Whiteout!
As this condition applies.15 total reviews
Comment from marion
You have linked the realms so well here. Another good penned poem with many meanings as your final note suggests. Whiteout! ... I've had a little experience with this but in the sky's airways. I flew a microlight for a few years and my partner is a helicopter pilot ... not quite the same physical effect as the whiteout from snow, but the sensations are, as is the life threat! A pleasure to read. Marion.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2008
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You have linked the realms so well here. Another good penned poem with many meanings as your final note suggests. Whiteout! ... I've had a little experience with this but in the sky's airways. I flew a microlight for a few years and my partner is a helicopter pilot ... not quite the same physical effect as the whiteout from snow, but the sensations are, as is the life threat! A pleasure to read. Marion.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2008
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Thank you very much for taking a look at this one, the compliments and the review. Dealing with something like is is a character builder and can be remembered and used for other parts of one's lives.
Comment from ~Dovey
This reminds me of driving in ice fog. (It's been -40 below here for a week, so I can relate to everything in your poem.) Such is life in Fairbanks, Alaska. Nice job on the poem Mike. :)
~Dovey
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2008
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This reminds me of driving in ice fog. (It's been -40 below here for a week, so I can relate to everything in your poem.) Such is life in Fairbanks, Alaska. Nice job on the poem Mike. :)
~Dovey
Comment Written 10-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2008
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I believe that you haven't lived until you have been surviving in that extreme. I remember the first time I camped out in subzero weather, they told me that they are keeping the cabin warm for me. Later that night, I finally was comfortable enough to sleep and the Scoutmaster just had to wake me up, "Just seeing if you are still alive?" It was so cold that night, when the next day hit 32 degrees, I was in short sleeves. Thank you very much for your compliments and review.
Comment from AK
Hello Mike,
Very powerful story! I especially thought this effective:
I feel the Devil's hand
around my chest, squeeze.
If I panic and run, ice
spicules form and will
drop me to my knees.
Your note were very interesting too and I enjoyed learning some new facts. Thanks for sharing with me:)
Ami
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2008
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Hello Mike,
Very powerful story! I especially thought this effective:
I feel the Devil's hand
around my chest, squeeze.
If I panic and run, ice
spicules form and will
drop me to my knees.
Your note were very interesting too and I enjoyed learning some new facts. Thanks for sharing with me:)
Ami
Comment Written 09-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and review. It is my pleasure to share and consider yourself welcome to go through my portfolio at any time. mike
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Mike. This is a very well written piece of poetry about a whiteout. I was a little unsure about the word SPICULE as looked it up and didn't see the relevance to ice. Wouldn't icicles be just as good?
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2008
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Hi Mike. This is a very well written piece of poetry about a whiteout. I was a little unsure about the word SPICULE as looked it up and didn't see the relevance to ice. Wouldn't icicles be just as good?
Comment Written 09-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2008
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Now, a spicule is a type of chrysal that would form within confines of the air sacs of your lungs. You'de be dead before they grew big enought to be ice cycles. I imply icicles when I speak about being suffocated by your breath. Before camping in potential sub-zero weather, I grom a beard so that the ice doesn't form on my face and burn my skin. That is in the vein of wind burn.
Thank you so much for your compliments and review. We must have reviewed each others poems at the same time.
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Thanks for explaining that Mike. I looked it up but there was no reference to what you have explained. It makes sense now.
Comment from VICTIMEYES
thewords seem to indicate some critical situations
but the it appears to ease back out to safety at the end
could e a depiction of life and hard times as well as many other thoughts it causes.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2008
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thewords seem to indicate some critical situations
but the it appears to ease back out to safety at the end
could e a depiction of life and hard times as well as many other thoughts it causes.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2008
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Like Hillary's poem, which I had thought about doing since last September, this one too, was stuck in my mind. A true to life whiteout, Everything was going great and life couldn't be better then on March 1,1989 my mother suffered a cardiac arrest at home and survived with severe brain damage. The family was no more, the keystone of it was knocked out with the arches percasiously barely standing teettering on collapsing. Dad had to deal with losing his wife and trying to care for her, my grandmother needed to be relied on to help, but she did so with a streak of vengance and my sister was of the age nothing like this was going to pin her down. There was not help, only hinderance and a couple of lucky breaks. I had to opporate on sheer faith alone. White out is exactly that, using a fear that can happen with snow and converting it to be used for other hared times.
