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Life stories in only six words!

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Comment from Trena One Who Cares
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Hi Alvin Good short story line. Strong effective meaning in six short wise words. God bless. Good luck to you on the contest. Trena

 Comment Written 01-May-2008

reply by the author on 02-May-2008
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Ritsal
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You're right. rNo one but God really knows anyone. Great job in crafting a six-word memoir. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Rita

 Comment Written 01-May-2008

reply by the author on 01-May-2008
    Thank you. You "caught" exactly what I wanted to convey.
Comment from bard owl
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Excellent entry. You have truly described a loner with terse elegance. It sounds so lonely to say "no one but God knew him." Inspired minimalist. As usual, your work is intelligently thought-provoking. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 01-May-2008
    yes, I used to be so verbose I wondered if, under the influence of Japanese culture, I have become too minimalistic. What do you think? Thanks for a good review.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
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Hi Alvin,
Excellent story. It has great impact. In my opinion this subject is one that has been expressed in so many different ways yet it can't be overworked or overstressed. Thanks for your thought provoking message.
Whizpurr ^-^

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
    I really appreciate the six stars. I take a concept that has been difficult at least since the time of Descartes and show how so many philosophers (Descartes, Whitehead, etc.) though God was the unifying factor of the embodied soul. Thanks for understanding what I wanted to convey.
Comment from marswolf
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It's hard to really know another person
when we don't really know who 'we' are...
In six little words you give us a lot to think on...
and a lot of wisdom as well.
Best of luck in the contest Alvin !

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
    Thanks. I always think of the Biblical quotation I learned as a child--"Man looketh on the outward appearance, but God looketh on the heart"--I Samuel 16:7
Comment from empire76
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The mysterious one. Good entry. Finally I am on the last one. Yay! I like that. Very concise ad strong. Good luck in the contest. There are so many good entries
Empi

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
    Yes, it was quite a contest. A magazine is running the same contest--I can't remember the name of the magazine. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from PoesyPoet
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This is an awesome and most powerful statement, Alvin. This is another that rocked the poetic pen. Best of luck. It sounds like a winner to me.
Celeste

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 30-Apr-2008
    Thanks. Don't take this wrong but you remind so much of the wisdom Bessie, the black woman, who brought me up, taught me. I learned more from her than from anyone else. Thank you so much for sharing that wisdom.
Comment from cherry_rose
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This is so true about everyone. Not just one person. We might think we know a person but do we really know them in the deepest recesses of their being, I don't really think so, but God does. Very nice memoir.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
    Yes, I think this tells an eternal truth about human nature.
Comment from IndianaIrish
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What a beautiful entry, Alvin. No matter the trials or loneliness we feel in our lives, there is always someone who knows us and loves us unconditionally. Thanks, Al.
Smiles,
Indy :>)

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
    You "caught" exactly what I wanted to portray.
Comment from Showboat
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Hi Alvin,

That was a true statement, wasn't it? God knows us all,
inside and out.

I liked the simplicity of the piece, thank you for sharing.

Best in the contest,
Gayle


 Comment Written 29-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
    Yes, I felt it need a simplicity if it were only six words.