Of Comfort, Care, and Candlelight
Jazzeree: Enduring love between parents and child65 total reviews
Comment from rhymer1
This is a fs five because the emotional crowd will like the sentiment, count syllables and gush. I go with the flow and award a five, but off fan story, it does not compare wth onther poetry called excellent. but it is very goos. slsinte, rhymer1
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This is a fs five because the emotional crowd will like the sentiment, count syllables and gush. I go with the flow and award a five, but off fan story, it does not compare wth onther poetry called excellent. but it is very goos. slsinte, rhymer1
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
Comment from TrueBeliever
Hello Diane, first let me express my condolences for you and your families loss. God bless you for getting through that. This is a lovely tribute to your mom. Well written and articulated, but as well, creatively displayed and originally expressed. Lovely. Many blessings, Ondra
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Hello Diane, first let me express my condolences for you and your families loss. God bless you for getting through that. This is a lovely tribute to your mom. Well written and articulated, but as well, creatively displayed and originally expressed. Lovely. Many blessings, Ondra
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
Comment from Bryana
Your poem has brought tears to my eyes. My mother suffered from dementia for almost a year. She called me her mother for the last few months of her life. It was so painful, I was her only child. She passed away one morning with me at her side.
Your Jazzaree should've been in the contest unless you already have one there. It's beautiful, it touched my heart.
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Your poem has brought tears to my eyes. My mother suffered from dementia for almost a year. She called me her mother for the last few months of her life. It was so painful, I was her only child. She passed away one morning with me at her side.
Your Jazzaree should've been in the contest unless you already have one there. It's beautiful, it touched my heart.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
Comment from Kaze
Time flies doesn't it. Just a few hours ago my parents were talking about how they miss when I was a kid and would crawl into their bed when I was scared and couldn't sleep. Great poem!
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Time flies doesn't it. Just a few hours ago my parents were talking about how they miss when I was a kid and would crawl into their bed when I was scared and couldn't sleep. Great poem!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
Comment from BellaSpirit
Diane,
Your poem is superb as you describe the relationship between parent and child. I lost my mother a couple of years ago and can relate to your author notes. The roll we play is like a circle, as it revolves around from parent to child, then child to parent.
Your presentation is exquisite, as is your poem.
Pamelia
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Diane,
Your poem is superb as you describe the relationship between parent and child. I lost my mother a couple of years ago and can relate to your author notes. The roll we play is like a circle, as it revolves around from parent to child, then child to parent.
Your presentation is exquisite, as is your poem.
Pamelia
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
Comment from Nedrajean
You did a good job with the mechanics of the verse style. Your message provided a good contrast between the need of the child and older parent. I sympathize with your loss and the sad days spent caring for your mother. I think we all must face our immortality and the possible need for dependence on our children - just as they depended on us. Thanks for sharing.
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You did a good job with the mechanics of the verse style. Your message provided a good contrast between the need of the child and older parent. I sympathize with your loss and the sad days spent caring for your mother. I think we all must face our immortality and the possible need for dependence on our children - just as they depended on us. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
Comment from Lady & Louis
The Jazzeree has certainly caught on - Sir Starkitty must be purring! This is a beautiful poem, Diane - but you've heard me say that 10000000 times before. And how curious, too: two Jazzerees called "Child" within days of each other, but so very different in mood and meaning. It would almost make a contest in itself.
The way you've done this, with the mirroring of roles, is particularly effective, as it echoes the mirroring of lines the form takes. Beautiful piece of formatting, by the way: it enhances the work.
Cheers,
Louise
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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The Jazzeree has certainly caught on - Sir Starkitty must be purring! This is a beautiful poem, Diane - but you've heard me say that 10000000 times before. And how curious, too: two Jazzerees called "Child" within days of each other, but so very different in mood and meaning. It would almost make a contest in itself.
The way you've done this, with the mirroring of roles, is particularly effective, as it echoes the mirroring of lines the form takes. Beautiful piece of formatting, by the way: it enhances the work.
Cheers,
Louise
Comment Written 27-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Hello Friend! So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed. I was in an emergency room of a local hospital as I wrote this - three hours to be exact. I have influenza and wouldn't you know that I just happened to find a bit of paper at the bottom of my purse! Started with "girl" - but that sounded harsh - so I went with Child. I love the form....it has syllables >)D Take Care...diane
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Influenza, ick! Hope you get better soon!
Louise xxx
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Mrs. KT, walking with our parents through their last days when they, indeed, become the child is both the most rewarding and the most difficult thing a daughter or son can ever do. Like you, my hope was always that I could alleviate my mom's fears the way she used to do mine when I was growing up. This was an excellent write. I am sorry for your loss.
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Mrs. KT, walking with our parents through their last days when they, indeed, become the child is both the most rewarding and the most difficult thing a daughter or son can ever do. Like you, my hope was always that I could alleviate my mom's fears the way she used to do mine when I was growing up. This was an excellent write. I am sorry for your loss.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Mrs. KT,
Certainly a beautifully written poem which rises from a sadness in life. I can relate to this one very much. Both of my parents are living and I help them as much as possible and I often feel as though I am the parent. It is hard to watch them get to this point when all my life I have known them to be intelligent and active people.
Your poem flows nicely and your meaning very clear. Thank you for sharing this. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
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Hi Mrs. KT,
Certainly a beautifully written poem which rises from a sadness in life. I can relate to this one very much. Both of my parents are living and I help them as much as possible and I often feel as though I am the parent. It is hard to watch them get to this point when all my life I have known them to be intelligent and active people.
Your poem flows nicely and your meaning very clear. Thank you for sharing this. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
Comment from boberto
Hi Mrs KT. Thank you for sharing this with us. I wonder if you have read, "Growing Old With Grace.". If I remember correctly, the author is DR. Snowdon I might be wrong--I have the book. It is true--about a study of Nuns who volunteered to be part of research for dementia/Alzhiemer's, including their brain when they passed away. I am very interested in anthropology, and part of that is what I call "Brain Power." I keep files--Have a good friend that is a Professor of Anthropology and Sociology. When I met her 4-5 years ago her father was dying with Alzhiemer's-she gave me a copy of the book-we researched alot together--I helped her through the ordeal(much family strife) and we becane friends-very tragic. Thank you again.
boberto
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Hi Mrs KT. Thank you for sharing this with us. I wonder if you have read, "Growing Old With Grace.". If I remember correctly, the author is DR. Snowdon I might be wrong--I have the book. It is true--about a study of Nuns who volunteered to be part of research for dementia/Alzhiemer's, including their brain when they passed away. I am very interested in anthropology, and part of that is what I call "Brain Power." I keep files--Have a good friend that is a Professor of Anthropology and Sociology. When I met her 4-5 years ago her father was dying with Alzhiemer's-she gave me a copy of the book-we researched alot together--I helped her through the ordeal(much family strife) and we becane friends-very tragic. Thank you again.
boberto
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2008
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Hello boberto! I am not familiar ith "Growing Old With Grace," but it sounds like a powerful read. Thank you for suggesting it and for stopping by! diane
