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Comment from PoesyPoet
Good contest entry. I like it. Competition is heating up. I have several to read.
Thanks for sharing this beaut!
Celeste
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2007
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Good contest entry. I like it. Competition is heating up. I have several to read.
Thanks for sharing this beaut!
Celeste
Comment Written 16-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2007
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thank you so much! :-)
Comment from sarahhitch
Okay, liked the fact you did one of each and I thought you did a really good job with both.
I also thought that as you used the blue for female and pink/red for the male added to the poems.
Good luck in the contest.
Sarahhitch.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2007
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Okay, liked the fact you did one of each and I thought you did a really good job with both.
I also thought that as you used the blue for female and pink/red for the male added to the poems.
Good luck in the contest.
Sarahhitch.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2007
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thank you so much :-)
Comment from Teri7
This is a very unique and very good contest entry. It is full of great imagery with your wording and I love the colors you chose for each. Great job.God bless and Good luck. Teri
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2007
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This is a very unique and very good contest entry. It is full of great imagery with your wording and I love the colors you chose for each. Great job.God bless and Good luck. Teri
Comment Written 16-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2007
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thank you so much! :-)
Comment from Sue-z-Q
Hi shelley:
Interesting that you covered both bases giving this piece a unique approach.
It's an interesting read and I found not spags to correct.
LOL in the contest.
Sue-z-Q
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2007
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Hi shelley:
Interesting that you covered both bases giving this piece a unique approach.
It's an interesting read and I found not spags to correct.
LOL in the contest.
Sue-z-Q
Comment Written 27-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2007
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thank you so much :-)
Comment from rhymerfortyniner
Well done! I'd say you've done an excellent job in describing your idea of a perfect man and woman. Good acrostic form, with perfect rhyme and great imagery. The only suggestion I'd have would be to left align these poems rather than centering them. It would give a better effect to the acrostic words. Verna
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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Well done! I'd say you've done an excellent job in describing your idea of a perfect man and woman. Good acrostic form, with perfect rhyme and great imagery. The only suggestion I'd have would be to left align these poems rather than centering them. It would give a better effect to the acrostic words. Verna
Comment Written 24-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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don't want the acrostic to be the main focus lol
thanx much :-)
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You're welcome. Verna
Comment from Penpal
He, he, he. I'm sorry but you did a cute portrait of the man and woman. Two lines which are my favorite: "Neverland smile that can't go wrong" Neverland is a great choice of word.
"Not too thin, but still walks with that space between her legs." lol I really got a kick out of that one.
Good job,
Sally
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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He, he, he. I'm sorry but you did a cute portrait of the man and woman. Two lines which are my favorite: "Neverland smile that can't go wrong" Neverland is a great choice of word.
"Not too thin, but still walks with that space between her legs." lol I really got a kick out of that one.
Good job,
Sally
Comment Written 24-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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hehehehe
thanx lots! :-)
Comment from milushka
Love this Sheley Kaey, though I don't like muscles, Hair unimportant in man, BRAIN, so hard to find
The woman, oh the woman. I would change, space between teeth and kisses between her thighs!
Maybe too much Pablo Neruda reading, Hey, that's me.
Lovely.
Mila
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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Love this Sheley Kaey, though I don't like muscles, Hair unimportant in man, BRAIN, so hard to find
The woman, oh the woman. I would change, space between teeth and kisses between her thighs!
Maybe too much Pablo Neruda reading, Hey, that's me.
Lovely.
Mila
Comment Written 24-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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LOL!
thanx lots! :-)
Glad to make you laugh, happy to be of some service. LOL
Mila
Comment from GeneticDouble
Neverland smile, ah, Michael Jackson, now there's a man. A brown space between her thighs, hmmm, yeah, or something like that. Ok, you like brown, even brown spaces placed in certain spaces like bowlegged. Yep. I like this one. Good luck in the contest brownie. GD.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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Neverland smile, ah, Michael Jackson, now there's a man. A brown space between her thighs, hmmm, yeah, or something like that. Ok, you like brown, even brown spaces placed in certain spaces like bowlegged. Yep. I like this one. Good luck in the contest brownie. GD.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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brown? huh?
uhhh.... ooookaaaay.... :-P
Comment from Josipher32
When you are doing an acrostic, it looks better un-centered. But that is just my opinion. It seems to me you have the color scheme backwards. Shouldn't the blue go on the man and the pink on the woman? You described women and men very well, but this poem seemed too general and safe.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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When you are doing an acrostic, it looks better un-centered. But that is just my opinion. It seems to me you have the color scheme backwards. Shouldn't the blue go on the man and the pink on the woman? You described women and men very well, but this poem seemed too general and safe.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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nope.... pink for the guy and blue for the girl :-)
Comment from sengwriter
Wow, what a descriptive way you've chosen.
But making an acrostic, you've limited your chance in case of a Man in particular, yet what you've expressed is nicely enough.
And about woman, you yourself belonging to that group, have expressed them in a more open way, isn't it?
Good attempt and perfectly in the line of the contest, my best wishes are always with you,
carry on.
Gautam :)
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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Wow, what a descriptive way you've chosen.
But making an acrostic, you've limited your chance in case of a Man in particular, yet what you've expressed is nicely enough.
And about woman, you yourself belonging to that group, have expressed them in a more open way, isn't it?
Good attempt and perfectly in the line of the contest, my best wishes are always with you,
carry on.
Gautam :)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2007
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lol
thanx lots! :-)
