Poetry, Dreams In Motion.
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "The Treasure"A collection of poetry.
5 total reviews
Comment from clhutchinson
Great story within the poem, with vivid lines and great action verbage. Nice flow of events throughout. A delight to have read. I'm sure many can identify with.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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Great story within the poem, with vivid lines and great action verbage. Nice flow of events throughout. A delight to have read. I'm sure many can identify with.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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Thank you... this was an actual event... now I ALWAYS check his pockets LOL
Comment from kintesiegel
This is adorable. I love frogs and little boys who love frogs too. Well depcited great technique-fun. thanks
This website asks for more: i would add the first two stanzas second line have a charming double rhyme. You could continue that throughoput if you wanted to. I am writing this because the site wouldn't let me get away with only a sentence of joy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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This is adorable. I love frogs and little boys who love frogs too. Well depcited great technique-fun. thanks
This website asks for more: i would add the first two stanzas second line have a charming double rhyme. You could continue that throughoput if you wanted to. I am writing this because the site wouldn't let me get away with only a sentence of joy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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LOL... I know! Sometimes the only thing that comes to mind is "Great!".... "awsome!" and yet... we have to bang our heads against the wall to come up with more. Thanky you for taking the time to read and review my work!
Comment from mshugh
Frogs, lizards, snails and vene a slug one - these are the treasures that I guess make childhood precious and always an adventure. Strangely enough, I preferred them to the video games his friends were addicted to.
Very nicely done
Michael
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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Frogs, lizards, snails and vene a slug one - these are the treasures that I guess make childhood precious and always an adventure. Strangely enough, I preferred them to the video games his friends were addicted to.
Very nicely done
Michael
Comment Written 22-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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I know what you mean... those moments will be treasured forver simply because I can never have them back. Thanks for your wonderful review.
Comment from Doreen Dulally
Oh my goodness
I know someone with a froggy phobia
can you imagine there would be no table to stand on
the frogs on it
tuts at what little boys keep in there pockets
thank you for sharing kids will love it
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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Oh my goodness
I know someone with a froggy phobia
can you imagine there would be no table to stand on
the frogs on it
tuts at what little boys keep in there pockets
thank you for sharing kids will love it
Comment Written 22-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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LOL.... I sure didn't want to join it there! Thank you for taking the time to read and review :-D
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smiles
Comment from Lynnjanine
A fun poem for any young boy and mother. Great for language development for a young child too. Easy to read out-loud. Pictures would be a great final touch.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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A fun poem for any young boy and mother. Great for language development for a young child too. Easy to read out-loud. Pictures would be a great final touch.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2007
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2007
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I thought that as well... yet try as I may... I could not find one suitable enough *shrug* I suppose that is one of the main reasons we need to "paint the picture" for the reader. Thank you for this great review!
