The Boy Toy
A love story.29 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is quite a good story about a man who was best when he was making a woman happy and helping her create good opportunities for others. He had a good life and so did the child he helped to raise. He was apparently never greedy to have money to spend on himself.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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This is quite a good story about a man who was best when he was making a woman happy and helping her create good opportunities for others. He had a good life and so did the child he helped to raise. He was apparently never greedy to have money to spend on himself.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Carol, thank you for reading and for your kind review. Terry.
Comment from jim vecchio
I wondered how the other half lived. Now I know! Let me say the dialogue was very realistic, the story, despite, or maybe because of its length seemed very real and the ending caught me off guard.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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I wondered how the other half lived. Now I know! Let me say the dialogue was very realistic, the story, despite, or maybe because of its length seemed very real and the ending caught me off guard.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Jim, thank you for reading and the time to review. Terry
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You wrote a long and powerful story.
Comment from Wendyanne
Lol I like the unexpected ending to this well written story. I enjoyed reading this and i found the dialogue good. The characters are well described. Well done
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Lol I like the unexpected ending to this well written story. I enjoyed reading this and i found the dialogue good. The characters are well described. Well done
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much, I am delighted to read your wonderful review. Terry.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Virtual six for this one Terry! This story is, risqué, very suggestive, and an unusual topic, sex. (for you) So its kinda fun to watch you go somewhere out of your comfort zone . Wow, for a not so old guy from Texas, who would have thought? Not me, that's for sure!
But this story is fun, has heart, is carefree, and has great compassion that gives a dose of human kindness and lesson on giving. And from that same guy from Texas, I believe it 100%.
However, we still know it's more about sex from the early storyline and title, Boy Toy..... And I had a strong feeling that Ashley and Jason may be getting it on.
But you shut that one down fast. And then you end it with a twist, as, Ms Staci has a few ideas of her own about opportunity and becoming Ashley's girl toy?
Way to use boy and toy in such two opposite scenarios and two different stories completely! What next, Santa as a sugar daddy? JK!
Brilliant and inventive too! Great job Terry
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Virtual six for this one Terry! This story is, risqué, very suggestive, and an unusual topic, sex. (for you) So its kinda fun to watch you go somewhere out of your comfort zone . Wow, for a not so old guy from Texas, who would have thought? Not me, that's for sure!
But this story is fun, has heart, is carefree, and has great compassion that gives a dose of human kindness and lesson on giving. And from that same guy from Texas, I believe it 100%.
However, we still know it's more about sex from the early storyline and title, Boy Toy..... And I had a strong feeling that Ashley and Jason may be getting it on.
But you shut that one down fast. And then you end it with a twist, as, Ms Staci has a few ideas of her own about opportunity and becoming Ashley's girl toy?
Way to use boy and toy in such two opposite scenarios and two different stories completely! What next, Santa as a sugar daddy? JK!
Brilliant and inventive too! Great job Terry
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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LOL, I will take that virtual six! And thank you very much for getting the story right! Terry.
Comment from Sarah Robin
This is a very interesting story. I just read it for the second time. I am sure the things you wrote about go on. The fact that Ashley is gay didn't enter my mind until the very end. You did a good job keeping the reader in suspense. Sarah
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This is a very interesting story. I just read it for the second time. I am sure the things you wrote about go on. The fact that Ashley is gay didn't enter my mind until the very end. You did a good job keeping the reader in suspense. Sarah
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Sarah, thank you for reading and for your review. Terry.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I thoroughly enjoyed this story for several reasons. The basic plot is intriguing. A seventy-three year old man gives an account of his years as a boy toy...quite imaginative. You include realistic and interesting dialogue (punctuated properly), with tags that add depth and color to the conversations. Characters, including their physical movements, are well developed and easy to envision. You dotted humor throughout. And you ended the story with an acknowledgement of a modern socially recognized practice (a girl with a girl). Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023
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I thoroughly enjoyed this story for several reasons. The basic plot is intriguing. A seventy-three year old man gives an account of his years as a boy toy...quite imaginative. You include realistic and interesting dialogue (punctuated properly), with tags that add depth and color to the conversations. Characters, including their physical movements, are well developed and easy to envision. You dotted humor throughout. And you ended the story with an acknowledgement of a modern socially recognized practice (a girl with a girl). Well done.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023
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Lorraine, what a wonderful review! Thank you for all the kind words that demonstrated you got the story. And thank you for reading a longer story than usual. Terry,
Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent story. Could it turn into a chapter in a book? Your characters are real people, not cardboard cutouts. I do not see any need for improvements Have a blessed day..
