Serene
On dedication.11 total reviews
Comment from HalfHoff
golly -- wow -- and jeepers! Must be a message for someone who felt you were carrying too much and you needed to calm their fears? Probably way out in left field without a glove, but that's my best position --- no one expects much. XO Lea Ann
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2008
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golly -- wow -- and jeepers! Must be a message for someone who felt you were carrying too much and you needed to calm their fears? Probably way out in left field without a glove, but that's my best position --- no one expects much. XO Lea Ann
Comment Written 19-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2008
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Expects much? Only when it counts, hopefully not to get crossed with the center fielders ego. lol Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. I don't think calming fears is possible, just being there is.
Comment from Twomoon
wow, Mike this was just short, sweet, and beautiful..I loved it..your voice sang with the lovely scenery...wow..the bridge to happiness, nice job..hope she returns your heart..much love twomoon
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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wow, Mike this was just short, sweet, and beautiful..I loved it..your voice sang with the lovely scenery...wow..the bridge to happiness, nice job..hope she returns your heart..much love twomoon
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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I hope she does to, but to me, she is always there. I have only walked through one Japanese garden, there is a certain spirit one finds there. Thanks for the compliments and this review, I enjoy these Two.
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I love those gardens..and you are welcome..hugs two...
Comment from Miriam Kingfisher
This is definitely worth the rating. Plain, hard hitting, softly caressing, straight to the point, wonderfully worded statement of truth and reality.
I love your captured sincerity of the picture and these words.
Powerful imagery.
Take Care.
Miriam.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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This is definitely worth the rating. Plain, hard hitting, softly caressing, straight to the point, wonderfully worded statement of truth and reality.
I love your captured sincerity of the picture and these words.
Powerful imagery.
Take Care.
Miriam.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. I enjoyed the points that you made too.
Comment from bluetwo
Unless you are under some sort of word limit or format constraint, this poem is much too short to convey any sense of serenity to me. Sorry.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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Unless you are under some sort of word limit or format constraint, this poem is much too short to convey any sense of serenity to me. Sorry.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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I wanted this to be a Haiku, that is also why I incorperated an illustration. Thank you for the review.
Comment from bard owl
With 9 words you have written one of the most romantic poems I have every read. In it's simplicity, this poem is amazingly filled with what true love really means. Excellent. bard owl
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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With 9 words you have written one of the most romantic poems I have every read. In it's simplicity, this poem is amazingly filled with what true love really means. Excellent. bard owl
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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Well, I really appreciate these words that are in this review. Sometimes, these poems hit me and it feels like they are being dictated from outside of me, in a way it's scarey. This stimulates my heart and mind and this was peened and posted at the first thought. Thank you very much for reviewing and complimenting me on this poem.
Comment from Adam Smith
In a way, this worked as a reminder to me that no matter what else is going on in my life, I have my love, my wife, and I should remember to let her know, that I love her so. It's easy to forget to say it and no matter what she knows about how I feel, she still likes to hear it. As do I. This says so much in so few words.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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In a way, this worked as a reminder to me that no matter what else is going on in my life, I have my love, my wife, and I should remember to let her know, that I love her so. It's easy to forget to say it and no matter what she knows about how I feel, she still likes to hear it. As do I. This says so much in so few words.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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I thinks it's not that it is taken for granted nor, forgotten, but that it is known. Being a photographer I am sort of like a ghost (also an observer of life) and one time I was around a bunch of women and an elderly couple and the women were amazed at the appearance of the relationship and a conversation started. They said you must tell each other how much you love the other all the time. They said that neither has in years, 1) They no longer felt that they had too. 2) They felt that the words didn't express it and actually encumbered that love. I became uninvited by everyone but the couple when I mentioned that it wasn't September so they shouldn't be thinking like that. Personally, if I had a love like that, I would err on the safe side. lol
Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from rama devi
It has a senryu flavor yet is a style all its own. pwoerful in its brevity. Strong message accompanied by a vivid picture. The emotion and certainty of your love and the wisdom to know that the highest love can bear any sacrifice are strongly imparted in three simple lines. this is not easily achieved. Kudos to you.
I loved this poem.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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It has a senryu flavor yet is a style all its own. pwoerful in its brevity. Strong message accompanied by a vivid picture. The emotion and certainty of your love and the wisdom to know that the highest love can bear any sacrifice are strongly imparted in three simple lines. this is not easily achieved. Kudos to you.
I loved this poem.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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Not considering myself to be a poet, nor an expert, I have found that it is best not to classify my poems. All to often, it ends up a discussion of form and not the substance. In this case the thoughts actually came out as a Hiaku and so that is how I fashioned them.
I am about to be divorced from a bad love, but I put everything into trying, not so much for her as she told me some time ago not to considered us married and she started dating; but for her step-kids sake so that they would have a better platform and example to follow. The sacrifice is important as I had no regrets either way and left it with both my heart and soul intact.
Thank you for your warms regards, kudos, compliments and this review that I enjoyed very much. Mike
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Thank you for sharing so openly. I am sorry to hear of your pain...and it does take time to heal from heart-wounds. herre is a healing cyber hug.....May your sacrifice reap dividends in Heaven.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
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I hear a cyber whisper that you need to start breating. It took a lot of pain to get me to realize this, but with the marriage situation, I was healing even before we settele and she left. The greatest thing in my life is realizing that everything is OK and I need not do anything to prove it.
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Yes, that is very wise. Everything is okay and accpetable. You have a good intuitive cyber-whisper antenna!
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment from daizylublue
Mike,
Hey, this is simple, true, and to the point. What can you change about something stated so well? I enjoyed this little ditty and didn't see any problems needing correction.
Daizy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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Mike,
Hey, this is simple, true, and to the point. What can you change about something stated so well? I enjoyed this little ditty and didn't see any problems needing correction.
Daizy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and tis review, that I enjoyed too. Mike
Comment from Kingsland
I don't see this as a poetic message
it is more of something that would find on a refrigerator magnet
I usually like what you write
but poetically I find this piece lacking
but like I stated
it is still a good message... John
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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I don't see this as a poetic message
it is more of something that would find on a refrigerator magnet
I usually like what you write
but poetically I find this piece lacking
but like I stated
it is still a good message... John
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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I accept the reating. Belivbe it or not, peolpe want me to supply them with refridgerator magnets as oppose to the two thousand card I had printed up over the lovesick poam. The message is the truth and that is why the message is good. Mike
Comment from RossJM
This is a lovely and very wise creation of yours, Mike.
I liked the way you said it:
MATTERS NOT
WHAT MY SHOULDERS BEAR
and then the grand finale:
I LOVE YOU
Not sure though about all caps. Do you think it's better this way?
Regards,
Ross
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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This is a lovely and very wise creation of yours, Mike.
I liked the way you said it:
MATTERS NOT
WHAT MY SHOULDERS BEAR
and then the grand finale:
I LOVE YOU
Not sure though about all caps. Do you think it's better this way?
Regards,
Ross
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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In this case, the caps, yes. Thank you for this review. MikeK
