The Last Rose of Summer
A sonnet22 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You use descriptive authentic words and imagery will draw in readers. Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You use descriptive authentic words and imagery will draw in readers. Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Sadly it is October, and the last rose in my yard is gone. Many thanks for sharing and praising my poem, Alexandra. I am glad you enjoyed it. Rod
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are lovely. The words of this poem are descriptive,
thought provoking and creative. I like how the author summarizes this
sonnet in the last few lines. As the author states - reduce our pace and use our eyes. I found it meant, slow up, be aware and observant! The artwork is perfect! Hi RodG, have a great week!.....Maria
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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The author's words are lovely. The words of this poem are descriptive,
thought provoking and creative. I like how the author summarizes this
sonnet in the last few lines. As the author states - reduce our pace and use our eyes. I found it meant, slow up, be aware and observant! The artwork is perfect! Hi RodG, have a great week!.....Maria
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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I am so pleased you enjoyed the words I used in my sonnet, harmony. You interpreted my couplet very well. Rod
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your poem serenading the last living rose. I like your reference: "Those crimson petals like a Jewish star." (That is priceless!). Your poem flows and rhymes well and your artwork choice enhances your message. I have no suggestions for any changes. Excellent poem!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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I enjoyed reading your poem serenading the last living rose. I like your reference: "Those crimson petals like a Jewish star." (That is priceless!). Your poem flows and rhymes well and your artwork choice enhances your message. I have no suggestions for any changes. Excellent poem!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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I am thrilled you enjoyed my poem so much. Many thanks for your high praise and those six bright stars. Rod
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Best wishes!
Comment from lyenochka
The photograph is beautiful! I can almost smell the rose looking at that. Your sonnet form is perfectly rendered. The repetition of "swiftly" in the penultimate line emphasizes the brevity of physical beauty. But I wondered about the last line about "use our eyes" because our eyes only see the ephemeral beauty. It's with our mind and memories that we can continue to see the beauty after it is gone.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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The photograph is beautiful! I can almost smell the rose looking at that. Your sonnet form is perfectly rendered. The repetition of "swiftly" in the penultimate line emphasizes the brevity of physical beauty. But I wondered about the last line about "use our eyes" because our eyes only see the ephemeral beauty. It's with our mind and memories that we can continue to see the beauty after it is gone.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much, lyenochka, for your praise of my sonnet and the photo. Your point about the last line is well-taken. Rod
Comment from Daylily
A striking photograph to accompany your excellent posting. The poem's rhyme is excellent and the senses are well-stimulated with references like sun-filled autumn day, crimson petals, and a sweet bouquet wafting. Very nice, indeed!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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A striking photograph to accompany your excellent posting. The poem's rhyme is excellent and the senses are well-stimulated with references like sun-filled autumn day, crimson petals, and a sweet bouquet wafting. Very nice, indeed!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much, daylily, for your high praise of my sonnet. Rod
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rod,
You've written a marvelous sonnet for the last rose of summer
with wonderful imagery and excellent rhymes.
Excellent use of language avoiding the stiff repetition
seen in many sonnets.
I like wrap around enjambment, and the single word "None!" in line eight.
The first line of the couple caused me to hesitate a bit:
"Since Beauty blossoms swiftly, swiftly dies"
It seems there is an assumed "then" before swiftly which, if used, would distort the meter. Perhaps an em dash could provide the pause.
In any case, a clear six in my estimation.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Hello Rod,
You've written a marvelous sonnet for the last rose of summer
with wonderful imagery and excellent rhymes.
Excellent use of language avoiding the stiff repetition
seen in many sonnets.
I like wrap around enjambment, and the single word "None!" in line eight.
The first line of the couple caused me to hesitate a bit:
"Since Beauty blossoms swiftly, swiftly dies"
It seems there is an assumed "then" before swiftly which, if used, would distort the meter. Perhaps an em dash could provide the pause.
In any case, a clear six in my estimation.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you, Robert, for this marvelous review of my sonnet and those six bright stars. Rod
Comment from Ben Colder
I raise roses and find them to be an excellent flower. There are many type of Roses, and each are special in their own way. Much like people. Thanks for sharing your poem and photo. Looks like an America Beauty.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I raise roses and find them to be an excellent flower. There are many type of Roses, and each are special in their own way. Much like people. Thanks for sharing your poem and photo. Looks like an America Beauty.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Hi, Ben, I really appreciate your sharing my sonnet. My father loved roses and had rose gardens at every house he owned. I have no idea what this rose is, but I like the name American Beauty. Rod
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Rod,
This is a good poem of both thanks and lament. Thank for the rose's beauty and sorrow that it has such a short life. The couplet seems to be a poetic way to say 'Stop and smell the roses.
Although spacing between each line make it easier to read, it also makes it harder to tell it is a sonnet unless you look carefully for the rhyme scheme and pay attention to the description line of the poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Hi Rod,
This is a good poem of both thanks and lament. Thank for the rose's beauty and sorrow that it has such a short life. The couplet seems to be a poetic way to say 'Stop and smell the roses.
Although spacing between each line make it easier to read, it also makes it harder to tell it is a sonnet unless you look carefully for the rhyme scheme and pay attention to the description line of the poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you for sharing and praising my sonnet, Joan. As for spacing, Advanced Editor would not let me separate stanzas and Basic would not let me increase size of font. Rod
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, The Last Rose of Summer, has the proper formatting and creates a genuine mourning in me for these glimpses of beauty which we take for granted when in bloom and only when gone realize their frailty.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This sonnet, The Last Rose of Summer, has the proper formatting and creates a genuine mourning in me for these glimpses of beauty which we take for granted when in bloom and only when gone realize their frailty.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Today we had a perfect day for appreciating those blossoms that still remain. Many thanks, Bill, for sharing my sonnet. Rod
Comment from rama devi
Excellent sonnet! I love the theme and the effective closing couplet, especially. Excellent personification, rhyming and meter. Superb phonetics with the consonance of S ,M and L in the first seven lines:
What say thee, Rose, this sun-filled autumn day
As you recline against that mortared wall?
Your kin have left this garden, passed away.
Though you're still here, it's Death you can't forestall.
Comma suggestions:
Those crimson petals(,) like a Jewish star
And fully opened to the midday sun(,)
Clever French rhyme here:
Will soon be saying weakly au revoir.
Nice alliteration of B and S and consonance of L, and W here:
Your sweet bouquet, though now there's little trace,
Had wafted boldly through this rare domain.
Since Beauty blossoms swiftly, swiftly dies,
Let us reduce our pace and use our eyes.
Superb work. Bravo. Tongue candy to read aloud!
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Excellent sonnet! I love the theme and the effective closing couplet, especially. Excellent personification, rhyming and meter. Superb phonetics with the consonance of S ,M and L in the first seven lines:
What say thee, Rose, this sun-filled autumn day
As you recline against that mortared wall?
Your kin have left this garden, passed away.
Though you're still here, it's Death you can't forestall.
Comma suggestions:
Those crimson petals(,) like a Jewish star
And fully opened to the midday sun(,)
Clever French rhyme here:
Will soon be saying weakly au revoir.
Nice alliteration of B and S and consonance of L, and W here:
Your sweet bouquet, though now there's little trace,
Had wafted boldly through this rare domain.
Since Beauty blossoms swiftly, swiftly dies,
Let us reduce our pace and use our eyes.
Superb work. Bravo. Tongue candy to read aloud!
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Rama, I truly appreciate the time you spent reading and commenting on my sonnet. I am very pleased you like it so much. And many thanks for that six-star bonus. Rod
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My pleasure!
