A Compilation of Short stories
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Comment from tfawcus
Birth is always a worrying time and your story transmits that sense of worry and of urgency graphically. Your readers are right there with you. I know that I breathed a sigh of relief at the happy outcome.
Just one thing that struck me. I think tension is diminished by information not directly relevant to the story, especially close to the climax. With that in mind, how would cutting this part affect the sense of urgency?
The main house, though, was in complete darkness but that didn't surprise me. Morton was at least thirty years senior to Carol who was in her late forties. He needed his sleep. However, in his waking hours, you wouldn't know he was closing in on eighty. But enough of Morton.
After all, what does Morton have to do with the story?
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Birth is always a worrying time and your story transmits that sense of worry and of urgency graphically. Your readers are right there with you. I know that I breathed a sigh of relief at the happy outcome.
Just one thing that struck me. I think tension is diminished by information not directly relevant to the story, especially close to the climax. With that in mind, how would cutting this part affect the sense of urgency?
The main house, though, was in complete darkness but that didn't surprise me. Morton was at least thirty years senior to Carol who was in her late forties. He needed his sleep. However, in his waking hours, you wouldn't know he was closing in on eighty. But enough of Morton.
After all, what does Morton have to do with the story?
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Tony. I'm glad you liked the story. I also see what you're saying. That paragraph should be removed. Thanks again. Ulla:)))
Comment from Sabrina H.
What a heartwarming and cute story. At first, I thought it was a story about a grandchild being born. A horse, a baby horse that's so cute. Best of luck on the contest.
Keep writing:)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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What a heartwarming and cute story. At first, I thought it was a story about a grandchild being born. A horse, a baby horse that's so cute. Best of luck on the contest.
Keep writing:)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you so.much, Sabrina. I so appreciate it. Ulla:)))
Comment from Pam (respa)
A very good story, Ulla, that flows well from beginning to end. At least Carol didn't have bad news to relay over the phone. You do a good job with the atmosphere and setting as you got to the stables. I like your line, "Enough of Morton!"
It was good that the vet got there in a timely fashion. It must have been amazing seeing a foal being born. I am glad it was a happy ending for all concerned! Very well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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A very good story, Ulla, that flows well from beginning to end. At least Carol didn't have bad news to relay over the phone. You do a good job with the atmosphere and setting as you got to the stables. I like your line, "Enough of Morton!"
It was good that the vet got there in a timely fashion. It must have been amazing seeing a foal being born. I am glad it was a happy ending for all concerned! Very well done.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Pam. It's actually based on a true story. I'm glad you liked it. Please forgive my late answer. I've been very busy with visitors, which is lovely. Ulla xcx
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You are very welcome, Ulla. No problem with a late answer.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Why anyone would like the smell of manure, I don't know. But for some crazy reason, I love the smell of a barn, and yes, manure mixed with the scents of hay and straw. I have an excuse because it's familiar to me. Since I bred and raced thoroughbreds my whole life, like my dad and grandfather before me. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Why anyone would like the smell of manure, I don't know. But for some crazy reason, I love the smell of a barn, and yes, manure mixed with the scents of hay and straw. I have an excuse because it's familiar to me. Since I bred and raced thoroughbreds my whole life, like my dad and grandfather before me. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Well, so you know exactly where I'm coming from, Ric. I've owned quite a few horses, and this story is based on my life. The mare and the foal were mine. Horses have been a big part of my life. This actually took place on stud farm in Denmark. Thanks so much
for your review. Ulla:)))
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Now I know why we share thoughts. When I decided to retire and sell everything off, I had 47 in training, and then of course the mares, fouls, and yearlings on the farm. It's a great game if you don't get old. LOL.
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Absolutely, so true. :)))
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice story. Well written. Error-free as near as I can tell.
I had to pull a calf once. He was a beauty. Too much a beauty. The cow was a specimen to behold, and the bull quite a figure of a charolais. The calf could have been a trophy, but he was too much so. It took so long to extract the beast that he was D.O.A. Too much of a good thing, I guess.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Nice story. Well written. Error-free as near as I can tell.
I had to pull a calf once. He was a beauty. Too much a beauty. The cow was a specimen to behold, and the bull quite a figure of a charolais. The calf could have been a trophy, but he was too much so. It took so long to extract the beast that he was D.O.A. Too much of a good thing, I guess.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Aw, I am so sorry to hear that, Wayne. What a heartbreak and a loss that must have been. I can totally relate. The mare and foal in this story were actually mine. Ulla:)))
Comment from Lisasview
So your dear friend wanted you to be there for the birth..I think that is so wonderful..
A very good entry for the "That Moment of Birth contest"
Your story is quite well written and I wish you the very best of luck.
Lisasview, recuperating from a new knee...not fun
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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So your dear friend wanted you to be there for the birth..I think that is so wonderful..
A very good entry for the "That Moment of Birth contest"
Your story is quite well written and I wish you the very best of luck.
Lisasview, recuperating from a new knee...not fun
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Lisa. I do hope you feel better. Ulla:)))
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You are welcome and thank you,
Lisa
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I can really imagine from your story the emotion felt as that little foal entered the world! It's an absolute miracle of life when they can immediately stand as well when you think of how limited human babies are at birth. A great idea to have this as a subject for the contest read. I enjoyed it immensely. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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I can really imagine from your story the emotion felt as that little foal entered the world! It's an absolute miracle of life when they can immediately stand as well when you think of how limited human babies are at birth. A great idea to have this as a subject for the contest read. I enjoyed it immensely. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Hi Debbie. It was amazing. The story is based on a true story. Thank you so very much. Ulla:)))
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The miracle of birth and it is so fascinating to watch and I enjoyed your story as you added a touch of excitement to this wonderful occasion, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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The miracle of birth and it is so fascinating to watch and I enjoyed your story as you added a touch of excitement to this wonderful occasion, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. :)))
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A foal to love and treasure. Horses are gorgeous animals and also very dangerous if you don't know how to treat them. The birth of a little foal is quite amazing to see; thank God that the foal was alright.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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A foal to love and treasure. Horses are gorgeous animals and also very dangerous if you don't know how to treat them. The birth of a little foal is quite amazing to see; thank God that the foal was alright.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you so very much, Rosemary. :)))
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I have never seen a horse give birth but cows are a different thing. Beautiful, how something such as a calf or colt can be laid on the ground and within hours be running about like a spinning top. God is good.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I have never seen a horse give birth but cows are a different thing. Beautiful, how something such as a calf or colt can be laid on the ground and within hours be running about like a spinning top. God is good.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Yes, it's a wonderful experience. I couldn't agree more. :)))
