RePainting
A parable in my life.10 total reviews
Comment from kassey
I read your poem and didn't really get it, then I read your notes and read it again, it made perfect sense. Now I know what you meant, your desriptions are so many i couldn't begin to quote a favoutite. you surely made your feelings clear. Very interesting reading it, knowing what it was about, Thank you Kay
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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I read your poem and didn't really get it, then I read your notes and read it again, it made perfect sense. Now I know what you meant, your desriptions are so many i couldn't begin to quote a favoutite. you surely made your feelings clear. Very interesting reading it, knowing what it was about, Thank you Kay
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Don't fret, I understand exactly and it can become very frustrating. Miluska is a perfect example,I joined late april of last year, I would open her works and then close them, even considering her a crazy woman. Then in July I attened a poetry convention and learned more, especially the rules (Which really couldn't be taught in a seminar) and the fact that poetry is so much more expansive then one could possible imagine. I opened her works and determined to decipher them, would post them on a wall at work, looking at them six or seven times. Then I began to understand them, they use imagery as double and even triple entendre's. Then I started reviewing and even inquired personally. She's the reason that I have direct links to an online unabridged dictionary and the wikopedia. This type of poetry is a language in itself and it turns out, though I don't hold any degrees we have similar knowledge and experience.
She gave me the courage to try my hand at it and it completely changed the way I saw things. Basically combining all of the treads of what I was taught. Click all and in my portfolio is a poem, "Oils." I had to match the best image to convey my feelings, not many people know of pointelism so I describe how that appeared, but a description of a famous painting would have detracted, so I used the artist name and a clue. That turned out very well. That is also why I include notes, I'm like a kid in this and I enjoy including the forensics and logic of the poem.
Thank you very much for your generous review and compliments, also sharing what you liked. This site is not only living poetry, but filled with people who take the time to help. I'd say feel free and enquire if something a poet does inspires you or you have a question. Also going through the other reviews is a big help.
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Comment from Twomoon
Mike, this was amazing..very intense read full of unbelieveable words that made this a very intriguing work. I thought your vision with this was incredible to say the least..very interesting, full of great imagery..loved the first stanza sooooooo much..great visual I had of that..enjoyed your notes..glad you gave them, I thought this was about a beautiful woman..hehe..hugs for a great day, Mike, much love twomoon
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Mike, this was amazing..very intense read full of unbelieveable words that made this a very intriguing work. I thought your vision with this was incredible to say the least..very interesting, full of great imagery..loved the first stanza sooooooo much..great visual I had of that..enjoyed your notes..glad you gave them, I thought this was about a beautiful woman..hehe..hugs for a great day, Mike, much love twomoon
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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As always, thank you very much for your compliments and review. Mt art gallery never has any locks, much like the way I feel a church should be, with just a nobel steward.
You are absolutely correct, this is the third antandre. She was beautiful and how another person can totally destroy it, even in the recesses of one's mind. I didn't correctly convey my intended meaning in the last part and did rework it twice. The reality was, no matter how bad it got, I felt God's hand on my shoulder reassuring me that, beauty will enter my life, even this was against logic. You know what, I now meet the most beautiful people I never thought that I would... and it keeps comming. Humbled I am. You wind stirred something within me, posting it soon. I feel those hugs when I need them. Thanks.
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Mike you are so welcome...ah..the wind, yes, I love the wind, even the biting wind..it slaps us waking us up and saying hello!...when justmade said the Marattan was there I said what is that, when he told me dust winds, well, smile, you know me..on to the research of it...nature is incredible, all forms of it..beauty in all things, I always say, infact, I never liked the title of "Beauty and the Beast", I always thought it should have been Beauty in the Beast....hugs for a beautiful day Mike..
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Thank you so much, I appreciate them. I love the background that you give for your inspiration. Oh! The chained letters of poetry, bind humanity with you and me!
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hey, that was beautiful, I see another poem coming from that..chained poetry binding humanity you and me..wow..do it..so beautiful that statement..wow and wow..hugs twomoon
Comment from Lead Scout
This is really a great piece with beautiful imagery.
Only God, is the only one that pushes
me, or puts his hand on my shoulder
to show me what I should see.
Fascinating write and very impressive.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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This is really a great piece with beautiful imagery.
Only God, is the only one that pushes
me, or puts his hand on my shoulder
to show me what I should see.
Fascinating write and very impressive.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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I'd call it a love hate relationship, I put my burdens in His hands and seek to opperate with his understanding. It isn't always easy or very comfortable, but in the end turns out to be the best way. Thank you very much for your compliments and review.
Comment from milushka
Never, never let anyone touch your work, my knight, none of my teachers ever did, they only suggested. Let him paint his own. Repaint what's lost, rekindle.
Love,
Mila
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Never, never let anyone touch your work, my knight, none of my teachers ever did, they only suggested. Let him paint his own. Repaint what's lost, rekindle.