ES thank you for this review, it is appreciated.
Comment from Twomoon
Mike, wow, this is amazing enjoyed it immensely and felt my breath leave me for a short time while reading it..smile..It was so well written that I felt cold and enjoyed the wind whipping against my face..nicely done, Mike...wish I had a six for this one..very cool...hehe..loved it...Mike will be gone for 2 weeks, will review your works when I return..take care and much love twomoon
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2008
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Mike, wow, this is amazing enjoyed it immensely and felt my breath leave me for a short time while reading it..smile..It was so well written that I felt cold and enjoyed the wind whipping against my face..nicely done, Mike...wish I had a six for this one..very cool...hehe..loved it...Mike will be gone for 2 weeks, will review your works when I return..take care and much love twomoon
Comment Written 08-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2008
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My dear? Two weeks! Well I hope you have a good time and enjoy yourself. I will remain waiting with longing towards one of your posts. Thank you for the compliments and the review.
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thanks Mike...hugs and thank you..two
Comment from milushka
It is too cool, to be cool, dear Mike knight, you don't want to find yourself in a white out. I once climbed Mount Washington and saw all the crosses, just meters from the shag on the top.
It can happen in the middle of a perfectly sunny day.
Cheers,
Mila
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2008
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It is too cool, to be cool, dear Mike knight, you don't want to find yourself in a white out. I once climbed Mount Washington and saw all the crosses, just meters from the shag on the top.
It can happen in the middle of a perfectly sunny day.
Cheers,
Mila
Comment Written 08-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2008
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That's one mountasin that does have the reputation, my dear. How was your climb? Thank you very much for your compliments and the review, my dear.
Comment from Artasylum
well it is an interesting phenomenon...the devil makes us doubt as you said yourself...but the greater good is the faith in yourself that makes our paths back crystal clear...calm is the answer...every trauma i have faced (life and death kind on several occasions) still and quiet set in and prevailed over the ultimate fate...thanks again. yours, diana
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2008
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well it is an interesting phenomenon...the devil makes us doubt as you said yourself...but the greater good is the faith in yourself that makes our paths back crystal clear...calm is the answer...every trauma i have faced (life and death kind on several occasions) still and quiet set in and prevailed over the ultimate fate...thanks again. yours, diana
Comment Written 07-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2008
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I usually experience something and keep my head about me, then when its done, I totally fall apart. Thank you very much for your compliments and review.
Comment from Rx kingpen
I just read an inspiring write that kinda mirrors this one in a way. This was rhymed though. I enjoyed this one very much as well. The message is a postive one that brings light to my eyes. Good meter too. tj
I feel the Devil's hand
around my chest, squeeze.
If I panic and run, ice
spicules form and will
drop me to my knees.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2008
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I just read an inspiring write that kinda mirrors this one in a way. This was rhymed though. I enjoyed this one very much as well. The message is a postive one that brings light to my eyes. Good meter too. tj
I feel the Devil's hand
around my chest, squeeze.
If I panic and run, ice
spicules form and will
drop me to my knees.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and review.
Comment from Journal Jo
You have painted a very cold picture. I could actually
feel the coldness around me. Wonderful writing. It
created strong images in my mind.
Journal Jo
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2008
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You have painted a very cold picture. I could actually
feel the coldness around me. Wonderful writing. It
created strong images in my mind.
Journal Jo
Comment Written 07-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2008
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Thank you for your compliments and review.
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Welcome
Jo
