Of Comfort, Care, and Candlelight
Jazzeree: Enduring love between parents and child65 total reviews
Comment from Oatmeal
Steevie,
I read your poem and your notes. I am so sorry that your mother is gone. I am so sorry for your pain.
The theme was good. The flow was very nice. The descriptive words colored the imagery. All arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Steevie,
I read your poem and your notes. I am so sorry that your mother is gone. I am so sorry for your pain.
The theme was good. The flow was very nice. The descriptive words colored the imagery. All arrangement is fine, smoothly readable and understandable.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
Comment from T.S.J.
That is simply put just so beautiful.Well written and expressed. it flowed well and the poem was my pleasure to read and review. T.S.J.
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That is simply put just so beautiful.Well written and expressed. it flowed well and the poem was my pleasure to read and review. T.S.J.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
Comment from D. Longo
Not allowed to rate this remarkable work with the six warranted ( the two sixes/thirty day thing ), please know, Diane, that this work displays your mastery of a new form, and the ability to transport the reader into the experience portrayed. Wow! The reader, directed by intuition to juxtapose "child" for parent, and "daughter" for mother, is rewarded with insight into a heart-renting illness, and a glimpse of emotional turmoil, suffered through love, in the course of role reversal; the parent vulnerable, the child nurturing. "Dreams" provide a safe place, although the reality nightmarish, for a reader to sort out relationships, and to feel the distress - which isn't a safe place at all. A poem of contradictions that brilliantly, exquisitely, shares. Literally, an amazing experience lovingly communicated. Take care, my Friend, and God bless. Dante
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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Not allowed to rate this remarkable work with the six warranted ( the two sixes/thirty day thing ), please know, Diane, that this work displays your mastery of a new form, and the ability to transport the reader into the experience portrayed. Wow! The reader, directed by intuition to juxtapose "child" for parent, and "daughter" for mother, is rewarded with insight into a heart-renting illness, and a glimpse of emotional turmoil, suffered through love, in the course of role reversal; the parent vulnerable, the child nurturing. "Dreams" provide a safe place, although the reality nightmarish, for a reader to sort out relationships, and to feel the distress - which isn't a safe place at all. A poem of contradictions that brilliantly, exquisitely, shares. Literally, an amazing experience lovingly communicated. Take care, my Friend, and God bless. Dante
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
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Ah Friend! The tylenol with codeine, the inhaler, and whatever else it is that I have been given to fight off one nasty bout with influenza is about to take hold, but you must know before I slip off into - hopefully - at least five hours of deep sleep - how much I appreciate knowing that you enjoyed this small offering. How is it that you can read into my work like no other? This one took hold and just appeared; the form is rather intoxicating - and filled with so many possibilities! But they will have to wait until I my head stops spinning and I am no longer freezing! Be Well....literally and figuratively, Friend....diane
Comment from AK
I can particularly relate to this one. My in-laws have been living with us for the last 12 years and both are ill. He has Alzheimers so I know exactly of what you speak. I know it is not easy on both sides and very difficult to watch.
we eased your fears, and all laughed
that something would dare
be so emboldened to
invade your place of dreams?
Very nicely written.
Warmest regards,
Ami
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I can particularly relate to this one. My in-laws have been living with us for the last 12 years and both are ill. He has Alzheimers so I know exactly of what you speak. I know it is not easy on both sides and very difficult to watch.
we eased your fears, and all laughed
that something would dare
be so emboldened to
invade your place of dreams?
Very nicely written.
Warmest regards,
Ami
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
Comment from bard owl
This is really thought-provoking. The imagery is so vivid, and the little child with "pigtails, bright sun and tricycles" could have been me. With this one, you have hit on my childhood memories and well as a possibility of the future. This is just excellent. bard owl
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This is really thought-provoking. The imagery is so vivid, and the little child with "pigtails, bright sun and tricycles" could have been me. With this one, you have hit on my childhood memories and well as a possibility of the future. This is just excellent. bard owl
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
Comment from serenityjs
I enjoyed reading this poem. It was refreshing with vibrant images that remind us all of our childhood.
I think the back drop and art work compliment the meaning and the meaning of the poem. Nice
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I enjoyed reading this poem. It was refreshing with vibrant images that remind us all of our childhood.
I think the back drop and art work compliment the meaning and the meaning of the poem. Nice
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
Comment from neiva
Hi Mrs. KT, tis beautifully written, and as it should be, we care for our children and they should care for us when its needed. no changes needed,
neiva
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Hi Mrs. KT, tis beautifully written, and as it should be, we care for our children and they should care for us when its needed. no changes needed,
neiva
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
Comment from justmade
This is great my friend.
I love every single word of this especially in your notes.
I am sorry about your mum, but I am sure she's happy where she is. This is very touching.
Much love,
Justmade.
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This is great my friend.
I love every single word of this especially in your notes.
I am sorry about your mum, but I am sure she's happy where she is. This is very touching.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
Comment from Capristar
I truly love this poem! it made tears wellin my eyes. It is so true. I remember myself as a child how safe i felt being near my Mother and Father, and after my Father passed away...I now share care for my Mother. God has been so gracious and merciful in the plan he orchistrated for the family. It is all sealed in Love, If we will!
Beautifully written poem . great work!
Thanks,
Capristar
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I truly love this poem! it made tears wellin my eyes. It is so true. I remember myself as a child how safe i felt being near my Mother and Father, and after my Father passed away...I now share care for my Mother. God has been so gracious and merciful in the plan he orchistrated for the family. It is all sealed in Love, If we will!
Beautifully written poem . great work!
Thanks,
Capristar
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
Comment from conniet
I thought your piece of poetry was beautiful, and the reader could tell if was from your heart, and soul! You went through those things in life so in the end could help your mother, and have compassion! Connie
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I thought your piece of poetry was beautiful, and the reader could tell if was from your heart, and soul! You went through those things in life so in the end could help your mother, and have compassion! Connie
Comment Written 28-Jan-2008
