Comment from rama devi

Excellent

A very enjoyable read....bet the doggies are adorable....of course they are! I found the entire poem witty, especially the last verse...telephones...that one had me chuckling. I bet they love to chew the wire...or bark at the rings...eh?

Jump upon anyone having fun....

lol

Just lots of loving joy.

Warm regards,
rama devi

PS Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2008

they chew on the phones but don't bark at them. they are pure, unconditional love. thanks, rama devi. love, jan

Comment from starkat

Excellent

Your love for your Scotties shines through in this well written double mini-monoverse. These poems are harder to write than most people think. You did a fabulous job with this light hearted poem. Enjoyed the imagery of your pups having fun and being the quinessential pups.

This is a delightful read and a wonderful contest entry.
Wishing you the best, always
star

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2008

thanks, starkat. love, jan

Comment from Showboat

Excellent

Hey Jan,

Well, that was just darling.

Scotties are so much fun and they have an incredible sense of humor. Thanks for sharing them with us a while,

Gayle

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2008

they are a hoot, Gayle. love, jan

Comment from Lead Scout

Excellent

Wonderful piece and I liked the imagery and rhyme.
My most favorite stanza:

Pups of mine
Mighty fine
Love divine
When supine
They don't whine

I surely love it.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2008

thanks, Lead Scout. I love them, no doubt. love, jan

Comment from HalfHoff

Excellent

your versitility just astounds me! This is soooo dang cute, it brought tears to my eyes! Golly -- I have missed you sooooooooo much! XO

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2008

thanks, Lea Ann. now, this one, I had some clue where I wanted to go. these pups are anything but lazy. I was out-of-town when I wrote this one and missing them like crazy. I have missed you, too, my friend. love, jan

Comment from Lady & Louis

Excellent

Cuuuute!

Lovely little poem to your Scotties - have they found their way out of that mucky black pool of melted monitor, yet? Could be difficult combing it out of their hair if it hardens...

Good luck in the contest!

Louise xxxx

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2008

thanks, my queen. it all gets a little murky here, sometimes. love, jan

Comment from Twomoon

Excellent

Jan, you are certainly having quite the picnic tonight...haha..this was wonderful..dogs names for reaL??? This was grand and filled with your charm..I love your words, the placement and the whole of this fun piece..ice cream cones and bones..great stuff..much love twomoon

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2008

yes, they are named Gwen and Mac -- short for Lady Guinivere and Sir McTavish. after I had the nerve to enter the contest, I couldn't decide what to write -- most of my stuff is so serious, thought I'd try to lighten up tonight. love, jan

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very sweet poem you have penned. It is full of great descriptive wording and very good imagery. Great job my friend.Hugs, Teri

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2008

thanks, Teri. it's the second piece about my babies. they are precious. trying to lighten up a little. :>) love, jan

Comment from jshep

Excellent

Very cute, great description, good flow. You met all the requirements, but I think you stretched it a bit with the rhyme on "jump upon". Just an example " Jump the gun, Ate a bun, mean as Hun" - I am sure you have gotten my good intentions by now.

Fun poem and the mini monoverse appears to be quite a challenge.

Great job.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2008

thanks, jshep. yes, I got your good intentions and I thank you for them. love, jan

Comment from Victoria...

Excellent

Cute. I'm not sure I like the requirements, but given them, you've done a really good job. Dogs are rather repetitive so the subject matter works with this too. LOL.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2008

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2008

Victoria, the requirements seemed simple until I actually started implementing them. Don't think I'll be going out of my way to be writing many of these, for sure. love, jan