Tightrope
When we are broken12 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Tightrope, finds the individual walking the highwire as though it was a choice. If anyone asks, the truth is that when you are on a tightrope, walk the straight and narrow.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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This poem, Tightrope, finds the individual walking the highwire as though it was a choice. If anyone asks, the truth is that when you are on a tightrope, walk the straight and narrow.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Well, the character in my poem was contemplating suicide. Luckily s/he chose to live. x
Comment from karenina
I love reading your work. I know I will be inspired by your words, gifted with a depth and reflection I so love in true poetry. This free verse identifies the course of freedom we have, even as we vacillate between darkness and light. If it's cowardice that keeps us this side of heaven, let it be!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I love reading your work. I know I will be inspired by your words, gifted with a depth and reflection I so love in true poetry. This free verse identifies the course of freedom we have, even as we vacillate between darkness and light. If it's cowardice that keeps us this side of heaven, let it be!
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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You don't know how much your words mean to me and how happy I am to see you around. Lots of love.
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I always smile when I see a notification that you have posted!
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Awww! That's so sweet. Especially considering how dark most of my last posts have been. x
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This seems like a plea to someone you know well who has to decide between the left or the right when moving toward the center of their consciousness. I am not sure I am right but either way, I love the free verse style of poetry you entertain us with.
Thanks for expressing your feelings so openly.
Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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This seems like a plea to someone you know well who has to decide between the left or the right when moving toward the center of their consciousness. I am not sure I am right but either way, I love the free verse style of poetry you entertain us with.
Thanks for expressing your feelings so openly.
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thanks for reading, Jesse.
It's about somebody who is thinking of committing suicide, but eventually doesn't.
I've always hated obscure poems and now it seems I'm writing them myself. x
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Hello Maria.
I would agree it is fairly obscure poetry.
I'm sorry you knew someone who wanted to commit suicide I am glad they didn't.
Take care, Jesse
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Oh no! Don't worry. The poem is made up, but unfortunately the number of suicides is increasing, especially among young people.
Have a lovely day,
MJ
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Yes, suicide among young people is on the rise. Even though there is high-tech now it doesn't seem to matter in the long run.
Have a great upcoming week.
Jesse
Comment from Mark Jackson
I like it. great imagery I am getting left sinister. Not quite sure if you feel you should jump down and try to combat the evil in some way. It sounds like you have evil tempting you and cowardice drawing you on.
The one thing I would personally change is the word one before kilometers. It is not that it is wrong I just found it distracting to have a number next to kilometers it made me think of 1 km. It would read the same without the number: the other kilometers away.
A minor point 5 stars awarded.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I like it. great imagery I am getting left sinister. Not quite sure if you feel you should jump down and try to combat the evil in some way. It sounds like you have evil tempting you and cowardice drawing you on.
The one thing I would personally change is the word one before kilometers. It is not that it is wrong I just found it distracting to have a number next to kilometers it made me think of 1 km. It would read the same without the number: the other kilometers away.
A minor point 5 stars awarded.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I've written a comma after one now to make the meaning clearer. Thanks for the constructive criticism. Much appreciated.
Comment from royowen
A finely worded poem Maria, mind you I have no idea what it's about, so I'd have to say it's abstract, but I did love the language, although I've improved my interpretation over the years beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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A finely worded poem Maria, mind you I have no idea what it's about, so I'd have to say it's abstract, but I did love the language, although I've improved my interpretation over the years beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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It's about somebody who is thinking of committing suicide, but eventually doesn't.
I've always hated obscure poems and now it seems I'm writing them myself.
Take care, Roy.
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Well done
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Free Verse Poetry Contest. I liked the descriptions throughout this piece and the metaphors used. My favorite lines were the last three. As I believe I have felt that comforting hand a time or two. Really well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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An excellent entry for the Free Verse Poetry Contest. I liked the descriptions throughout this piece and the metaphors used. My favorite lines were the last three. As I believe I have felt that comforting hand a time or two. Really well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much for reading, Marylin.
Comment from patcelaw
I have felt times in my life when I was felt like I was walking on a tightrope. And I had it not been for the safety net of some very good friends I may have jumped. I'd like your poem very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I have felt times in my life when I was felt like I was walking on a tightrope. And I had it not been for the safety net of some very good friends I may have jumped. I'd like your poem very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I'm glad you like it. Thanks for reading, Patricia. And I'm so happy you didn't jump.xxx
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, acrobats might be able to look down and see all the things you speak of, but for me, if I looked down, anyone beneath me had better run. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Well, acrobats might be able to look down and see all the things you speak of, but for me, if I looked down, anyone beneath me had better run. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Because you'd jump? xxx
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Beauty is sometimes in contrast to the ugly scenes in nature as we view the good and bad in life. Let us hope that we don't eventually destroy our beautiful earth Heather, a well written and poignant write, love Christine x
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Beauty is sometimes in contrast to the ugly scenes in nature as we view the good and bad in life. Let us hope that we don't eventually destroy our beautiful earth Heather, a well written and poignant write, love Christine x
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I do hope so too, Christine. Take care.
Comment from lyenochka
I feel there's some spiritual truth in this but I like to think that it's not cowardice that whispers but faith. Or perhaps it's the Holy Spirit Who reveals that His hand will catch you before any fall or jump. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I feel there's some spiritual truth in this but I like to think that it's not cowardice that whispers but faith. Or perhaps it's the Holy Spirit Who reveals that His hand will catch you before any fall or jump. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Or maybe a bit of both?
I hope you are doing well. xxx
