Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

Wow, that was very cool, that kept me engaged from the first word to the last word and for me, if a book doesn't grab me right off the hop. I tend to get bored, set aside and go for something else. That is not the case with this writing, so excellent work.
If I had another six, it would be yours. So I'm sending you a virtual six because it's that good.
I see no issues esthetically. I see, no issues with spelling, grammar, punctuation or sentence structure. It all looks very well done to me. I congratulate you on a fine submission and wish you best of luck!

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and leave feedback! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I've been having a lot of fun with this project :D

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Excellent writing. Well described and you narrative sweeps the reader along with the panic and drama of the attempted escape. Lovely how you keep the story mysterious as we read on. Great stuff.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023

Thanks so much for reading and leaving feedback! It's much appreciated!