Loyal Forever
When tragedy is too big for a small boy to understand8 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This was a very sweet story entry for the 200 Word Flash writing prompt. Sometimes the teddy bears and dolls that listen to our childrens sorrows and secrets are the ones that help them the most. They allow the child to work things out in their own mind while thinking they are confiding in a friend. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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This was a very sweet story entry for the 200 Word Flash writing prompt. Sometimes the teddy bears and dolls that listen to our childrens sorrows and secrets are the ones that help them the most. They allow the child to work things out in their own mind while thinking they are confiding in a friend. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review and comments. Life is difficult enough but when a child doesn't understand what's happening, their world becomes frightening. I'm glad that some children can find comfort in the inanimate teddy bear.
Smiles!
Comment from LJbutterfly
It is impossible for young children to understand the separation of their parents. It's always someone's fault. Interesting is this story is the fact that Jimmy fell asleep and had a dream where his unconscious mind gave him adult advice, explaining that parents argue but still love you. The good news is, he woke up feeling better. Teddy would always be there. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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It is impossible for young children to understand the separation of their parents. It's always someone's fault. Interesting is this story is the fact that Jimmy fell asleep and had a dream where his unconscious mind gave him adult advice, explaining that parents argue but still love you. The good news is, he woke up feeling better. Teddy would always be there. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Wouldn't it be wonderful as a child or an adult that we could go to sleep hugging our teddy bear and be comforted or get the understanding we need to make it through the difficult times? I wish upon a star!!! Thanks for reading my flash and enjoying it. have a great day!
Comment from BethShelby
This is a good flash. It reminds me of the way children really do react to things that make them hurt. I can remember myself as a child when I was usset and frustrated with my parents, grabbing a big teddybeat and feeling that I was being comforted. Sometimes I grabbed the dog and he would let hug him and cry until I felt better.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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This is a good flash. It reminds me of the way children really do react to things that make them hurt. I can remember myself as a child when I was usset and frustrated with my parents, grabbing a big teddybeat and feeling that I was being comforted. Sometimes I grabbed the dog and he would let hug him and cry until I felt better.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Good morning, Beth.... Thank you for stopping by and reading this short little flash about the Teddy Bear who could make things right. I so wish we could slip back to those days.
Thank you for the kind review. Have a great day!
Comment from Wendy G
If only life was so easy. The comfort of a teddy bear who always understands, comforts, and remains loyal is to be cherished. Nicely written through the eyes of a child. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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If only life was so easy. The comfort of a teddy bear who always understands, comforts, and remains loyal is to be cherished. Nicely written through the eyes of a child. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Yes, Wendy, we both wish that hugging a teddy bear would make life so much easier and help us understand even as adults. But for a child, those comforting moments and little explanations would make their journey so much easier. Have a great day!
Comment from royowen
It sounds like the child that had that very same revelation, 'when I hug my teddy all seems right with the world. When parents split, it doesn't matter for what reason, the innocent loses some building blocks from his fortress. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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It sounds like the child that had that very same revelation, 'when I hug my teddy all seems right with the world. When parents split, it doesn't matter for what reason, the innocent loses some building blocks from his fortress. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Though his parents still loved him, the young boy didn't feel that love, but luckily found it with his loyal teddy bear. What luck that Teddy could speak!!
Thanks for the kind review and comments.
Have a great day!
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Well dine
Comment from jessizero
This piece of flash fiction was so sweet and also sad. One thing: You referred to Jimmy as Tommy in that last sentence. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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This piece of flash fiction was so sweet and also sad. One thing: You referred to Jimmy as Tommy in that last sentence. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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thanks for catching that mistake for me. I started out calling him Tommy and decided Tommy and Teddy would be too close. Guess I missed one. Too bad Teddy didn't whisper my mistake to me too! LOL
Have a great day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This story has a sad side to it as parents divorce and children do not understand what is happening an their toys are their loyal friends, a fine post, many will relate to this sad story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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This story has a sad side to it as parents divorce and children do not understand what is happening an their toys are their loyal friends, a fine post, many will relate to this sad story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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It's difficult to understand as adults and there is no way children can make heads or tails out of the situation. They just know their world is turned upside down. Thank heavens Teddy was there to comfort him. Smiles!
Comment from Natureschild
The narrative effectively captures Jimmy's fear and sadness through his actions and dialogue. The dialogue between Jimmy and his mother feels genuine, and inclusion of Teddy as a source of comfort and solace for Jimmy adds depth to the story.
This is a strong piece. Good luck.
Terry
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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The narrative effectively captures Jimmy's fear and sadness through his actions and dialogue. The dialogue between Jimmy and his mother feels genuine, and inclusion of Teddy as a source of comfort and solace for Jimmy adds depth to the story.
This is a strong piece. Good luck.
Terry
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review and comments. I know that their are many a times I wish cuddling a teddy bear would ease my pain and grief. Have a great day! Smiles!
