The Corner of Church and Main
A love story42 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
Wow, my friend! It is full of romance, and the storyline is gorgeous.
I felt every moment of this stanza:
"With saddened smiles, they parted ways
in a promise they couldn't sustain
He watched her fade in snowy haze
on the corner of Church and Main"
Absolutly loved this, Jess! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Wow, my friend! It is full of romance, and the storyline is gorgeous.
I felt every moment of this stanza:
"With saddened smiles, they parted ways
in a promise they couldn't sustain
He watched her fade in snowy haze
on the corner of Church and Main"
Absolutly loved this, Jess! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much, my friend! I'm honored!
Xo
Jess
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Jessica,
This is a beautiful love poem. It seems ethereal, other worldly. At first, I thought it was about Jesus and finding Him, which is cool, but after reading, it was seen as an encounter with a soul mate, which is a theme I like.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Hi Jessica,
This is a beautiful love poem. It seems ethereal, other worldly. At first, I thought it was about Jesus and finding Him, which is cool, but after reading, it was seen as an encounter with a soul mate, which is a theme I like.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Rhonda, that means a great deal to me. Xo
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Oh my! This is such a fabulous love story, and I totally get two people - who have fallen so hard so fast - who must wait for the day that fate affords them a second chance. So, so beautiful.
I'm so sorry - I just gave away my last six. This is worthy and will hopefully win the contest for you.
Your words, as always, flow divinely:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Oh my! This is such a fabulous love story, and I totally get two people - who have fallen so hard so fast - who must wait for the day that fate affords them a second chance. So, so beautiful.
I'm so sorry - I just gave away my last six. This is worthy and will hopefully win the contest for you.
Your words, as always, flow divinely:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Pam, thank you for this lovely review. I'm honored by your kind words!
Xo
Jess
Comment from BenThrone
This is an excellent poem Jessica, but you don't need me to tell you that: vox populi has spoken! Congrats on your placing in the contest. The only thing I would change is adding more punctuation, as it isn't clear to me why it is used in some places but not others. But that's just me!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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This is an excellent poem Jessica, but you don't need me to tell you that: vox populi has spoken! Congrats on your placing in the contest. The only thing I would change is adding more punctuation, as it isn't clear to me why it is used in some places but not others. But that's just me!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Ben! I will re-visit!
Xo
Comment from Frank Malley
This is an excellent poem in stanzas of four tetrameter lines. The repeated fourth lines of each verse create a motif of predictability, sense and sound that becomes a kind of inevitability as the poem wends its way toward a happy conclusion.
Line 5 is awkwardly inverted; 'ain' has plenty of rhymes that could've ended this line more attractively. One problem with rhymed poetry is that it often permits the rhymes to become more important than the sense of the poem, which generally shouldn't be the hierarchy.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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This is an excellent poem in stanzas of four tetrameter lines. The repeated fourth lines of each verse create a motif of predictability, sense and sound that becomes a kind of inevitability as the poem wends its way toward a happy conclusion.
Line 5 is awkwardly inverted; 'ain' has plenty of rhymes that could've ended this line more attractively. One problem with rhymed poetry is that it often permits the rhymes to become more important than the sense of the poem, which generally shouldn't be the hierarchy.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Frank. I appreciate the feedback and will revisit with it in mind!
Jessica
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Be well, Jessica. Frank
Comment from jake cosmos aller
moving and powerful poem about a woman walking alone on a cold snowy day reflecting upon where she had met the love of her life. I like the refrain line.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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moving and powerful poem about a woman walking alone on a cold snowy day reflecting upon where she had met the love of her life. I like the refrain line.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, Jake!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
That was amazing, glorious, wonderful, full of buried desire, deep yearning, and agonizing need. I felt the poem. I breathed with it. You wrote with raw emotion.
This was just exquisite. Karen
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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That was amazing, glorious, wonderful, full of buried desire, deep yearning, and agonizing need. I felt the poem. I breathed with it. You wrote with raw emotion.
This was just exquisite. Karen
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Karen, thank you so much. I'm honored by your kind words!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Kate MacDonald
A truly romantic tale. After the second stanza, I was hoping they would meet each other again. Not that I wanted anything awful to happen to the people they may already have had in their lives. A lovely conclusion to the story.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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A truly romantic tale. After the second stanza, I was hoping they would meet each other again. Not that I wanted anything awful to happen to the people they may already have had in their lives. A lovely conclusion to the story.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much, Kate!
Xo
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My pleasure Jessica, I do like a bit of romance :)
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this beautiful love story in a poem. The repetition works so well.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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I really enjoyed reading this beautiful love story in a poem. The repetition works so well.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Jen, thank you so much. I'm honored by your kind words!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Janis M.
The love story told here is well written with a pleasing refrain that is song like in nature. It was an excellent entry in the contest and well deserving of attention.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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The love story told here is well written with a pleasing refrain that is song like in nature. It was an excellent entry in the contest and well deserving of attention.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your kind words, Janis!
Xo
