2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "An Impossible Dream"-
10 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
That's sad that it is an "impossible" dream and yet there must have been comfort in being able to dream of the one with whom a reciprocal relationship is impossible as a sea aflame and a sun freezing.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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That's sad that it is an "impossible" dream and yet there must have been comfort in being able to dream of the one with whom a reciprocal relationship is impossible as a sea aflame and a sun freezing.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much big sister. I hope you have a wonderful week ahead.
Love
Marival
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, sometimes our love is not returned in the same way, though our love may not diminish it does help us to move on, a wonderful tanka poem, very well presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Excellent, sometimes our love is not returned in the same way, though our love may not diminish it does help us to move on, a wonderful tanka poem, very well presented****kahpot
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thank you, kym I appreciate your kind review
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
imposibles <-- imposSibles
I dreamt you love me <-- dreamt is past tense, should 'love' be past tense to?
other than that, nice dreamy tanka
good imagery
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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imposibles <-- imposSibles
I dreamt you love me <-- dreamt is past tense, should 'love' be past tense to?
other than that, nice dreamy tanka
good imagery
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you! It's fixed. :)
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I feel all of the reviews I wrote in response to your poetry are all the same. It's because you're so good, I have nothing but admiration for you. Maybe if you wrote a horrible poem, I'd have something to say. I doubt you're capable of writing a horrible poem. Thank you for sharing your God given talent with us.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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I feel all of the reviews I wrote in response to your poetry are all the same. It's because you're so good, I have nothing but admiration for you. Maybe if you wrote a horrible poem, I'd have something to say. I doubt you're capable of writing a horrible poem. Thank you for sharing your God given talent with us.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Aw.. thank you, Barbara, you are too kind.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
you use the best artwork my friend... your presentation is always top notch-exceptional.
These words that you couple with your images, is for me, the moment a thought takes hold and slows the action of time, while making the breath a little more interim within its desire.
The tanka is yet another one of your works that demand me to flow within its rhythm, to linger in the intentions of the original thought manifesting this pause in time... yes, a captured thought, floating in daydreams!
You are very in touch with your emotions and your articulate them with a touch of magic and finesse.
Stunning!
With our thoughts we create...
all possibilities.
Warm regards,
James.
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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Hi MariVal,
you use the best artwork my friend... your presentation is always top notch-exceptional.
These words that you couple with your images, is for me, the moment a thought takes hold and slows the action of time, while making the breath a little more interim within its desire.
The tanka is yet another one of your works that demand me to flow within its rhythm, to linger in the intentions of the original thought manifesting this pause in time... yes, a captured thought, floating in daydreams!
You are very in touch with your emotions and your articulate them with a touch of magic and finesse.
Stunning!
With our thoughts we create...
all possibilities.
Warm regards,
James.
â?â?â?â?â?â?
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you, James. It's a treat to read your reviews, always so detailed and insightful. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Abracitos y besitos
Marival
"Allow nature's peace to flow into you as sunshine flows into trees." -John Muir
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your tanka poem- excellent picture presentation - beautiful girl dreaming- good use of metaphors painting - frozen sun - burning ocean - for dreaming- perhaps' 'while 'dreaming ? Take a peek at your syllable count ? 7=. 9? Love me or loved me? Good job - hug
Yep you are right- I was reading impossibilities - not impossibles - while dreaming impossibles -
is correct - in your notes
You wrote â??I dreamt you â??loved meâ?? ( grammar good)!in the poem you wrote â?? love me? Good job
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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I like your tanka poem- excellent picture presentation - beautiful girl dreaming- good use of metaphors painting - frozen sun - burning ocean - for dreaming- perhaps' 'while 'dreaming ? Take a peek at your syllable count ? 7=. 9? Love me or loved me? Good job - hug
Yep you are right- I was reading impossibilities - not impossibles - while dreaming impossibles -
is correct - in your notes
You wrote â??I dreamt you â??loved meâ?? ( grammar good)!in the poem you wrote â?? love me? Good job
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
I dreamt 2
the sun froze 3
and the sea was aflame?6
for dream/ing im/po/si/bles7
I dreamt you love me5
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from aryr
This was a great tanka, Gypsy. I loved the pictures of the young woman and the dual flowers following the words. I liked that you created the words around what you created. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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This was a great tanka, Gypsy. I loved the pictures of the young woman and the dual flowers following the words. I liked that you created the words around what you created. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend. Blessed be.
Gypsy
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Ricky1024
Art works exceptional.
This also, red well and read well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing Gypsy and have a Blessed evening.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Art works exceptional.
This also, red well and read well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing Gypsy and have a Blessed evening.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from jim vecchio
Gypsy, your Tankas are soooo good! Even when your words search for an unobtainable love, the smooth look of the fonts and colorful accompanying pictures make my heart smile.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Gypsy, your Tankas are soooo good! Even when your words search for an unobtainable love, the smooth look of the fonts and colorful accompanying pictures make my heart smile.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from GWHARGIS
This showed how it seems impossible for you to be lived by that certain someone. Like saying when pigs fly or when he'll freezes over. Very good. Clever use of imagery to show this. Gretchen
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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This showed how it seems impossible for you to be lived by that certain someone. Like saying when pigs fly or when he'll freezes over. Very good. Clever use of imagery to show this. Gretchen
Comment Written 25-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