Love,
Mila
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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;)> Only a few words from you has brightened my day. I believe as you do. Thank you for your compliments and review and have a great day!
Love, Mike
Comment from jsgrrw
Wow, what a marvelous journey you take the reader on! This poem was full of such beautiful imagery from beginning to end! Very impressive!
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Wow, what a marvelous journey you take the reader on! This poem was full of such beautiful imagery from beginning to end! Very impressive!
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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...but not in the middle, lol. Thank you very much for your compliments and reveiw. I appreciate the accolades which encourages to continue.
Comment from mrsmajor
I guess I must be nuts, because I understood your piece, and thought you did a very good job describing the differences.
You author notes were very interesting, I enjoyed reading them. You made it quite clear the differences of the personalities and attitudes...I find people that are financially well off are often looking for people with the "will to try" and that is why they often want to encourage.
Thanks for sharing this piece, it did take 2 readings to completely understand, but I got the message,
Take Care...
Thanks for sharing,
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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I guess I must be nuts, because I understood your piece, and thought you did a very good job describing the differences.
You author notes were very interesting, I enjoyed reading them. You made it quite clear the differences of the personalities and attitudes...I find people that are financially well off are often looking for people with the "will to try" and that is why they often want to encourage.
Thanks for sharing this piece, it did take 2 readings to completely understand, but I got the message,
Take Care...
Thanks for sharing,
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
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Well then, thank you very much for your review and compliments as they are very much appreciated. Usually the type of people mentioned are too busy, but its very nice to have someone established pay a compliment or show interest or admiration, whether a sucessful venture or not (as nature photography turn out to be not), it at least shows you that your pointed in the right direction.
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Thank you for your response.
Comment from Rx kingpen
I didn't read the notes because i want to have my own interpretation. Good poetry is like that and this is very good. It reminded me of a man or woman who is bled from pain and the other person trying to change them. Overall, this is a blast. tj
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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I didn't read the notes because i want to have my own interpretation. Good poetry is like that and this is very good. It reminded me of a man or woman who is bled from pain and the other person trying to change them. Overall, this is a blast. tj
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and review.
Comment from FredCollingwood
Dear Mike,
It's not all that confusing, but it doesn't seem to be a poem as much as a little story. I see that it's sentences are broken into fragments and centered, but that doesn't seem sufficient to make it poetic, withouth the aesthetics of poetry. These free verse pieces are tough to meet that challenge.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Dear Mike,
It's not all that confusing, but it doesn't seem to be a poem as much as a little story. I see that it's sentences are broken into fragments and centered, but that doesn't seem sufficient to make it poetic, withouth the aesthetics of poetry. These free verse pieces are tough to meet that challenge.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Exactly, I was scared to death review them much less writing them, but a little from my fanstory friends helped me along. I did just complete some reworking. Thank you for the review.
Comment from VICTIMEYES
You undertakings are only for yourself. < ithink you meant
Your undertakings ... like always you have a great deal of stories to tell when you put your thoughts together and you title it re-painting, one would think hinting on a do over.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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You undertakings are only for yourself. < ithink you meant
Your undertakings ... like always you have a great deal of stories to tell when you put your thoughts together and you title it re-painting, one would think hinting on a do over.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Very clever ES! Based on your advise I did a little reworking, if people still don't like it, I'm sending the reviewers to you! lol Dealing with the advanced editor and eddie can be a little frustrating. Hey! Thank for the comemts and review, it did help to make things better. Evil Eddy Hehehehehe
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I reworked it some more to better convey the meaning. This poem is about other people who feel who put their will over yours. This is what happened to me at work, things were working so the wife didn't get it all, so my employer decided to take the rest. The thing that has been lost out of the shop is its benevolence. I was in a half way decent mood and my reply was a bit of lighthearted humor. I didn't mean to offend. Maybe they will come across this and fire me so that I can completely change my life. Nothing more needs to be said.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Mike,
Excellent write! VERY nicely done!
Yes - it was a bit confusing, so I really appreciate your author's notes. That was very nice of you to go to the trouble to explain the meaning here, to ensure your message is effectively conveyed.
And I applaud your integrity! BRAVO!
Nicely done, my friend.
Only one teeny suggestion:
"I won't be satisfied, until your "
S/b "you're" here.
Thanks for sharing.
WRITE ON,
Jan
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Hi Mike,
Excellent write! VERY nicely done!
Yes - it was a bit confusing, so I really appreciate your author's notes. That was very nice of you to go to the trouble to explain the meaning here, to ensure your message is effectively conveyed.
And I applaud your integrity! BRAVO!
Nicely done, my friend.
Only one teeny suggestion:
"I won't be satisfied, until your "
S/b "you're" here.
Thanks for sharing.
WRITE ON,
Jan
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Taken care of, I keep doing that! Thank you very much for your compliments and review.