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023
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This is an excellent story. Could it turn into a chapter in a book? Your characters are real people, not cardboard cutouts. I do not see any need for improvements Have a blessed day..
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023
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Thank you for making the time to read a story is longer than normal for FS and your splendid review. I do not plan on additional chapters. Terry.
Comment from karenina
Whoa! I read this yesterday and this is a much spicier ending! This leaves me considering the twinkle in the eye of possibility... Nice!
Great story, Terry.
You are very proficient at dialogue and "tags" and all that stuff I don't have a handle on...
Things aren't always as they seem. Labels can be terms of affection and misconstrued.
This was a love match!
So....about Ashley.
Hmmm.
Another story altogether?
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023
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Whoa! I read this yesterday and this is a much spicier ending! This leaves me considering the twinkle in the eye of possibility... Nice!
Great story, Terry.
You are very proficient at dialogue and "tags" and all that stuff I don't have a handle on...
Things aren't always as they seem. Labels can be terms of affection and misconstrued.
This was a love match!
So....about Ashley.
Hmmm.
Another story altogether?
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023
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I am assuming you like the new ending better than the first. Thank you for the six stars. I am trying to get better with the action tags. Rama has been coaching me, and it helps. Thank you very much. Terry.
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Yes! I swear, sometimes I think I've made myself clear when I've left the words unspoken...
I'll add this to my review...
Comment from lyenochka
This is an interesting story. I'm not sure what to make of the characters and their relationships. But it seems that Jason lived a good life and had made life more bearable for two older women. I guess Ashley isn't in a relationship with him considering her blush to Staci's question at the end.
I liked how Jason uses the celery stick to make a point. That's a great action tag to liven up the dialogue!
Don't know if you already fixed:
When She died, (she)
"Because you helped her with everyone." (every one)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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This is an interesting story. I'm not sure what to make of the characters and their relationships. But it seems that Jason lived a good life and had made life more bearable for two older women. I guess Ashley isn't in a relationship with him considering her blush to Staci's question at the end.
I liked how Jason uses the celery stick to make a point. That's a great action tag to liven up the dialogue!
Don't know if you already fixed:
When She died, (she)
"Because you helped her with everyone." (every one)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Helen, thank for reading and your review. Those corrections have been made, not sure how you got an older version. Terry
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I always open up a post I intend to read but sometimes can't get to for days. And the longer posts I get to last. Sorry!
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That explains it. I also changed the ending a bit, and I think made it better. Terry.
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I looked at just the ending and it still leaves the opening to Ashley's personal preferences in relationship. What was new?
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Yes, I did want to keep that part of the ending in place. I made it more clear what Ashley's true agenda was about and the path Staci would take with the story going forward. At least I hope that is what I did, LOL.
I do know some people did not like the girl-girl reference, but for me it worked with a twist I wanted. Some readers might be offended, others might see some humor, and others might say, "why not?"
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I think it fits with what you are doing with the story - to not judge relationships and push the envelope of what is really going on behind the scenes because of the benefit to the overall community.
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Thank you! I think you got what I was after...don't throw the first stone...and judge not least you be judged. Terry.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Very interesting role/word play like a discreet duel of wits and non-chalant conversation. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter and your writings.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Very interesting role/word play like a discreet duel of wits and non-chalant conversation. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter and your writings.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Iza, thank you for reading. Terry.
