Happy Release
As Boy George would say - Karma Karma Karma4 total reviews
Comment from gansach
Very well done, there are a few people I wouldn't mind haunting and making miserable. Nice rhyme scheme, easy flowing. Really enjoyed it! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Very well done, there are a few people I wouldn't mind haunting and making miserable. Nice rhyme scheme, easy flowing. Really enjoyed it! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate it.
Comment from Dimzdale1
To me this read is such a sad tale, that in death one thinks their voice can be louder than in life. It is true to raise your living voice draws attention, and some are so unkind. Yet, to die and hope it is heard as others assign its meaning without your rebuttal is worst. It reminds me of the lady who recently went to a foreign country and had a doctor take her life. The photo shoot she took prior the artist chose her look. A middle finger to the world and she was forgotten. I wonder if she would have chosen another photo to express the pain to where she had gotten. The message was blurred to a society that pays a second of attention. I wish this not my end. This is how your poem made me feel. I thank you for your artistry.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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To me this read is such a sad tale, that in death one thinks their voice can be louder than in life. It is true to raise your living voice draws attention, and some are so unkind. Yet, to die and hope it is heard as others assign its meaning without your rebuttal is worst. It reminds me of the lady who recently went to a foreign country and had a doctor take her life. The photo shoot she took prior the artist chose her look. A middle finger to the world and she was forgotten. I wonder if she would have chosen another photo to express the pain to where she had gotten. The message was blurred to a society that pays a second of attention. I wish this not my end. This is how your poem made me feel. I thank you for your artistry.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for the the brilliant review and rating :)
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is very well written and authentic, a truly exceptional poem and it really will reach many people, who will relate.
I have personally gone through such a horrible things, but i took a differentapproach to my ex husband who was violent. I got a lifelong restraining order. So, in the afterl8fe, the last person I'd want to see is him. ;)
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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This is very well written and authentic, a truly exceptional poem and it really will reach many people, who will relate.
I have personally gone through such a horrible things, but i took a differentapproach to my ex husband who was violent. I got a lifelong restraining order. So, in the afterl8fe, the last person I'd want to see is him. ;)
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Hi Alexandra,
Thank you so much for the 6 star review. I'm tickled pink!
I actually wrote this for another group. We were prompted to write a Palinode - a poem with opposite sentiments to one you've previously written (that's how I understood it anyway).
Just for you, here is the original poem which is a lot gentler!
When I die
I shall not die
my body, frail
and failing
yes
surrendering to time?s request
will leave
and yet the ?I? I am
will blossom forth
continuing with love
the love that never leaves
the love we know in memories
in every moment shared
the love that waits
in timeless bliss
eternally
in heaven?s kiss
when I die
I shall not die
I also spent a large part of my life with a narcissist although he wasn't violent - did throw a things at me so I suppose he had tendencies.
He died 12 years ago and, like you, I've no wish to meet up with him again.
Thank you again. It means a lot.
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Thank you for explaining. May you live to even forget he existed. ;) Alex
Comment from jessizero
This is a great tale of revenge. I admired the sentiment, and I liked your rhymes. I especially like the last two lines. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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This is a great tale of revenge. I admired the sentiment, and I liked your rhymes. I especially like the last two lines. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much.
