Comment from zanya

Exceptional

This poem is evocative and nostalgic recalling childhood days and fun in an earlier time - written in such a short format but words are so effectively chosen here- has my vote- also a great title.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Thank you so very much!

Comment from Navada

Excellent

I liked the way you evoked memories of childhood in just one line. The choice of image really helps to cement this. For some reason, it reminded me of To Kill a Mockingbird and the innocence of Scout and Jem in the midst of adults seething with hostility. Not too sure what that says about me! Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

OOO, I like the power of that imagery! Thanks for your review.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the 1 Line Only writing prompt contest.

I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Thank you!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I like how you managed an internal rhyming of "breeze" and "memories" in this one-line poem. You invoked a story and picture just with these few words. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

Thank you very much.

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this little one line piece of 'poetry.' You made me think of when I used to love being on a swing and how carefree I felt then. This gave me food for thought

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023

I'm glad I evoked some good memories for you!

Comment from gramalot8

Excellent

A great entry gor 1 line poem contest. So many times as I've been to the park... or in a backyard... and had that remembrance from seeing that empty swing. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing this with us.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thank you very much!

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

that's a good memory and nifty picture.
Happy, innocent, youthful times. I wish todays' inner city kids had had them.
"Thanks for the Memory." :)
Katharine

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023

Thanks for your review!

Comment from Katie Mae Dead

Exceptional

This is really good poet. You have great flow, not too many words and an internal rhyme to boot!
This is a short poem so my review has to be short as well I guess.
Gotta give this one a six.
Best wishes
Katiemaedead

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023

Oh, thank you so much!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Love the rhymes here and the fine sentiment inn this sweet natured little poem for the contest, I wish you luck, a joy to read, memories are golden, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023

Thanks, Dolly