Challenge Me
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9 total reviews
Comment from sengwriter
Hi Shelley,
Good challenge and more sound in meeting the challenge. Beautiful composition and worthy thinking altogether.
Mood throughout the poem is very refreshing for one's mind. We all really stand in the shower of your thoughts as we read it.
Thank you for such a nice piece of work and your elementary thinking is an positive asset of this poem.
Gautam :)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2007
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Hi Shelley,
Good challenge and more sound in meeting the challenge. Beautiful composition and worthy thinking altogether.
Mood throughout the poem is very refreshing for one's mind. We all really stand in the shower of your thoughts as we read it.
Thank you for such a nice piece of work and your elementary thinking is an positive asset of this poem.
Gautam :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2007
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thanks lots!
hey, i just started a contest.... you join? :-)
Comment from Norbanus
A real shower of metaphors. No, shower of tears struff here, is there? We've got the real McCoy, plastered down hair and all.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2007
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A real shower of metaphors. No, shower of tears struff here, is there? We've got the real McCoy, plastered down hair and all.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2007
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lol
thanx lots! :-)
Comment from mmichelle97219
I like the thought of using a shower as a metaphor for spring rain or a sprinker. I am always threatening to toss the kids into the rain with a bar of soap to cut down the water bill. Thanks for sharing, Shelley.
Michelle
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2007
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I like the thought of using a shower as a metaphor for spring rain or a sprinker. I am always threatening to toss the kids into the rain with a bar of soap to cut down the water bill. Thanks for sharing, Shelley.
Michelle
Comment Written 08-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2007
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LOL!
thanx lots! :-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
hELLO SHELLEY, AMAZING, YOU ARE GETTING TO BE SO GOOD WITH THE THINGS WE ALL SHOULD ENJOY IN LIFE. tHANKS FOR SHARING.
GERT
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2007
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hELLO SHELLEY, AMAZING, YOU ARE GETTING TO BE SO GOOD WITH THE THINGS WE ALL SHOULD ENJOY IN LIFE. tHANKS FOR SHARING.
GERT
Comment Written 08-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2007
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thank you so much for all your continuous support! :-)
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Hello, You are so welcome my fanstory freind.
Gert
Comment from sunkist1942
Challenge Me
Chapter 40 Stand in the Shower
This was refreshing and I love the picture.
A nice writing and a good way to think, instead of
singing in the shower.
Or I guess we could do both.
Challenge met:)
Sunkist:)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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Challenge Me
Chapter 40 Stand in the Shower
This was refreshing and I love the picture.
A nice writing and a good way to think, instead of
singing in the shower.
Or I guess we could do both.
Challenge met:)
Sunkist:)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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lol
thanx lots! :-)
Comment from Red Heart
Great,
Fun, and playful. I loved the comparisons, "warm water
beat down on your tired skin
massaging it
like tiny hands of a child
softly rubbing the weary neck",
"the wetness
gluing your hair
to the skin"
"watching
the small glistening beads
drop
off
crashing
to the ground"
"stand in the showers
of spring
feeding the colorful life on earth"
So many feel good messages here.
There is even has a mist of sensuality in this piece.
This was a joy to read.
Well done!
Red Heart
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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Great,
Fun, and playful. I loved the comparisons, "warm water
beat down on your tired skin
massaging it
like tiny hands of a child
softly rubbing the weary neck",
"the wetness
gluing your hair
to the skin"
"watching
the small glistening beads
drop
off
crashing
to the ground"
"stand in the showers
of spring
feeding the colorful life on earth"
So many feel good messages here.
There is even has a mist of sensuality in this piece.
This was a joy to read.
Well done!
Red Heart
Comment Written 07-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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yea well it is more fun when you're not alone taking the shower LOL!!!!
thanx for the challenge! :-)
Hmmmm that gives me an idea for a poem.... romance in the shower ;-)
Red Heart
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you should check out my book "sensual energy" lol
Comment from Oatmeal
Shelley,
I feel that this piece should go into a separate book called ATB- All Time Best!
It was really spectacular. It flowed very constantly and the imagery was divine.
You did a really nice job on this piece.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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Shelley,
I feel that this piece should go into a separate book called ATB- All Time Best!
It was really spectacular. It flowed very constantly and the imagery was divine.
You did a really nice job on this piece.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 07-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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thank you so much! :-)
Comment from Swtdreamz
stand in the shower
and feel the warm water - it feels good at times...when it's freezing cold, but then again- you never want to leave
stand in the shower
your feet toe deep in a puddle - how fun
stand in the showers
of spring
feeding the colorful life on earth - very nice reference to spring
good job
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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stand in the shower
and feel the warm water - it feels good at times...when it's freezing cold, but then again- you never want to leave
stand in the shower
your feet toe deep in a puddle - how fun
stand in the showers
of spring
feeding the colorful life on earth - very nice reference to spring
good job
Comment Written 07-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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thank you so much :-)
Comment from kintesiegel
very nicely written i was with you all the way until the end which was even more wonderful than i could imagine. good job
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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very nicely written i was with you all the way until the end which was even more wonderful than i could imagine. good job
Comment Written 07-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2007
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cool!
thanx lots! :-)
