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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "one touch"I dare you....
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Comment from Kingsland
to take a step over the edge
to live a life on the ledge
to plunge in without remorse
to always keep your feet steady
right on course
but then you live
and breathe in
to take a step over the edge
of that promise as you're plunging
head first into an unquenchable thirst
but that's life on the edge
as you plunge in to the promise you pledge... John
your poem was very well written and presented...
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2006
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to take a step over the edge
to live a life on the ledge
to plunge in without remorse
to always keep your feet steady
right on course
but then you live
and breathe in
to take a step over the edge
of that promise as you're plunging
head first into an unquenchable thirst
but that's life on the edge
as you plunge in to the promise you pledge... John
your poem was very well written and presented...
Comment Written 10-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2006
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thank you much :-)
Comment from luna
Pix, I like everything about this. The picture, the awesome presentation and of course your wordsmithing. You've met the challenge quite well here. Kudos, and thanks for sharing!
Yf,
J *smile*
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2006
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Pix, I like everything about this. The picture, the awesome presentation and of course your wordsmithing. You've met the challenge quite well here. Kudos, and thanks for sharing!
Yf,
J *smile*
Comment Written 09-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2006
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and thank YOU for R&R and the pretty stars :-)
Comment from Focused True North
Definitely an outstanding job on the challenge, Shelley. I really like the way you've developed the theme, and how you've brought in the trust of someone close who's there to help when times are tough. Love the picture , too! :-)
Bravo, Janetsue
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2006
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Definitely an outstanding job on the challenge, Shelley. I really like the way you've developed the theme, and how you've brought in the trust of someone close who's there to help when times are tough. Love the picture , too! :-)
Bravo, Janetsue
Comment Written 08-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2006
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thanx lots! :-)
Comment from rl dubour
one touch --- some times that one touch can lead into many things, a great write and really great imagery, you have done good! ron
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2006
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one touch --- some times that one touch can lead into many things, a great write and really great imagery, you have done good! ron
Comment Written 08-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2006
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thanx lots :-)
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Comment from CarolinasAngel
I think this is one of your best poems, Shelley! I really enjoyed this one! It's the kind that you read more than once and it leaves a lasting impression! Awesome!
Happy Holidays!
Candy
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2006
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I think this is one of your best poems, Shelley! I really enjoyed this one! It's the kind that you read more than once and it leaves a lasting impression! Awesome!
Happy Holidays!
Candy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2006
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cool!!
thanx lots! :-)
Comment from sengwriter
Beautifully described the mental state and that desirous moment of mood
just eagerly waiting for those strong support in your life
love and touch of care
so vital in a life
and more so
while trying to float....
stepping over the edge of
promise and plunging.
Challenge so nicely met. Keep it up.
Would you like to have one from me too?
Then it is -
Nature having its pallet of hues
all unique in nature...
Gautam
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2006
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Beautifully described the mental state and that desirous moment of mood
just eagerly waiting for those strong support in your life
love and touch of care
so vital in a life
and more so
while trying to float....
stepping over the edge of
promise and plunging.
Challenge so nicely met. Keep it up.
Would you like to have one from me too?
Then it is -
Nature having its pallet of hues
all unique in nature...
Gautam
Comment Written 08-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2006
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oooh cool lines
i'll start working on it!
thanx lots :-)
Comment from Norbanus
'over the edge of promise'
what a deep poetic phrase.
but then we're treading darkness
this stuff is all the craze.
Now, should I squak of cliches
when you 'brighten up my day'?
Nah! Plungin into comfort
makes everything OK
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2006
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'over the edge of promise'
what a deep poetic phrase.
but then we're treading darkness
this stuff is all the craze.
Now, should I squak of cliches
when you 'brighten up my day'?
Nah! Plungin into comfort
makes everything OK
Comment Written 07-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2006
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LOL!
thanx lots! :-)
Comment from angel of the quill
some days i wish i was there where you tread
in the depth of the water over your head
oh sometimes i am drowning deep with in my soul
with to much trouble alone to hold
there into this dark this deep this pain
i am feeling almost insane
with only the future tucked far off never to see
the deep pain surrounds me
and there as i read this one ray so far off of light
brightens loosens takes flight
and I then am again back into the dark
where it seems each day i start
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2006
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some days i wish i was there where you tread
in the depth of the water over your head
oh sometimes i am drowning deep with in my soul
with to much trouble alone to hold
there into this dark this deep this pain
i am feeling almost insane
with only the future tucked far off never to see
the deep pain surrounds me
and there as i read this one ray so far off of light
brightens loosens takes flight
and I then am again back into the dark
where it seems each day i start
Comment Written 07-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2006
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thank you so much for this wonderful poem review :-)
Comment from mmichelle97219
The reader can easily relate to this poem, this calling for just a little moral support, a good hug. I liked it a lot. When taking a plung it is nice to know that someone is there saying take my hand I'll help you fly not fall. Boy its really daunting if you don't have it. Anyway thank for sharing. Nice write.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2006
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The reader can easily relate to this poem, this calling for just a little moral support, a good hug. I liked it a lot. When taking a plung it is nice to know that someone is there saying take my hand I'll help you fly not fall. Boy its really daunting if you don't have it. Anyway thank for sharing. Nice write.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2006
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and thank YOU for reading and reviewing! :-)
Comment from Mackie
Shelley Kaye I think that one must have an exceptional ability to be able to write a poem with such feeling in it as a direct result of a challenge. You are very talented. Your poem is excellent.
Mackie
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2006
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Shelley Kaye I think that one must have an exceptional ability to be able to write a poem with such feeling in it as a direct result of a challenge. You are very talented. Your poem is excellent.
Mackie
Comment Written 07-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2006
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thank you soooo much!! :-)
