Those Three Special Words
The words that should mean the most.121 total reviews
Comment from HalfHoff
used too frequently -- but even then, are appreciated and lighten a persons heart and perspective ... but to 'really' mean it and know it is returned ... well ... that's what fairy tales are made of. XO
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2008
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used too frequently -- but even then, are appreciated and lighten a persons heart and perspective ... but to 'really' mean it and know it is returned ... well ... that's what fairy tales are made of. XO
Comment Written 19-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2008
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I honestly don't think that has to be the case. It is when conditions are put on it that those words can become daunting. There are so many ways to say them, even without the words. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Hugs, Mike
Comment from boberto
I like this Mike K2. However, one word in the second
couplet gives me a little problem.
Being said to one that truly does care,
while not hurting the one who does bear. "BEAR"
Are you using "bear" meaning not hurting the bearer of these three words ----the one who bears these 3 words???
The verse has done well, so I guess I am the only one to question.
boberto
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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I like this Mike K2. However, one word in the second
couplet gives me a little problem.
Being said to one that truly does care,
while not hurting the one who does bear. "BEAR"
Are you using "bear" meaning not hurting the bearer of these three words ----the one who bears these 3 words???
The verse has done well, so I guess I am the only one to question.
boberto
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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To your question, yes. I am refering to the bearer of those words. Usually when I mean it, these words just come out and the results tend to be pretty porfound. I don't know why I am nade up this way or if it is a karma involved, but the repercussions involved have been staggering. This poem came from the deppest recesses of my heart and I felt that it was something that is needed by many people. Thank you very much for your compliments and review. MikeK
Comment from AuroraBorealis
Mike,
this was an endearing piece that shows a serious, romantic side to you.
The message was clear and well thought out, rhyme was nicely done.
Nice write, my friend.
Cheers,
Aurora
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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Mike,
this was an endearing piece that shows a serious, romantic side to you.
The message was clear and well thought out, rhyme was nicely done.
Nice write, my friend.
Cheers,
Aurora
Comment Written 10-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
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Well, that poem came out extremely hard felt and I am glad that it you enjoyed that. I thank you for you compliments and this review.
Comment from skye
Those are the most important words that we can share with another...
I love you. We all need to hear them, all want to believe them, all should say them more often.
Very well written, good message.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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Those are the most important words that we can share with another...
I love you. We all need to hear them, all want to believe them, all should say them more often.
Very well written, good message.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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Thank you very much for your review and the compliments.
Comment from Evilyn Sang
Your poem was very deep and straight from the heart. It was very enjoyable. However, this is one thing that could be fixed:
While looking only in my loved one eye's
*While looking only in my loved one's eyes.
Other than that, it was a really good poem. Keep up the good work!
VG
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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Your poem was very deep and straight from the heart. It was very enjoyable. However, this is one thing that could be fixed:
While looking only in my loved one eye's
*While looking only in my loved one's eyes.
Other than that, it was a really good poem. Keep up the good work!
VG
Comment Written 09-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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I fixed the typo, it went back and forth with this one. The I's have it. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Mike K2 ....
I have to give you 4 stars for this (Good : Adjustments needed) because there is work needed in order to improve what you have written.
* The words breath / depth have the same vowel sound but they do not really rhyme. With a bit of thought, you should be able to correct this quite easily.
* You have - While looking only in my loved one eye's ...
This should be - While looking only in my loved-one's eyes ....
* In order to really enhance this writing, you need to concentrate on your metre and thus your rhythm.
* You have -
Being said to one that truly does care,
While not hurting the one who does bear.
In order to get a correct pair of rhyming words, you have sacrificed the meaning in your second line.
If you do decide to work on this, contact me again and I will gladly re-review it for you.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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Hullo Mike K2 ....
I have to give you 4 stars for this (Good : Adjustments needed) because there is work needed in order to improve what you have written.
* The words breath / depth have the same vowel sound but they do not really rhyme. With a bit of thought, you should be able to correct this quite easily.
* You have - While looking only in my loved one eye's ...
This should be - While looking only in my loved-one's eyes ....
* In order to really enhance this writing, you need to concentrate on your metre and thus your rhythm.
* You have -
Being said to one that truly does care,
While not hurting the one who does bear.
In order to get a correct pair of rhyming words, you have sacrificed the meaning in your second line.
If you do decide to work on this, contact me again and I will gladly re-review it for you.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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I changed the eyes. I appreciate you taking the time to review this, but I am happy with my wording. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Stuart Ayris
Hi! I loved the sentiment here and the rhyming though I found it lacked a little in rhythm. I stumbled over the occasional line but, as I said, I really liked the idea and with some tweaks it could be great! Cheers! Stu
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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Hi! I loved the sentiment here and the rhyming though I found it lacked a little in rhythm. I stumbled over the occasional line but, as I said, I really liked the idea and with some tweaks it could be great! Cheers! Stu
Comment Written 09-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from bduckett1
A great little poem. Those three simple words that mean so much.
Those words spoken in so many ways have a different meaning each time.
Great job!
bduckett1
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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A great little poem. Those three simple words that mean so much.
Those words spoken in so many ways have a different meaning each time.
Great job!
bduckett1
Comment Written 09-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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Thank you very much for the compliments and this review.
Comment from mmichelle97219
Those words can bring heaven or hell depending on how it is said. I thought this to be an excellent posting. I enjoyed it.
Michelle
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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Those words can bring heaven or hell depending on how it is said. I thought this to be an excellent posting. I enjoyed it.
Michelle
Comment Written 09-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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I think the wording of this review needs to be restated, "Those words can be heaven and hell, at the same instant!" lol My favorite girl I said those words too, smile and said that she loved me too, then started shaking like a leaf or turn beat red and pump her fist at me. Thank you very much for the compliments and tis review, I am glad that you enjoyed this one too. Mike
Comment from Princess Michi
What a great poem! 3 tiny words in our language cause such emotion both good and bad. You have expressed what we are all waiting for when we hear those words!
~~Michelle
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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What a great poem! 3 tiny words in our language cause such emotion both good and bad. You have expressed what we are all waiting for when we hear those words!
~~Michelle
Comment Written 09-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2008
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I love this review. Yes, good and bad, often at the same time. Thank you very much for your compliments and tis review. Mike
