A child's fear
Childhood fears55 total reviews
Comment from ravenshadowwinds
I enjoyed reading the poem, I can relate...I wasn't sure what was under my bed but I was sure it wasn't friendly. The form was as it should be, I can't find anything to change.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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I enjoyed reading the poem, I can relate...I wasn't sure what was under my bed but I was sure it wasn't friendly. The form was as it should be, I can't find anything to change.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Thanks for an excellent review and paying attention to form as well as content.
Comment from Teri7
Al, You did a very good job on this contest entry. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. And of course the art work helps with the poem also. God bless and good luck. Teri
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Al, You did a very good job on this contest entry. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. And of course the art work helps with the poem also. God bless and good luck. Teri
Comment Written 15-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Thank you for an excellent review.
Comment from Annmuma
Excellent contest entry. Well done from beginning to end in imagery, presentation, structure, every thing. Good luck in the contest. ann
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Excellent contest entry. Well done from beginning to end in imagery, presentation, structure, every thing. Good luck in the contest. ann
Comment Written 15-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Thank you; you are very kind.
Comment from RenieReader
Alvin: You are a superb poet and this piece shows us why. It so elegantly portrays the terrible things we do to our children by filling their heads with this sort of fear. I've often wondered why the faery tales are filled with monsters and evil ogres. No wonder the kids are fearful of the night and sleeping in their own beds.
Marvelous work, as usual.
Good luck.
Renie
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Alvin: You are a superb poet and this piece shows us why. It so elegantly portrays the terrible things we do to our children by filling their heads with this sort of fear. I've often wondered why the faery tales are filled with monsters and evil ogres. No wonder the kids are fearful of the night and sleeping in their own beds.
Marvelous work, as usual.
Good luck.
Renie
Comment Written 14-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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This is one of my favorite reviews of this piece, which was very difficult to write. I do think it asks an important question, though--why do people think it is all right to scare children?
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That one goes along with why do we laugh when someone falls down? I've never understood why that one is funny.
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True, neither have I.
Comment from PoesyPoet
WOW! This is powerful Alvin. You scared the begibbies out of me too. To me, children are fearless except at night. When I was a kid, I thought I saw and heard strange things too.
Well done. Sounds like a winner to me.
Celeste
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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WOW! This is powerful Alvin. You scared the begibbies out of me too. To me, children are fearless except at night. When I was a kid, I thought I saw and heard strange things too.
Well done. Sounds like a winner to me.
Celeste
Comment Written 14-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Thank you. Yes, I wanted to scare people in some sense to show them what happens when they scare children. That kind of thing needs to stop. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from babylonia
i am not sure why they thought it was so cute to scare children. i think maybe control issues were behind it all. easy to read and follow. no spag do i see. imagery is excellent. keep up the good work~
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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i am not sure why they thought it was so cute to scare children. i think maybe control issues were behind it all. easy to read and follow. no spag do i see. imagery is excellent. keep up the good work~
Comment Written 14-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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That's an interesting analysis, and one I didn't think of. But yes, scaring children does give one power over those who are helpless in so many ways, doesn't it? I wonder if it is a form of abuse (which can be solely about power.) Thanks for making me think.
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you are very welcome. yes, it can be a form of abuse since most perps says things like i will hurt your family if you tell. OR they will hate you if you tell. that sort of thing. OR even worse as far as i am concerned, NO ONE will believe you. some fears are valid like walking across the street without looking. you can look a half a dozen times and still get ran over by some fool speeding along.
babylonia
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
This was truly a fine read and a beautiful write. Your sonnets are always so perfectly executed and intelligently written. The last couplet is so good....some of us do carry our childhood fears into our adult lives and it makes the task of being happy such a chore! Sound work. Wish I could offer 6 for this awesome piece. Love, Susanne
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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This was truly a fine read and a beautiful write. Your sonnets are always so perfectly executed and intelligently written. The last couplet is so good....some of us do carry our childhood fears into our adult lives and it makes the task of being happy such a chore! Sound work. Wish I could offer 6 for this awesome piece. Love, Susanne
Comment Written 26-Jan-2008
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Yes, you caught exactly what I wanted to convey. I enjoy writing traditional sonnets, though I wish they were more popular. I shouldn't complain, though--I just had "Ignoble End", "Spiritual Physician", and "Tashlikh" published. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from venusanblue
A very good poem. Children have such good imaginations.
My dad always told me creepy stories, but I loved them. I think thats why I write them. I've told some to my own children, to stop them going unsafe places,or straying too far from home, it worked.
I enjoyed, HUgs, V,xx
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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A very good poem. Children have such good imaginations.
My dad always told me creepy stories, but I loved them. I think thats why I write them. I've told some to my own children, to stop them going unsafe places,or straying too far from home, it worked.
I enjoyed, HUgs, V,xx
Comment Written 21-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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I never thought they could serve a didactic function as you mention in your review. Thanks for making me think, and for a good review.
Comment from Josipher32
This was a perfectly written English sonnet with the correct syllable count per line, rhyme scheme and stanza count. I feel you will do well in this contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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This was a perfectly written English sonnet with the correct syllable count per line, rhyme scheme and stanza count. I feel you will do well in this contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Thank you; you are very kind. I like that you pay attention to detail, for traditional sonnets are not easy to write.
Comment from Scarlettdreams
What an interesting foray into the pysche of a child. Perhaps an intimate portrait? smiles. This is very well expressed. Bravo Bravo
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What an interesting foray into the pysche of a child. Perhaps an intimate portrait? smiles. This is very well expressed. Bravo Bravo
Comment Written 16-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Yes, it is an intimate portrait. When my grandmother was dying, it was hard for me to go to sleep at night because I would imagine a coffin in my bedroom. Thanks for such understanding and a good review.
