My Wispering Wind
A friend(s) effect.9 total reviews
Comment from VICTIMEYES
the whispering wind is a marvelousthing to behold especially when you show these images ...
You play with the baby
bird's fear, on their
first flight
that was one of the phrases that was just really good, i like the angle you are coming from with this ppoem.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2008
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the whispering wind is a marvelousthing to behold especially when you show these images ...
You play with the baby
bird's fear, on their
first flight
that was one of the phrases that was just really good, i like the angle you are coming from with this ppoem.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2008
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That happened just outside of my house, moma bird was freaking and shriking, the bird would fly up, get touched with a gust of wind, get scared and right back down. They had to gain that strength. Worth being late to work. In this poem I am trying to speak in a spiritual sense, but I wanted a crumb for them to understand the power of this experience so I covertly implyed something that I hoped they experienced at least once in their life. The word ardor is the tie in. This has been the most interesting to put together. I have in my head this great FS woman who guides me along with God. The world needs to understand a little of the other side of life. Thanks, I am ready to drop!
Comment from Twomoon
Mike, ah. wish that I had a six..not just because I inspired this, smile...but, the beauty of it that filled my eyes and heart with such soft flowing words. It was perfect...your passion and heart danced all over your words with a magical carpet ride gliding across the wind! It was breathtaking and sweet...I enjoyed this ride and it made me smile that my wind produced such beauty...I thank you, my dear friend...and certain aspects.....hummmmmmmmmmm...you so are responsible..haha..hugs and much love for a perfect day, twomoon
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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Mike, ah. wish that I had a six..not just because I inspired this, smile...but, the beauty of it that filled my eyes and heart with such soft flowing words. It was perfect...your passion and heart danced all over your words with a magical carpet ride gliding across the wind! It was breathtaking and sweet...I enjoyed this ride and it made me smile that my wind produced such beauty...I thank you, my dear friend...and certain aspects.....hummmmmmmmmmm...you so are responsible..haha..hugs and much love for a perfect day, twomoon
Comment Written 29-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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"Your passion and heart danced all over your words with a magical carpet ride gliding across the wind!" My God! How you put that flowing sentence together and with its meaning, is very sophisticated... Hmmmmmm... Your wind aspect approached the topic from your perception and I wanted one about the wind that appraoched it from mine. I guess it is the first companion poem together. Responsible, some would question that, but I have my pride! lol Thank you so much for your approval, the compliments and the review.... If you want a blast, read the other reviews, there is one that came unexpectedly, and the melancholy but positiver answer. In creating the whole, everyone that touches my heart plays a part. I tried to accentuate the spiritual. Hugs and love are extended towards you for this touching and perfect review.
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Mike, you are so sweet to say that about my sentence, it is just what I felt at the time..smile..yes, we are united in combined poetry..lovely, I will check out the reviews..checked the word in your dictionary..humm..interesting, yummy word..smile..well, hugs twomoon
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Excellent. I really enjoyed this piece. A clever use of words that had me imagining the scene. I do so love nature poems, and yours is a delight to read. Thank you for sharing.
Margaret Snowdon
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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Excellent. I really enjoyed this piece. A clever use of words that had me imagining the scene. I do so love nature poems, and yours is a delight to read. Thank you for sharing.
Margaret Snowdon
Comment Written 29-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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Thank you so much for your compliments and review.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned. It is full of very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I love the art work you used. Great job. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned. It is full of very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I love the art work you used. Great job. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 29-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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Thank you so much for your compliments and review. The art is a very fitting choice.
Comment from ARMartinez
It's an intense and involving poem. Thoroughly enjoyable, makes you think, feel, read via your senses, and breathe of an eagerness to be with that someone that makes you feel safe and whole. Thank you for sharing your writing.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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It's an intense and involving poem. Thoroughly enjoyable, makes you think, feel, read via your senses, and breathe of an eagerness to be with that someone that makes you feel safe and whole. Thank you for sharing your writing.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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A review likes this really makes me feel that I acheaved my goal. Thank you very much for the review and the compliments.
Comment from serenityjs
I really enjoyed this poem. The descriptive nature and visible imagery made certain phrases and words vibrant, adding to the over all effect of the entire work. If there was anything to be done, I might suggest shortening it. Thank you for a great read.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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I really enjoyed this poem. The descriptive nature and visible imagery made certain phrases and words vibrant, adding to the over all effect of the entire work. If there was anything to be done, I might suggest shortening it. Thank you for a great read.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Thank you for your comliments and the review, they are greatly appreciated.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Mike K2, I like your poem about the wind. I noted a few spag issues for your consideration below:
You gentle presence with >> Your gentle presence with
birds fear, on their >> bird's fear, on their
in you absence protecting >> in your absence protecting
you encompassing squeeze. >>
your encompassing squeeze.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Mike K2, I like your poem about the wind. I noted a few spag issues for your consideration below:
You gentle presence with >> Your gentle presence with
birds fear, on their >> bird's fear, on their
in you absence protecting >> in your absence protecting
you encompassing squeeze. >>
your encompassing squeeze.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Already considered and corrected, thank you for the revview.
Comment from KRHolbrook
Merry Meet.
"During the night, your
sounds keep me secure
in every way."
...Someone must be snoring. *shifty eyes* LOL.
I liked the poem, there were just a few things wrong with it that messed with the flow and caused me to stop for a moment to figure out what you meant. Minor errors, maybe, but errors nonetheless.
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[Your] gentle presence with
You play with the baby
[bird's] fear,
[your] encompassing squeeze.
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Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Merry Meet.
"During the night, your
sounds keep me secure
in every way."
...Someone must be snoring. *shifty eyes* LOL.
I liked the poem, there were just a few things wrong with it that messed with the flow and caused me to stop for a moment to figure out what you meant. Minor errors, maybe, but errors nonetheless.
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[Your] gentle presence with
You play with the baby
[bird's] fear,
[your] encompassing squeeze.
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Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Thank you for your compliments and review. That SPAG that you pointed out is now corrected. Now my embarrassment can be redirected.
Comment from FredCollingwood
You can make me feel
like an eagle gliding
in the high breeze.
Or like the richest and
most blessed man with
you encompassing squeeze.
All I have to say is, "You must get laid a lot." wonem gotts' love this stuff.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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You can make me feel
like an eagle gliding
in the high breeze.
Or like the richest and
most blessed man with
you encompassing squeeze.
All I have to say is, "You must get laid a lot." wonem gotts' love this stuff.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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NO, I hate to say, I am in a state of seperation and really don't look too much. I have met some nice people that bring this feeling about. Of course the problem could be that I scare them all away! lol What really holds me back is the feeling of what I might have the next day, "Oh God! What did I just do, with who?" I need a better sense of who they are first. Thank for the compliments and review.
