Holocaust
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Comment from NightWriter
Very well written poem and moving story. Your poem grabbed my attention from the beginning and held it to the end. Nice choice of font and color. The picture was a bit too much for me, but it did unfortunately go with the story.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Very well written poem and moving story. Your poem grabbed my attention from the beginning and held it to the end. Nice choice of font and color. The picture was a bit too much for me, but it did unfortunately go with the story.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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And that is why I chose it for the subject matter. This is a disturbing subject on all levels, and I wished to portray it that way.
Thank you for your review and for your comments. they are appreciated.
Comment from SFEDER2A
I am honored that you have chosen my artwork to write such an important piece. Your words are so full of imagery which depicts such a horrid unforgivable act of genocide in our recent history. Thank you for writing this excellent work and sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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I am honored that you have chosen my artwork to write such an important piece. Your words are so full of imagery which depicts such a horrid unforgivable act of genocide in our recent history. Thank you for writing this excellent work and sharing it with us.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Reply by private message. Thanks again!
Curt
Comment from GregoryC
A very unique and appealing rhyme scheme - further enhanced by its internal rhynme and enjambments. I don't think I've ever seen anything quite this extraordinary. If you look at the trends in contemporary and post-modern poetry, you'll rarely, if ever fnd, such a form as yours. Nice work, refreshing and original.
Gregory
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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A very unique and appealing rhyme scheme - further enhanced by its internal rhynme and enjambments. I don't think I've ever seen anything quite this extraordinary. If you look at the trends in contemporary and post-modern poetry, you'll rarely, if ever fnd, such a form as yours. Nice work, refreshing and original.
Gregory
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Thank you for your most insightful review. I know very little about other forms and crafts in poetry, but like you, I have not seen anything quite like this. Maybe I should start my own form?
Thanks again,
Curt
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You are the inventor and deserve the right to name it. Get some ideas from fellow poets as to what this form should be called.
gregory
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I will do just that! Any suggestions?
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Maybe 'Mongold Metered Rhyme' Off the top of my head.
Gregory
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Too narcissitic for me. How about circadian rhythm poetry?
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Yes, it sounds better. Maybe you'll get suggestions from other poets if you post a request for naming that poetic form.
Gregory
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Thanks, I'll do that.
Curt
Comment from Kingsland
you depict war well in this well written verse
as you have some excellent phrasing in its lines
you paint war as a black and red blood scene
this poem lays it all out in great poetic flair
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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you depict war well in this well written verse
as you have some excellent phrasing in its lines
you paint war as a black and red blood scene
this poem lays it all out in great poetic flair
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Thank you John. Your comments are most appreciated.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from volunteer angel
Let's hope that "train ride to genocide," will stop before all the world becomes involved in a nuclear war. Your poem was very graphic and gives a sickening view of what war is all about. It's something for everyone to think about when it comes to what could happen here. Great job! V.A.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Let's hope that "train ride to genocide," will stop before all the world becomes involved in a nuclear war. Your poem was very graphic and gives a sickening view of what war is all about. It's something for everyone to think about when it comes to what could happen here. Great job! V.A.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Thank you for your very kind comments and rating. It is always a pleasure for me when someone enjoys my writing.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Penpal
This piece carries a profound message. Its powerful verse is uniquely structured with a rhyming scheme that compliments the piece as a whole. It's sombering, and makes us look at ourselves in relation to that horrible time. Great word choice, great expressional voice.
Sallysaucer
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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This piece carries a profound message. Its powerful verse is uniquely structured with a rhyming scheme that compliments the piece as a whole. It's sombering, and makes us look at ourselves in relation to that horrible time. Great word choice, great expressional voice.
Sallysaucer
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Thank you for your very kind comments! I truly appreciate the review, it makes my day when my writing is enjoyed.
Curt
Comment from AlvinTEthington
A very interesting yet subtle rhyme scheme, using internal rhymes and enjambment. I have never seen this before and enjoyed it very much. I do have one suggestion---change the title to "Sho'ah", a Hebrew word meaning destruction/annihilation, from "Holocaust", a Greek word meaning burnt offering. As someone who has had to each that event on the college level for years, I have come to the conclusion that the Hebrew should be the preferred word. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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A very interesting yet subtle rhyme scheme, using internal rhymes and enjambment. I have never seen this before and enjoyed it very much. I do have one suggestion---change the title to "Sho'ah", a Hebrew word meaning destruction/annihilation, from "Holocaust", a Greek word meaning burnt offering. As someone who has had to each that event on the college level for years, I have come to the conclusion that the Hebrew should be the preferred word. Excellent work.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Thank you for your most enlightening review! I was actually going to do that, but there is already a poem listed by someone else under that title. I didn't want there to be any confusion.
Thanks again,
Curt
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You could always title it "Sho'ah (Holocaust.)"
Comment from daizylublue
Very moving poem Curt. This stanza is especially haunting:
rain ride to genocide, go inside,
bodies fried, tombs to share the stinking air,
bones are bare, burnt skin sags in body bags,
soldier gags, guts spill, vultures fill.
Descriptive and true. Have you had the opportunity to see "Band of Brothers?" It's a great series. In the end American troops discover a camp. They didn't know what it was or why these people were in the condition they were. The Germans fled when they lost the war. Nice work. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Very moving poem Curt. This stanza is especially haunting:
rain ride to genocide, go inside,
bodies fried, tombs to share the stinking air,
bones are bare, burnt skin sags in body bags,
soldier gags, guts spill, vultures fill.
Descriptive and true. Have you had the opportunity to see "Band of Brothers?" It's a great series. In the end American troops discover a camp. They didn't know what it was or why these people were in the condition they were. The Germans fled when they lost the war. Nice work. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Thank you for your very kind review. No, I don't believe I have watched that series, but it sounds interesting.
Thanks again,
Curt
Comment from King Arthur
Dear Friend,
I sit here mesmerised at your skill with words and rhyme. Your message is clear and links together to produce and electrifying gaze at one of the most inhumane act since Moses and Pharaoh in Egypt. Your expertise with the words and dynamics of human speech have rendered not only a poem, but a picture as well. Thank you for this poem. It will touch many. Arthur.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Dear Friend,
I sit here mesmerised at your skill with words and rhyme. Your message is clear and links together to produce and electrifying gaze at one of the most inhumane act since Moses and Pharaoh in Egypt. Your expertise with the words and dynamics of human speech have rendered not only a poem, but a picture as well. Thank you for this poem. It will touch many. Arthur.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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You honor me with your praise and kind comments my friend. It is a pleasure for me to know my words reached you. Your review has made my day!
Thanks again,
Curt
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Curt....this is a well written poem with a poignant message. The thing that gets me the most about this war and all the others are the little children that are murdered. My late husband fought in the Korean war and was wounded twice. One of my grandson's was in Iraq for a year and came home safe. It was hard or me to draw a peaceful breath during that time. I can relate to this poem. Well done....chey
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Hi Curt....this is a well written poem with a poignant message. The thing that gets me the most about this war and all the others are the little children that are murdered. My late husband fought in the Korean war and was wounded twice. One of my grandson's was in Iraq for a year and came home safe. It was hard or me to draw a peaceful breath during that time. I can relate to this poem. Well done....chey
Comment Written 10-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2008
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Thank you for the kind review and comments. I don't believe there are many who were not or are not affected by the sensless tragedy of war.
Thanks again,
Curt
