Could-have-beens
Minute Poem20 total reviews
Comment from QC Poet
Nicely stated and conforming in the Minute poem format. My only issue is mine -the font to background choice makes me strain my eyes plus I am going color blind Thank you for sharing your poetic experience Good Luck to you
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Nicely stated and conforming in the Minute poem format. My only issue is mine -the font to background choice makes me strain my eyes plus I am going color blind Thank you for sharing your poetic experience Good Luck to you
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks for that and I apologise for the colour issue. I sometimes have the same problem myself, so I should have known better, but in this case the contrast looked fine on my screen. I know it can differ on other displays.
Steve
Comment from Bobby Jo
Oh what could have been, the staring at each other from afar and secret messages that form from our eyes, that tell a story of familiar and clarity, that we speak without talking in our own language.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Oh what could have been, the staring at each other from afar and secret messages that form from our eyes, that tell a story of familiar and clarity, that we speak without talking in our own language.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your balanced response to my Minute Poem. I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Yes, it is sometimes far to easy to think of the what-if's, the could have beens, that pop up throughout life. I like that you shown it but in a light-hearted way in your Minute poem Steve. Good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Yes, it is sometimes far to easy to think of the what-if's, the could have beens, that pop up throughout life. I like that you shown it but in a light-hearted way in your Minute poem Steve. Good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Hi, Valda. Sometimes I hear people say that they wouldn't change a single thing in their past lives. Are they crazy? Thanks for the lovely review.
Steve
Comment from Janet Foor
I enjoyed your Minute poem as we all have "could-have- beens" as we make choices along the way.
Excellent alliteration and Minute form rhymes.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed your Minute poem as we all have "could-have- beens" as we make choices along the way.
Excellent alliteration and Minute form rhymes.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Janet, thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from nancyjam
A great entry in the Minute poem contest. Perfect syllable count and rhyme scheme with a subject many can relate to. Oh those missed chances and
"if only moments"
You describe them so well.
Best of luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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A great entry in the Minute poem contest. Perfect syllable count and rhyme scheme with a subject many can relate to. Oh those missed chances and
"if only moments"
You describe them so well.
Best of luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Hi, Nancy. Thanks for the thoughtful review.
Steve
Comment from jim vecchio
I haven't had much "could have beens" so when I met my wife, I proposed right off! One small concern: second stanza, last line. Should that be "dreamt" rather than dream"?
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I haven't had much "could have beens" so when I met my wife, I proposed right off! One small concern: second stanza, last line. Should that be "dreamt" rather than dream"?
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Jim. Glad you have a happy marriage. Mine is in its fiftieth year! But surely there may have been smaller things in your life that you wish you had done differently?
Steve
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Actually, I HAD a good marriage, but my wife passed away in our 31st year together. You are very blessed! I would probably undo most of my life before I met here, were that possible.
Comment from gramalot8
I really liked the thought provoking message you give your readers in this poem.
So many what ifs and could have been in a persons lifetime. Guess we should hold on top to the moments we grasped.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I really liked the thought provoking message you give your readers in this poem.
So many what ifs and could have been in a persons lifetime. Guess we should hold on top to the moments we grasped.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from GoWiSt
"Could-have-beens" Oh, I have so many sad one of these--*sigh*
Nicely met the lines, stanzas and syllable counts requirements of the poem type/contest.
" I love you so!" Too little, too late, I suppose--*more sighs*
Ahh, lost opportunities for potentially sweet romance--such bitter memories and regrets.
This was very well penned. Good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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"Could-have-beens" Oh, I have so many sad one of these--*sigh*
Nicely met the lines, stanzas and syllable counts requirements of the poem type/contest.
" I love you so!" Too little, too late, I suppose--*more sighs*
Ahh, lost opportunities for potentially sweet romance--such bitter memories and regrets.
This was very well penned. Good luck!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the thoughtful response. Sometimes I hear folk say they wouldn't change a thing. Are they lying or have they actually led the perfect life?!
Steve
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I love poems with "inner rhymes." They're my favorite. And you did this was so perfectly right! I absolutely loved every last word of it; I honestly did. And did you ever find the perfect PICTURE for it, too. I will be shocked if this one doesn't find its way to the Winner's Circle!! Good luck to you!! xo
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I love poems with "inner rhymes." They're my favorite. And you did this was so perfectly right! I absolutely loved every last word of it; I honestly did. And did you ever find the perfect PICTURE for it, too. I will be shocked if this one doesn't find its way to the Winner's Circle!! Good luck to you!! xo
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Rachelle, many thanks for this enthusiastic review.
Steve
Comment from jessizero
This was a great minute poem for the contest. You got the syllable count and stanzas correct, and I love the way you italicized those lines to emphasize them. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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This was a great minute poem for the contest. You got the syllable count and stanzas correct, and I love the way you italicized those lines to emphasize them. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you!
Steve
