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Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "They Comfort Me"
poems inspired by Psalm 23

14 total reviews 
Comment from Paul Manton
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Hi Debi. Now the comp's. over, I can tell you there was nothing close to yours, so having voted for it I was delighted it won. Congratulations.
Well I wasn't brave enough to try a monorhyme - some of the others were frightful (I shouldn't say that) in fact I thought yours was the only good one - it didn't for example, sound like a shopping list.
And that's the point - yours was the only story, so although it kept strictly to the rhyme, it was also interesting to read. The story of the psalmist - could be King David - and then up to date with how these great hymns of faith impact us now.
Brilliant. Thank you.
Paul

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Hi Paul,
    Thank you for such kind comments about the writing and for the vote. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I was envisioning King David as i wrote it so that you for sharing your impressions and how it made you think of hims as well. I appreciate the congratulations and the encouragement.
    Debi
reply by Paul Manton on 03-Aug-2023
    Very welcome.

    Paul
Comment from royowen
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This is an excellent monorhyme dear Debi. You've outdone yourself with this one my friend, the words hit one in the face with gracious address to one who dwells in the heavens, and lives forevermore, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Hi Roy,
    Thank you for the encouraging comments. It's been a while since I posted a spiritual poem so I am happy to hear you liked it, especially since your psiritual poetry is so beautiful.
    Have a wonderful day.
    Debi
reply by royowen on 03-Aug-2023
    Well done
Comment from Faith Williams
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Congratulations, Debi, on your first-place finish! Well deserved! Always such strong verbs-love the image of 'the psalmist scribed', 'strum his lyre', setting our hearts 'ablaze', 'soothe the soul'. A lovely poem all around. Again, congratulations!

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Hi Faith,
    Thank you so much for the congratulations and the six stars! I appreciate the encouraging comments with specifics of what you liked.
    Debi
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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Author,
I loved your spiritual monorhyme poem. It makes the scriptures lyrical and important, as they are throughout the world.
Exceptional poem, author.
Good luck in the contest!
Cindy

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Hi Cindy,
    Thank you for the six stars and the gracious comments to go with them. I appreciate the good luck wishes as well.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This mono-rhyme poem, They Comfort Me, starts out with praise and leads to what God conveys. The psalms are and always have been a great inspiration to me as well.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Thank you for the great analysis. I appreciate the comment about the psalms being a great inspriation. They are enjoyable as well as instructive.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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I very much enjoyed the way you used aurally identical but visually distinct line-end rhymes here to create a well-balanced, varied monorhyme poem. kay

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
    Hi Kay,
    Thank you for the encouraging comments about the poem and what you liked about it.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Your poem is beautiful, and so well written!! I agree with your message! The old psalms really have nice poetry in them and show us how our forefathers had the same issues we have today to work through.

Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
    Hi Rhonda,
    Thank you for the sharing your insights about the psalms and how our forefathers had the same issues as we do.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I adore the hymns I used to sing in church and no one is interested in singing them anymore, but I remember them with fondness so I could identify with your words here, a well written poem for the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
    Hi Dolly,
    Thank you for sharing about your love for the hymns. I have also seen less singing of them. It's sad. I find them uplifting. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Comment from bob cullen
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That's some effort. I have trouble maintaining a rhyme for two lines and you've managed twelve. And it flowed so nicely and didn't at all seem forced. Loved the message promoted by your words.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
    Hi bob cullen,
    Thank you for the kind comments I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are lovely. They are meaningful, descriptive and
creative. I like how the author addresses each stanza in a positive tone
as the reader looks forward to the next stanza! The artwork is awesome
and compliments the theme and words of this poem.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
    Hi harmony13,
    I appreciate the kind analysis. Thank you for reading and reviewing.