Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

beautiful, beautiful, beautiful
and I am one that does not care much for these short forms of poetry
but this poem speaks to the picture and the picture speaks back to the poem
and the picture and poem both spoke to me
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed this well written verse...

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2007

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2007

Thank you for the review. I was so worried I had messed up somehow! Now I know I have the basic idea...I won't hesitate to play around. As always, your comments are appreciated!

Comment from nora arjuna

Excellent

Hi there. To me this is perfect, except that I've been told to use all small letters, even on the first word. You can check my entry - In Gloom. I'm new to this form as well. Have fun trying!

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2007

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2007

Thank you for taking the time to review this and let me know what needed attention. I'll remember that the first letter isn't capitalized :-) Thanks for the recommended read as well... See you there! :-P

Comment from jlgtiger

Excellent

Very good use of the Haiku and correct in form and syllables, Ricouard. The Haiku is a poem of seventeen syllables arranged in three lines 5-7-5

It is the shortest form of Japanese poetry, and frequestly expresses delicate emotion or presents an image (frequently one of natural object or scene.) The Haiku is always best in expressing things relative to nature.

The rose is one of my favorite flowers and it was my distinct pleasure to read and enjoy. Regards, Jerry

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2007

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2007

Thank you, Jerry, for looking over my first attempt! I'm glad to know I didn't mess up horribly (I was afraid I may have) and I'll continue trying my hand at it. Thank you for the pointers as well... they help to give me a better idea of what Haiku is about.

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

Very lovely little senyru/haiku piece. Penultimate is lovely and transitions to the last line smoothly. The picture is perfect, but the piece could easily stand on its own merit for imagery. Lovely work. Hugs and smiles, Susanne

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2007

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2007

Thank you, Susanne, for this great review! I am glad to hear that it all blended together so smoothly. I wasn't sure if you could actually incorporate rhyme as most of the haiku I've read didn't have any. *shrug* I just decided to jump in and find out...lol. Thanks again for your help and comments!

reply by Susanne M. Psyris on 04-Jul-2007

AlvinTEthington is one of my favorite haiku writers on this site. Read some of his for help in honing your own skill at this particular style. Hugs and smiles, Susanne