Comment from Red Heart

Excellent

Wow Shelley,
Another one that I really enjoyed reading.
I will be posting a couple more of my expressions this evening.
I look forward to any feedback you might have for me.

Redheart

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2007

thank you so much :-)

Comment from vanita

Good

good work !
the poem has meaning. but for me the words are not very appropriate. in the last stanza when you used the word "muddying" then again using the word "mudpits" is not a good choice.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2007

why?

Comment from JoAnna Lee

Excellent

Well Shelley... you did very well with this. Good imagery, really... This took my mind in many directions -- loved the images of "mud pits" hmmm... the pits, armpits, in the pits (depression)... yep, yep! Very well done!

Thanks for sharing,
Donna

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2007

LOL!
thank you so much :-)

Comment from rurella

Excellent

Great job, Shelley. I like the metaphor, too. One thing that's kinda funny. As I read, I thought more about stepping in cow pies than mud pits. Gross, huh. Keep writing.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2007

LOL!
thank you so much :-)

Comment from samandlancelot

Excellent

Well done. You can even write a succesful poem about mud. Nice picture for the story. But obviously this is about more than mud.

In Jesus' Name,

Patricia

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2007

hehehehe
thank you so much :-)

Comment from KING SLATON

Excellent

This piece seems to teeter back and forth between a 4 and a 5 rating.
Some of the dialogue is a bit shakey but you end it quite well so I'll go with the 5 for this poem.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2007

lol
thank you so much :-)

Comment from VICTIMEYES

Excellent

that's a funny look at the past, dont think i've ever read anything set to this sort of theme, very different and causes me to hope i don't develpo these kinds of mudpits, they dont seem to good to go back through.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2007

lol
thanx lots :-)

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

hI SHELLEY, YES YOU IMPRESSED ME USING MUD AS DIRTY AND STICKY WHEN SOMEONE HAS DONE YOU WRONG, TOUGH TO FORGET.TAKES A LONG TIME TO SCRAPE IT OUT OF YOUR MIND.
GERT

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2007

thank you so much :-)

reply by Gert sherwood on 24-Jan-2007

YOU ARE SO WELCOME.
GERT

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

A short concise piece which has great visual effects, comparing past decisions muddying up our thinking and feelings in the present and future. Your closing sums up the whole piece, "Shadows of black fears muddying up the present in the mudpits of the past. What beautifully written words to give food for thought to.
Well done

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2007

thank you so much :-)

Comment from Killer Headache

Excellent

A very interesting and thought-provoking bit of work. I like the flow, I see no error (everyone uses this bit and somehow it bugs me out; 'I see no error') and feel this is ready for the masses to enjoy without correction!

Good work!

Another goodie from YOU! I have been going through a few of my own past mudpits lately- just for something to do during the cold days here in the Northeast of America... It is always interesting how things that were once so sloppy in my life now appear to be only mildly messy- and only in my mind, not in my day to day... Thank heavens for TIME, and its passing...

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2007

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2007

lol so true
thank you so much :-)