The Chaos Within
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Swing"Follow the main character in her journey.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a well written and enjoyable read. The dialogue is all very credible and skilfully builds up the characters and intrigue as the reader wonders what it is that the main protagonist doesn't yet want to reveal. Descriptive detail about the night air and sounds adds atmosphere and chapter length is just right for most reviewers. So, nothing I can see to correct at this stage. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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This is a well written and enjoyable read. The dialogue is all very credible and skilfully builds up the characters and intrigue as the reader wonders what it is that the main protagonist doesn't yet want to reveal. Descriptive detail about the night air and sounds adds atmosphere and chapter length is just right for most reviewers. So, nothing I can see to correct at this stage. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read my work!!
Have a great night
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Interesting idea about the unrestricted right to booze out with a serving of marijuana too. Those must be some cool adults, or better said irresponsible. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Interesting idea about the unrestricted right to booze out with a serving of marijuana too. Those must be some cool adults, or better said irresponsible. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next sharing.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thanks for your review!
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Thanks for your review!
