Spring and the heart
What do you prefer? Let me know14 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and nice presentation.
-You have written a good tanka with a good topic.
-Very good opening lines set the scene.
-A good pivot line.
-Good closing lines that show you have
a different preference.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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-Great artwork and nice presentation.
-You have written a good tanka with a good topic.
-Very good opening lines set the scene.
-A good pivot line.
-Good closing lines that show you have
a different preference.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
Comment from QC Poet
Good Luck in this Tanka contest went back to sound out unpredictability for syllable count feels right to mr. I would suggest when using polysyllabic words as it makes it so much easier for readers especially those who pronounce words differently. Just a suggestion Thank you for Sharing your poetic work
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Good Luck in this Tanka contest went back to sound out unpredictability for syllable count feels right to mr. I would suggest when using polysyllabic words as it makes it so much easier for readers especially those who pronounce words differently. Just a suggestion Thank you for Sharing your poetic work
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you
Comment from gansach
I'm not that familiar with the Tanka style of poetry so I had to look it up. You matched the syllable quota correctly, the accompanying picture complements the feelings expressed in the poem. I, too, prefer wildflower bouquets. I thought this a very lovely entry for the Spring Tanka. Best Wishes!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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I'm not that familiar with the Tanka style of poetry so I had to look it up. You matched the syllable quota correctly, the accompanying picture complements the feelings expressed in the poem. I, too, prefer wildflower bouquets. I thought this a very lovely entry for the Spring Tanka. Best Wishes!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like the originality of this post, celebrating the arrival of spring and all the blooms it brings but adding a layer of poignancy in your preference for healing, that being seeing those flowers growing wild and free as opposed to being trussed up in a bouquet. Perfect presentation to reflect the creative essence of your theme. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I like the originality of this post, celebrating the arrival of spring and all the blooms it brings but adding a layer of poignancy in your preference for healing, that being seeing those flowers growing wild and free as opposed to being trussed up in a bouquet. Perfect presentation to reflect the creative essence of your theme. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you Debbie!
Comment from Begin Again
Wildflowers, free to bloom everywhere and sway gently with the wind, offering a touch of beauty across the landscape for all of us to share. Beautiful poem!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Wildflowers, free to bloom everywhere and sway gently with the wind, offering a touch of beauty across the landscape for all of us to share. Beautiful poem!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much carol!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is a lovely tanka, combining our natural world with our world of emotions. May I suggest a larger font for easier reading on the vibrant green background. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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This is a lovely tanka, combining our natural world with our world of emotions. May I suggest a larger font for easier reading on the vibrant green background. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore wild flowers and they once had a bad reputation but that is all changing now as we appreciate those unruly plants that take over our gardens, I enjoyed your tribute, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I adore wild flowers and they once had a bad reputation but that is all changing now as we appreciate those unruly plants that take over our gardens, I enjoyed your tribute, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you Dolly!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I like your poem. It seems as though you have been hurt. Flowers are so pretty. They definitely make you feel better. Well written. Great job on this.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I like your poem. It seems as though you have been hurt. Flowers are so pretty. They definitely make you feel better. Well written. Great job on this.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed the poem. I really liked the part about healing "the deepest hurt of a breaking heart." Your font is a bit small and hard to read, but that doesn't affect how good your poem is. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed the poem. I really liked the part about healing "the deepest hurt of a breaking heart." Your font is a bit small and hard to read, but that doesn't affect how good your poem is. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Lisasview
Nice Tanka poem and I just love the image you chose.
But why do you have weird Ac? And so on after the line Which do you prefer?
Lisasview............now living in Spain...
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Nice Tanka poem and I just love the image you chose.
But why do you have weird Ac? And so on after the line Which do you prefer?
Lisasview............now living in Spain...
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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thanks i fixed it
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I have had the same issue in the past?
Lisa
