Can I Have Another Daisy?
Old man, young girl named Daisy bond over his flower garden26 total reviews
Comment from s.m.kirby
I truly enjoyed reading this lovely poem. Such a friendship between two people, It was heartwarming and sad. The only thing I would change is drop the r in later September. Just my thought I am no pro at writing.
God bless
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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I truly enjoyed reading this lovely poem. Such a friendship between two people, It was heartwarming and sad. The only thing I would change is drop the r in later September. Just my thought I am no pro at writing.
God bless
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Thank you, SM. I'm glad you enjoyed it. A bit sad.
God bless you, too.
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you're welcome
Comment from bob cullen
This poem is as pretty as any daisy could ever be. It's also rich in the most beautiful sentiment. If I'm totally honest, it also produced a tear in my eyes. Thank you for delivering such emotion
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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This poem is as pretty as any daisy could ever be. It's also rich in the most beautiful sentiment. If I'm totally honest, it also produced a tear in my eyes. Thank you for delivering such emotion
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Bob. One of the nicest reviews I have gotten. Always nice to touch an emotion whether it is sadness or otherwise.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I enjoyed your poem very much. It was descriptive and it told a lovely, emotional story. A nice entry for the Young at Heart contest. Good job and best of luck.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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I enjoyed your poem very much. It was descriptive and it told a lovely, emotional story. A nice entry for the Young at Heart contest. Good job and best of luck.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn. I am glad you enjoyed it. Based on, but not about, two little neighbor girls that stop by my house occasionally. They like my garden and especially raspberry season.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was very enjoyable. I like, despite their age difference, that they form a bond over their shared name and a mutual love for flowers. The poem does a wonderful job of sharing this story in it's own unique way. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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I thought this was very enjoyable. I like, despite their age difference, that they form a bond over their shared name and a mutual love for flowers. The poem does a wonderful job of sharing this story in it's own unique way. Great job.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Michael. I am glad you enjoyed it. Based on, but not about, two little neighbor girls that stop by my house occasionally. They like my garden and especially raspberry season.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, I really like the way this work flows, and the message of (loneliness)-"I think" the bond between two people as the knowing of sadness is looming, a wonderful read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Excellent, I really like the way this work flows, and the message of (loneliness)-"I think" the bond between two people as the knowing of sadness is looming, a wonderful read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Thank you, kahpot. Yes, I think there is a pre-determined understanding of the sadness to come.
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Thank you, kahpot. Yes, I think there is a pre-determined understanding of the sadness to come.
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Thank you, kahpot. Yes, I think there is a pre-determined understanding of the sadness to come.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Yes, you certainly do ... write songs, poetry, short stories and even once a two-act play called A Hole in Annapurna that has made readers cry. Tis piece may have the same effect on some reviewers. Good luck
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Yes, you certainly do ... write songs, poetry, short stories and even once a two-act play called A Hole in Annapurna that has made readers cry. Tis piece may have the same effect on some reviewers. Good luck
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Tom.
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Thank you, Tom.
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Thank you, Tom.
Comment from Jeano
This poem is very much like dark chocolate, bittersweet. Nicely done. I'm wondering if it's from a true experience. If so, I'm sure you've thought about this little "Daisy" many times through the years. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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This poem is very much like dark chocolate, bittersweet. Nicely done. I'm wondering if it's from a true experience. If so, I'm sure you've thought about this little "Daisy" many times through the years. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Jeano. Based on, but not about, a true story. There are actually two "Daisies" that visit me in my garden, especially during raspberry season. I appreciate your analogy to dark chocolate which I love.
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Thank you, Jeano. Based on, but not about, a true story. There are actually two "Daisies" that visit me in my garden, especially during raspberry season. I appreciate your analogy to dark chocolate which I love.
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You're welcome
Comment from teafor2
Norm, Norm! Norm!!: I wish that I had read your notes before my read...
The lack of punctuation allowed this reader to peruse these spell-binding
quatrains at break-neck speed, and thus, and thus, and thus the rush to
tears. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Norm, Norm! Norm!!: I wish that I had read your notes before my read...
The lack of punctuation allowed this reader to peruse these spell-binding
quatrains at break-neck speed, and thus, and thus, and thus the rush to
tears. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Wow! Thank you, Tea. It is a great feeling to have had not only outstanding support from you but all other reviewers as well. Thanks, again.
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Wow! Thank you, Tea. It is a great feeling to have had not only outstanding support from you but all other reviewers as well. Thanks, again.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well, Norm Valentine from Minnesota, I didn't cry at this poem, but I certainly recognize its value. I didn't see that this piece was listed as fiction or non-fiction, but I hope the old man once again unites with Daisy.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Well, Norm Valentine from Minnesota, I didn't cry at this poem, but I certainly recognize its value. I didn't see that this piece was listed as fiction or non-fiction, but I hope the old man once again unites with Daisy.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. Sorry I couldn't make you cry. Loosly based on non-fiction.
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Thanks, Wayne. Sorry I couldn't make you cry. Loosly based on non-fiction.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, Norm. Looks like you were missing in action for a couple of years, so welcome back! Could also be why your name doesn't ring any bells.
I enjoyed this poignant poem which gradually reveals itself in the form of repeated visits and snatches of conversation between the two characters.
No rhyme, although the are subtle hints at it in places and also no set meter, but the carefully constructed 4-line stanzas serve to give the poem a pleasing structure.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Hi, Norm. Looks like you were missing in action for a couple of years, so welcome back! Could also be why your name doesn't ring any bells.
I enjoyed this poignant poem which gradually reveals itself in the form of repeated visits and snatches of conversation between the two characters.
No rhyme, although the are subtle hints at it in places and also no set meter, but the carefully constructed 4-line stanzas serve to give the poem a pleasing structure.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Steve. Yes, decided not to force explicit rhyme but loose rhyming. Good catch.
Appreciate your detailed comments and analysys.
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Thank you, Steve. Yes, decided not to force explicit rhyme but loose rhyming. Good catch.
Appreciate your detailed comments and analysys.
