someone..I hope! Well, this was certainly poetic and to the point..if someone did this and you went back, then yes, it would be slapping yourself in the face..well, I enjoyed your organ grinder..much love twomoon
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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I hope too, I think she lost her cat. One reviewer expressed doubt that I could slap myself in the face...I still haven't figured out how to respond. It was a tounge in cheek figerative response.... Hey maybe that's it! Two thank you so much for your compliments, review and enjoying this one two. Much love is always returned from MikeK too.
Comment from Celtic~Soul
Laugh achieved! This was cute and touching! Nice use of the repeating sound for the end of the last lines that led to the wrap up. Slap myself in the face - like to see that one! Ha, ha!
Great word choices with contrasts like the organ grinding and the caviar, etc. Thanks for sharing!
CS
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Laugh achieved! This was cute and touching! Nice use of the repeating sound for the end of the last lines that led to the wrap up. Slap myself in the face - like to see that one! Ha, ha!
Great word choices with contrasts like the organ grinding and the caviar, etc. Thanks for sharing!
CS
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Hey! With the day I had, that is great to hear. My slap in the face was a figurative term, sort of toung in cheek. Oops, that phrase doesn't really go with this poem. lol Thank you very much for enjoying the poem, the compliments and this review.
Comment from smokyeye
This is the way humorous poetry is supposed to be presented. It is simple and yet quick with humor. I like your work because it is nature themed and different from others presented
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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This is the way humorous poetry is supposed to be presented. It is simple and yet quick with humor. I like your work because it is nature themed and different from others presented
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. This one had a nature to it, I agree. Also a bit of an attitude! Have a great day!
Comment from P1
deffinately prefer the champagne and
passion, but yeah this gave me a giggle
this poems intriuge me and leave me
dying form curiosity, but ill draw my
own conclusions. hugs lynda.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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deffinately prefer the champagne and
passion, but yeah this gave me a giggle
this poems intriuge me and leave me
dying form curiosity, but ill draw my
own conclusions. hugs lynda.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Just trying to hopefully cheer up my favorite poetess. Feel free to draw! To be honest, I was laughing more after I posted it then creating it. For the convention, I may come up with a "Paranoid Poet's corner." Just things like this that are not pointed at anybody, but humorous and everchanging. Lynda, Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. I agree with you, champagne and caviar, from my standpoint is what I call passion... and the ring of fire.
Comment from wirenut
Mike K2
as a poem it's cool and flows well delivers the thought well however...
a limericK is a five line poem in a specific format which i do not know .
thanks for sharing
rick
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Mike K2
as a poem it's cool and flows well delivers the thought well however...
a limericK is a five line poem in a specific format which i do not know .
thanks for sharing
rick
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Hey, thanks for the information, but keep the description the same. I usually enjoy the proper one's as well. Thank you for yur compliments and this review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Ummm ... this is different for
you Mike. Cleverly done, admittedly,
but not up to your usual standard...
Good rhyme... love the monkey..
Margaret.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Ummm ... this is different for
you Mike. Cleverly done, admittedly,
but not up to your usual standard...
Good rhyme... love the monkey..
Margaret.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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The naughty boy in me, couldn't resist that monkey. I didn't realize the double entendre' in it until after. Just something else for people to have fun with. A while back, a poetess was writing a series of these warming and seductive poems and then the guys, including me started doing them. Then she railed against what was happening on the site. lol Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from skye
Humorous, good rhymes, nice theme.
Easy to read and follow.
Some of the images within the poem work against each other.
The idea of lace and organ grrinding are not easily compatible.
Your overall poem was okay.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Humorous, good rhymes, nice theme.
Easy to read and follow.
Some of the images within the poem work against each other.
The idea of lace and organ grrinding are not easily compatible.
Your overall poem was okay.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Exactly! We have my intentions verses the reader's interperation. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review.
Comment from Victoria...
LOL. Interesting read. What is a "limerich"?
The poem sounds like something my "rapping" students would come out with.
Tiny spaggie. "champaign" should be "champagne".
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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LOL. Interesting read. What is a "limerich"?
The poem sounds like something my "rapping" students would come out with.
Tiny spaggie. "champaign" should be "champagne".
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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I did change the typo. This poem isn't actually a limerich as they have a stricter format. I just wanted something with the same bounce. I don't know if I sould feel complimented with the rap, I wouldn't doubt it. You ought to see they way they look when I beat box.
Thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
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I consider it a compliment. It's the rhythm of it, the structure, and as much as I don't always like the words or "music" of rap, I respect the form. If you mean a "limerick", then you have the word spelled wrong, but it's not one, so I wasn't sure. I thought maybe it was a different form the way "haiku" and "senryu" are. LOL.
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Thanks, I check and fix the spelling. I took it as a compliments. For the most part, with rap I severely dislike the content, but there are a few songs that I enjoy as they are in good taste and well done. Have a great day!
Comment from bloodyaurore
Lol! This is a great poem, though I'd give you five stars for having a monkey reference alone. Nice rhyme and flow, no spag problems I could find.
-bloodyaurore
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Lol! This is a great poem, though I'd give you five stars for having a monkey reference alone. Nice rhyme and flow, no spag problems I could find.
-bloodyaurore
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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LOL Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
