Of Comfort, Care, and Candlelight
Jazzeree: Enduring love between parents and child65 total reviews
Comment from hopeishigh
Excellent just excellent and I know what you mean, for my mother has dementia also and thank God she is still with us , thou the days are hard, all we can do is press on as they did for us in their younger days, well written with flow and rhyme, also your presentation is nicely done!!!@
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Excellent just excellent and I know what you mean, for my mother has dementia also and thank God she is still with us , thou the days are hard, all we can do is press on as they did for us in their younger days, well written with flow and rhyme, also your presentation is nicely done!!!@
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from ledford
Wow...powerful and touching!
It is so amazing to me when I think about the circle of life. I know that I need to be extra nurturing so I won't be put away in a nursing home when it's my time to be "babied":-)
Keep up the good work!
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Wow...powerful and touching!
It is so amazing to me when I think about the circle of life. I know that I need to be extra nurturing so I won't be put away in a nursing home when it's my time to be "babied":-)
Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from butterfly4265
An excellent and well written poem on such a difficult and personal topic. That special love which endures no matter what. I also loved the artwork - it totally complimented your poem. Very well done.
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An excellent and well written poem on such a difficult and personal topic. That special love which endures no matter what. I also loved the artwork - it totally complimented your poem. Very well done.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from starkat
Another superb job with the jazzeree, Diane. Now that the final exams are over, you probably have even more time to write and create. I'm thrilled that writers, like yourself, are exploring this form's possibilities. I recently posted a Trois-par-Huit...which was real popular last year at this time. It's one of my favorite forms, as I see the possibilites within the challenges. I remember you wrote a lot of those. So did I, and even created a contest for it. Like you, I love fitting thoughts and ideas into syllables, and combining them with rhyming patterns if necessary. This form lends itself more to free verse, but gives a definite structure where ideas can wrap around and flow through each other. So far, Judian's poem, Child, is the only one i've read with lots of rhymes, external and internal. She did a fabulous job with that jazzeree. I recommend it...if you haven't read it yet.
Your poem begins and end with "Child', written from a loving parents perspective. Time and memory are woven throughout, and I think how much faster the years go by the older we get. Yet the child within us will grow up and recognize the child dwelling in the parents, and will return to aid and comfort the parents in their hous of need.
Super presentation with the artwork. Thanks for the notes that give a background to the poetic content of the poem, My sisters and I had to do a similar role reversal. My mom recently passed away after a six year battle with a devastaing stroke. She was a child at the end, and we were the parents lighting all the candles, brightening her life as she had brightened ours.
Thoroughly enjoyed the poem...
Currently suffering from Six deprivation...here's my virtual ******
Great job...
starkat
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Another superb job with the jazzeree, Diane. Now that the final exams are over, you probably have even more time to write and create. I'm thrilled that writers, like yourself, are exploring this form's possibilities. I recently posted a Trois-par-Huit...which was real popular last year at this time. It's one of my favorite forms, as I see the possibilites within the challenges. I remember you wrote a lot of those. So did I, and even created a contest for it. Like you, I love fitting thoughts and ideas into syllables, and combining them with rhyming patterns if necessary. This form lends itself more to free verse, but gives a definite structure where ideas can wrap around and flow through each other. So far, Judian's poem, Child, is the only one i've read with lots of rhymes, external and internal. She did a fabulous job with that jazzeree. I recommend it...if you haven't read it yet.
Your poem begins and end with "Child', written from a loving parents perspective. Time and memory are woven throughout, and I think how much faster the years go by the older we get. Yet the child within us will grow up and recognize the child dwelling in the parents, and will return to aid and comfort the parents in their hous of need.
Super presentation with the artwork. Thanks for the notes that give a background to the poetic content of the poem, My sisters and I had to do a similar role reversal. My mom recently passed away after a six year battle with a devastaing stroke. She was a child at the end, and we were the parents lighting all the candles, brightening her life as she had brightened ours.
Thoroughly enjoyed the poem...
Currently suffering from Six deprivation...here's my virtual ******
Great job...
starkat
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from Torrence Winter
This was a very heartful piece. I can relate to the pain that is protrayed here. I am very honoured to have read this piece. Cheers mate.
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This was a very heartful piece. I can relate to the pain that is protrayed here. I am very honoured to have read this piece. Cheers mate.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from Honus X Heppablatte
This one is right up there at the top of the list of what I have reviewed today. A superlative example of simply the way it is done. Thanks for posting it here at fanstory.
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This one is right up there at the top of the list of what I have reviewed today. A superlative example of simply the way it is done. Thanks for posting it here at fanstory.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from Judian James
I never would have written my first jazzeree if not for your encouragement Diane, and I too have just posted my second! They're kind of addictive. For some strange reason, I like the discipline! This is very well written and although it starts and ends with "child" as did my first, it is certainly very different from my piece. Wonderful!
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I never would have written my first jazzeree if not for your encouragement Diane, and I too have just posted my second! They're kind of addictive. For some strange reason, I like the discipline! This is very well written and although it starts and ends with "child" as did my first, it is certainly very different from my piece. Wonderful!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from summertime65
This is absolutely wonderful. My mother also had Alzheimer's and I felt that our roles had reversed. You really make excellent use of this format.
Summertime65
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This is absolutely wonderful. My mother also had Alzheimer's and I felt that our roles had reversed. You really make excellent use of this format.
Summertime65
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from S.Yocom
It's too bad that later in life the child becomes the parent and vice versa. My own mother died of Alzheimers. In the advanced stages of the disease, she didn't know her grown children, because she was living in the past and thought of us as being very young. This is a sweet poem about dementia. You wrote very well.
sally
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It's too bad that later in life the child becomes the parent and vice versa. My own mother died of Alzheimers. In the advanced stages of the disease, she didn't know her grown children, because she was living in the past and thought of us as being very young. This is a sweet poem about dementia. You wrote very well.
sally
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
This is sad and I'm glad you left the note at the bottom because it helps readers better understand it. It was a great poem.
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This is sad and I'm glad you left the note at the bottom because it helps readers better understand it. It was a great poem.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
